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The night was as black as ink, and the icy air was thick with the smell of gunpowder and blood.

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The night was as dark as ink, and the cold air was thick with the smell of gunpowder and blood.

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For Wangjin City, this night was destined to be anything but peaceful.

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For Wangjin City, tonight was destined to be anything but peaceful.

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Wangjin First Middle School, once a campus filled with the sound of students reading, had now been turned into a solid fortress.

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Wangjin First Middle School - a campus that once echoed with the sound of reading - had now become a solid fortress.

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All the classroom windows had been sealed shut with desks and steel plates. The playground had been converted into a supply distribution center. The outer wall had been raised by nearly two meters with earth and rebar, and heavy machine guns were mounted on the watchtowers at the corners.

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Classroom windows were all sealed shut with desks and iron plates. The playground had been turned into a supply distribution center. The outer walls had been raised nearly two meters with earth and rebar, and several heavy machine guns were mounted on the guard towers at the corners.

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More than three thousand people were crammed into this small area. Only a few of them were the school's original students; most were ordinary survivors who despised the Blood God Gang's actions but had no strength to resist, and could only retreat here to huddle together for warmth.

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More than three thousand people were packed into this small area. Only a few of them were the school's original students. Most were ordinary survivors who despised the Blood God Gang's deeds but lacked the strength to resist, so they could only fall back here to huddle together for warmth.

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And now, the rattling of gunfire echoed ceaselessly along the defensive line, but it was not ringing out for zombies.

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And at this moment, gunfire was echoing densely along the defensive line - but not because of zombies.

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A shell exploded in front of the defensive line, and the blast of dirt sent two guards flying, along with their guns.

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A shell exploded in front of the defensive line, and the wave of earth it threw up sent two guards flying, guns and all.

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In the monitoring room, a young man wearing black-framed glasses, with a fair face and a refined bearing, was staring fixedly at the surveillance screen, his brows tightly knotted.

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In the surveillance room, a young man wearing black-framed glasses, with a fair face and a refined disposition, was staring hard at the surveillance screen, his brows tightly knitted.

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His name was He Siqi, the leader of Wangjin Middle School and a powerful telekinetic special ability user.

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His name was He Siqi, the leader of Wangjin Middle School, a powerful special ability user with telekinesis.

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"Xiao Qi, it's hopeless!" A middle-aged man rushed in, his face covered in soot and despair. "The Blood God Gang got their hands on infantry fighting vehicles from somewhere! Our defense line... it can't hold!"

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"Xiao Qi, we can't hold on!" A middle-aged man rushed in, his face covered in soot and despair. "The Blood God Gang got infantry fighting vehicles from somewhere! Our defensive line... it won't hold!"

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Without turning his head, He Siqi said calmly, "Have Team One and Team Two fall back. Team Three will take over. Use all the Molotov cocktails and hold them off!"

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He Siqi didn't turn around. He only said calmly, "Have Squad One and Squad Two fall back, and Squad Three move up. Use every Molotov cocktail we have to hold them off!"

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"Then, Uncle Zhou, you organize the elderly and children to evacuate first. We'll follow shortly."

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"Then, Uncle Zhou, you organize the elderly and children to evacuate first. We'll catch up shortly."

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With that, the slender young man took a deep breath, tore off his glasses, pushed open the door, and strode out.

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Then, this thin young man took a deep breath, tore off his glasses, and pushed open the door, striding out with big steps.

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At the gap in the outer wall at the far end of the playground, the outlines of two infantry fighting vehicles flickered in and out of view in the firelight, their mounted machine guns pouring a storm of bullets onto the defensive line.

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At the gap in the outer wall at the end of the playground, the silhouettes of two infantry fighting vehicles flickered in and out of view amid the firelight, their mounted machine guns pouring bullets into the defensive line.

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Down below, the two infantry fighting vehicles that had been firing were seized as if by an invisible giant hand.

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The two infantry fighting vehicles that were firing were seized as if by an invisible giant hand.

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The next second, they were slammed over onto the ground, their undersides facing the sky, their wheels still spinning uselessly.

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The next second, they were violently flipped over onto the ground, their undersides facing the sky, their wheels still spinning in the air.

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A cheer erupted along the defensive line, but He Siqi showed not the slightest sign of relief.

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A cheer erupted from the defensive line, but there was not a hint of relief on He Siqi's face.

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His face suddenly turned deathly pale, and his body swayed, barely able to stay upright.

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His complexion suddenly turned deathly pale. His body swayed, and he could barely stay on his feet.

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"Retreat..." He had just begun to speak when an ear-splitting cannon blast cut him off.

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"Fall back..." He had just opened his mouth when a deafening cannon blast cut him off.

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A shell scored a direct hit on the simple perimeter wall, blasting a huge breach through it. Amid the broken bricks and smoke, the form of a main battle tank slowly ground its way over the rubble, its turret rotating until it pointed directly at the despairing He Siqi and the others.

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The simple defensive wall was blown open with a huge breach by a direct artillery hit. Through the broken bricks and dust, the figure of a main battle tank slowly rolled over the rubble. Its turret swung around, aiming directly at the despairing He Siqi and the others.

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It's over.

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It was over.

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In He Siqi's eyes, there was only the ever-enlarging muzzle. He had no strength left even to dodge.

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In He Siqi's eyes, there was nothing left but that ever-enlarging gun muzzle. He didn't even have the strength to dodge.

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But at that life-or-death instant, a dark figure suddenly appeared and yanked He Siqi aside.

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But at this critical moment, a dark shadow suddenly appeared and yanked He Siqi to the side.

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The two of them rolled several times. The shell exploded two meters behind them, the blast wave knocking over a row of obstacles.

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The two of them rolled several times, and the shell exploded two meters behind them, the blast wave toppling a row of obstacles.

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He Siqi's ears were ringing. He barely managed to lift his head and saw that the man had a crew cut and a steady gaze.

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He Siqi's ears were ringing. He barely lifted his head and saw that the man had a crew cut and steady eyes.

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"Are you all right?" Crew Cut asked.

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"You okay?" Crew Cut asked.

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Crew Cut did not answer. He only stood up and shouted into his communicator, "Target confirmed. Take it out for me!"

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Crew Cut didn't answer. He just got up and shouted into his communicator: "Target confirmed. Take it out!"

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Three seconds later, an orange-red fireball bloomed atop the tank.

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Three seconds later, a ball of orange-red fire erupted atop the tank.

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Meanwhile, a huge gap had already been torn in the perimeter wall of the Tenglong Martial Arts Hall.

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Meanwhile, the wall of the Tenglong Martial Arts Hall had already been breached with a large gap.

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A middle-aged woman wearing a bulletproof vest and short ear-length hair stood atop an infantry fighting vehicle she had flipped over, blood still dripping from her hand.

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A middle-aged woman wearing a bulletproof vest, with short hair cut to her ears, stood on top of an infantry fighting vehicle she had overturned, blood still dripping from her hands.

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Zhao Jinshu, leader of the Tenglong Martial Arts Hall survivor group.

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Zhao Jinshu, the leader of the Tenglong Martial Arts Hall survivor group.

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Her special ability was enormous strength, or rather, strength so immense it was absurd.

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Her special ability was enormous strength - or rather, an absurdly immense amount of physical power.

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But even so, after flipping and smashing several infantry fighting vehicles, she was nearly at her limit.

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But even so, after overturning and smashing several infantry fighting vehicles, she was already nearly at her limit.

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And now, in the darkness at the edge of her vision, two tanks were slowly grinding along the road, the roar of their engines echoing through the night like a death knell.

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And now, at the edge of her vision in the darkness, two tanks were slowly rolling across the road, their engines roaring through the night like death knells.

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Watching this, Zhao Jinshu clenched her fists, but all she felt was helplessness.

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Watching this, Zhao Jinshu clenched her fists but felt only helplessness.

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A tank was simply not something that flesh and blood could resist.

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Tanks were simply not something flesh and blood could contend with.

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Looking at the muzzles aimed at the martial arts hall, despair filled her eyes.

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Looking at the gun barrel aimed at the martial arts hall, despair showed in her eyes.

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A violent explosion rang out, but it was not in the direction of the martial arts hall.

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A violent explosion sounded - but not in the direction of the martial arts hall.

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A huge hole burst open on the flank of the lead tank, its tracks snapped, and the entire vehicle listed to a stop.

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A large hole burst open in the side of the lead tank. Its track snapped, and the entire vehicle tilted to a stop.

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Zhao Jinshu whipped her head around.

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Zhao Jinshu whirled around.

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On a pile of ruins a hundred meters away, a young man was carrying a shoulder-fired anti-tank rocket launcher. He let out a whistle, the corner of his mouth lifting slightly.

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A hundred meters away atop the ruins, a young man shouldered a man-portable anti-tank rocket launcher. He let out a whistle, the corners of his mouth curling up.

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"Ha! Now this is satisfying!"

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"Whoo! This is way more fun!"

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Luo Yi sat on a leather sofa. On the table before him lay a handkerchief, and on the handkerchief rested a small crystal emitting a faint blue glow.

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Luo Yi sat on a leather sofa. Before him lay a handkerchief, and on the handkerchief rested a small crystal emitting a faint blue glow.

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He looked like a boy of fifteen or sixteen, his features even handsome, but his eyes held a coldness and arrogance completely out of step with his age.

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He appeared to be a fifteen- or sixteen-year-old youth, his features even handsome by most standards, but his eyes carried a coldness and arrogance that did not match his age in the slightest.

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He gently stroked the facets of the blue crystal, a smile on his lips.

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He gently stroked the facets of the blue crystal, a smile at the corner of his mouth.

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Without it, he would still be sitting in that boring elite middle school classroom, listening to a bunch of empty-headed teachers drone on about "study hard."

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If it weren't for this disaster, he would still be sitting in that boring elite junior high classroom, listening to a bunch of empty-headed teachers drone on about "study hard,"

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In front of those two shortsighted good-for-nothing parents who couldn't even make money except by selling their physical labor, he would have to act like an obedient, sensible child.

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and having to act like an obedient, sensible child in front of those two shortsighted, worthless parents who could only earn money by selling their physical labor.

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For him, this catastrophe was not the end of the world, but a rebirth.

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This disaster, to him, was not doomsday - it was a rebirth.

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He had gained the strongest special ability that no one else had. He was the first to discover that crystals could be consumed in a specific order of colors.

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He possessed the strongest special ability no one else had. He was the first to discover that crystals could be consumed in a specific color order.

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With his intelligence and wits, he had become the most powerful existence in Wangjin City in just two short months.

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With his intelligence and talent, in just two months he had become the strongest existence in Wangjin City.

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This was what the correct world should look like.

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This was what a correct world should look like.

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Emperors ascend the throne over piles of bones; heroes are deified over the backs of the mediocre.

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Emperors ascend their thrones treading on corpses; heroes are deified by trampling over the mediocre.

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A genius like him should naturally trample over everyone and become that supreme, sole victor.

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A genius like him was meant to stand above everyone else, to become that supreme, sole winner.

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He looked at the deep blue crystal on the coffee table, and the corner of his mouth curved into a cruel arc.

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He looked at the faint blue crystal on the tea table, a cruel arc curling at his lips.

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Soon. Once he devoured several thousand more people, he would be able to attempt to receive even greater power and complete a further transformation.

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Soon. As long as he devoured a few thousand more people, he could attempt to accept even greater power and complete his next transformation.

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As for those weaklings he had killed or abandoned? History would only be written by the victors.

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As for those weaklings he had killed or discarded? History would only be written by victors.

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Once his power was stabilized, if he casually threw out some scraps, no matter how loudly those worthless things cursed him now, they would come swarming around him, shouting "Long live!" and praising his greatness and his helplessness.

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Once he stabilized his power, he could casually toss out some leftovers. No matter how loudly those wastes cursed him now, when the time came they would naturally swarm around him, hailing him with shouts of "long live," praising his greatness and his hard choices.

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That was the truth of heroes. People without power and resources did not even have the qualifications to give others the resources to save them.

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That was the truth about heroes. Those without power and resources didn't even have the right to offer others the resources needed to save them.

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So no matter what methods he specifically used, as long as he seized the most resources,

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So no matter what specific methods he used, as long as he seized the most resources,

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then later, when he casually tossed a bowl of food to those garbage people who were about to starve to death, those garbage people would still be grateful for his great mercy.

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then in the future, when he casually threw a bowl of rice to those starving pieces of trash, those pieces of trash would still be grateful for his immense kindness.

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As for those idiots who were always thinking about saving people and whom he had killed, heh, future history books would only write about how blind and irrational they were.

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As for those fools he had killed - the ones who thought about saving people every day - heh, future history books would only write about how blind and irrational they were.

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And he, Luo Yi, emperor of the new era—oh, no, god of the new era—had simply had no other choice, and had killed those idiots only out of sheer helplessness.

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And he, Luo Yi, the emperor of the new era - oh no, the god of the new era - he had simply had no other choice, and so, under extreme helplessness, he had killed those fools.

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However, just as he was immersed in the imperial dream he had constructed, his brows suddenly furrowed.

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However, just as he was immersed in the emperor's dream he had built, his brow suddenly furrowed.

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The life links with Zhu Er and Zhang San... had broken?

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Zhu Er and Zhang San's life links... severed?

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It was those survivors outside the city?

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Was it that group of survivors outside the city?

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Luo Yi's expression instantly darkened, and regret and remorse flooded his heart.

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Luo Yi's face instantly darkened, regret and vexation surging in his heart.

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He should have been on guard when Zhao Si got into trouble, but he had been confident that his combat vehicles were enough. Now he had wasted two of his precious "parasitic eggs" for nothing.

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When Zhao Si had met with trouble, he should have been on alert. But he had been arrogant enough to think the armored vehicles were sufficient. Now he had wasted two of his precious "parasitic eggs" for nothing.

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But immediately after, there was an even sharper stabbing pain.

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But immediately after, an even more intense stabbing pain came.

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Wang Wu... was dead too?!

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Wang Wu... dead too?!

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Luo Yi sprang to his feet from the sofa, his eyes full of shock and uncertainty.

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Luo Yi suddenly stood up from the sofa, his eyes full of shock and uncertainty.

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No!

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Something was wrong!

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"Rumble—"

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"KABOOM——"

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A heaven-shaking boom cut off his thoughts.

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A thunderous crash that shook heaven and earth interrupted his thoughts.

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"All units, attention. Frontal breach complete. 'Soldier Bees' are entering the field. Beginning cleanup."

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"All units, attention. Frontal demolition complete. 'Soldier Bees' are entering. Begin cleanup."

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Gu Changchuan's calm voice rang out over the communication channel.

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Gu Changchuan's calm voice sounded over the communication channel.

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After greeting the Blood God Gang's visitors with high-explosive warheads, Gu Changchuan had no intention of stopping.

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After greeting the Blood God Gang's visitors with high-explosive warheads, Gu Changchuan had no intention of letting up.

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Since the other side had come to his doorstep to provoke him, there was naturally no reason for him not to return the favor.

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Since the other side had come to provoke him on their own initiative, he naturally had every reason to return the courtesy.

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Speed is the soldier's asset. Once battle had begun, there was absolutely no reasoning in only ever being passively beaten.

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Speed was paramount in war. Now that the battle had begun, there was absolutely no reason to remain on the defensive and take hits.

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Especially after learning that Wangjin Middle School and the Tenglong Martial Arts Hall had also been attacked at the same time, he immediately made his decision.

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Especially after learning that Wangjin Middle School and the Tenglong Martial Arts Hall had been attacked at the same time, he made his decision at once.

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Crew Cut and A Hao would each lead a squad of elite fighters to provide rescue. Old Song would remain to guard the camp. And he himself would take the remaining main force and the self-propelled mortar-howitzer and strike straight at the heart of the enemy!

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Crew Cut and A Hao each led an elite squad to the rescue, Old Song stayed behind to guard the camp, and he himself took the remaining main force and the self-propelled mortar-howitzer to strike straight at the enemy's heart!

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Outside the Blood God Gang's headquarters building, thousands of zombies that had been attracted to the area and hundreds of gang members fell in swaths under the laser volleys of the "Soldier Bee" drone swarm, like wheat being scythed down.

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Outside the Blood God Gang headquarters building, thousands of attracted zombies and hundreds of gang members fell in swaths like mown wheat under the concentrated laser fire of the "Soldier Bee" drone swarm.

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High-explosive grenades blasted the building's defensive fortifications to pieces.

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High-explosive shells blasted the building's fortifications to pieces.

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A Soldier Bee laser drone locked onto a shadowed area of the building. In its thermal imaging, a blurry human figure had nowhere to hide.

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A Soldier Bee laser drone locked onto a shadowed area at the base of the building. In the thermal imager, a blurry human figure had nowhere to hide.

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[Target locked, Wang Wu.] Ling Yu's voice was as steady as ever.

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[Target locked: Wang Wu.] Ling Yu's voice was as steady as ever.

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The next second, a high-energy laser fell from the sky and precisely pierced through the man's skull.

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The next second, a high-energy laser descended from the sky and precisely pierced through that person's skull.

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However, just as the Blood God Gang's defense line was about to collapse, a sudden change occurred.

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However, just as the Blood God Gang's defense line was about to collapse, something unexpected happened.

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The eyes of those gang members who had already begun to flee turned blood-red, and their faces twisted into crazed expressions. Without fear of death, they charged toward Gu Changchuan's forces.

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The gang members who had already begun to flee suddenly had their eyes turn blood-red. Mad, contorted expressions twisted their faces as they charged fearlessly at Gu Changchuan's forces.

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Even more eerily, they seemed to have lost all sense of pain. Even when electromagnetic rounds pierced their limbs, they still struggled on the ground, trying to bite and tear at everything with their teeth.

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Even more bizarrely, they seemed to have lost their sense of pain. Even when electromagnetic rounds tore through their limbs, they still struggled on the ground, trying to bite and tear at everything with their teeth.

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"Their condition is wrong!" Gu Changchuan immediately judged the situation. "Contain them as much as possible, and if it truly can't be done, shoot to kill on the spot!"

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"Something's wrong with them!" Gu Changchuan immediately assessed the situation. "Try to restrain them. If there's no other way, shoot them on the spot!"

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And at that moment, the alarm on the building's perimeter also went off—the surrounding zombies were gathering toward them.

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And just then, the alarm around the building also went off - the zombies in the vicinity were converging on this place.

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There were even two enormous second-stage mutants sprinting over from a distant street.

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Two massive second-stage mutants were even charging over from a distant street.

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"Holy shit!" A Hao's voice came over the communication channel. "Report! After we finished off the gang members attacking the middle school, a whole horde of zombies suddenly appeared all around us!"

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"Holy crap!" A Hao's voice came through the communication channel. "Report! After we finished off the attacking gang members over here at the middle school, a huge horde of zombies suddenly appeared all around!"

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"Same at the martial arts hall!" Crew Cut's voice followed immediately.

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"The martial arts hall is the same!" Crew Cut's voice followed right after.

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Gu Changchuan did not panic. He said very calmly,

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Gu Changchuan didn't panic. He said very calmly,

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"All teams, hold steady. After you've dealt with the enemies on the perimeter, converge on me.

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"All squads, hold steady. Once you've dealt with the enemies on the perimeter, converge on my position.

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To the two survivor leaders—if you still have strength to spare, please help us hold back the corpse tide. I'll go deal with the source of the trouble."

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Two survivor leaders - if you still have strength to spare, please help us hold back the corpse tide. I'm going to deal with the source of the trouble."

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A hoarse female voice came over the comms: "Understood. Please make sure you kill that little bastard."

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A hoarse female voice came through the communicator. "Understood. Make sure you kill that brat."

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Immediately after, He Siqi's voice, weak but resolute, sounded as well: "...I'm fine too. We'll leave the Blood God Gang side to you."

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Immediately after, He Siqi's voice sounded - weak in breath but firm in tone. "...I'm good too. We'll leave the Blood God Gang to you."

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"Move!" Gu Changchuan no longer hesitated. With ten team members, he shot like a dagger straight toward the top floor of the building.

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"Let's go!" Gu Changchuan didn't hesitate any longer. Leading ten team members, he drove straight up to the top floor of the building like a sharp blade.

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Office building, top floor.

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Top floor of the office building.

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Luo Yi stood there, hands in his pockets, his expression calm again.

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Luo Yi stood there, hands in his pockets, his expression already calm again.

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Scattered on the floor before him were several shriveled corpses of his own men.

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Scattered on the floor in front of him were several shriveled corpses - his own people.

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"So you're Luo Yi?" Gu Changchuan walked through the door, his short blade held across his chest.

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"You're Luo Yi?" Gu Changchuan walked through the door, his short blade held in front of him.

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The boy tilted his head and sized up the group of invaders in their powerful gear.

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The youth tilted his head, sizing up the group of invaders clad in powerful gear.

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"Someone here to settle accounts with you." Gu Changchuan's tone carried a chilling killing intent.

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"The people who've come to settle accounts with you." Gu Changchuan's tone was thick with murderous intent.

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"Settle accounts?" Luo Yi laughed, a smile that looked extraordinarily out of place on the boy's face. "What did I do wrong? I just made everything more efficient. Is that also a mistake?

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"Settle accounts?" Luo Yi laughed. The smile looked utterly incongruous on the youth's face. "What did I do wrong? I only made everything more efficient. Is that also a crime?

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Worthless things that temporarily produce no value are eliminated by the survival of the fittest among themselves, leaving the individuals fit to live—what's wrong with that?"

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Wastes that can't produce value for now - I let survival of the fittest determine which individuals deserve to live. What's wrong with that?

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"I save those qualified to trade with me, deal with the trash who would only drag everyone into the abyss, and then select the strong who have been tempered by suffering. Finally, I build a group with hope and resilience."

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I save those who are qualified to trade with me, dispose of those wastes who would only drag everyone into the abyss, then pick out the strong who have been tempered by hardship, and finally build a group with hope and resilience."

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He spread his arms wide, as though embracing his ideal.

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He spread his arms wide, as if embracing his ideal.

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"Have you ever read history? Which emperor of any dynasty did not do exactly this?

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"Have you read history? Which emperor of any dynasty didn't do the same?

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This is necessary sacrifice! But you soft-hearted idiots understand nothing! You only keep yammering that human life is precious.

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This is necessary sacrifice! But you fools who indiscriminately hand out kindness understand nothing! You just shout that human lives are precious.

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But in fact, some people's lives should be more precious, more worth living. I am the truly clear-headed, rational hero!"

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But in reality, some people's lives should be more precious and more worth living. I'm the one who's truly clear-headed and rational - the hero!"

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"So you've been racking your brain for the continuation of humanity? From the moment you stopped treating people as people, don't try to use that line to make yourself look good."

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"You say you've exhausted yourself for the continuation of humanity? From the moment you stopped treating people as people, don't try to gild yourself with that line."

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His figure vanished on the spot. The next second, blade light flashed.

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His figure vanished from the spot in an instant. The next second, a flash of blade light appeared.

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A layer of bloody membrane appeared on the surface of Luo Yi's body, just barely blocking the strike, but his whole body was sent flying by the tremendous force and slammed into the wall.

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A layer of blood-red flesh membrane surfaced over Luo Yi's body, barely managing to block the strike - but the whole of him was still sent flying by the immense force and slammed into the wall.

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Then, the ten team members to the side opened fire at the same time.

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Afterward, the ten team members opened fire at the same time.

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Electromagnetic rounds tore through Luo Yi's body at high speed, but every bullet hole healed at a speed visible to the naked eye.

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Electromagnetic rounds pierced through Luo Yi's body at high speed, but every bullet hole healed at a visible rate.

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The speed was even a notch above that of the ancient nobles.

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That speed actually even surpassed the ancient nobles' by a margin.

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"It's useless," Luo Yi's voice remained calm. "I am the one chosen by the world, the hero destined to become the savior. No matter what, you cannot possibly defeat me."

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"Useless," Luo Yi's voice remained calm. "I was chosen by the world - the hero destined to become the savior. There's no way you can ever defeat me."

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As he spoke, his right arm deformed into three fleshy whips like tentacles, lashing out in three directions at once.

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As he spoke, his right arm deformed into three flesh whips like tentacles, lashing out in three directions at once.

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Two team members' energy shields were triggered, and their entire bodies were sent flying by the immense force.

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Two team members' shields activated, and they were sent flying by the tremendous force.

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Seeing this, Gu Changchuan dodged the tentacles and charged straight in. The frost on his short blade had already spread up his entire arm.

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Seeing this, Gu Changchuan dodged the tentacles and charged straight in. The frost on his short blade had already spread to his entire arm.

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He slashed down and directly severed one of the fleshy whips.

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He slashed down, directly severing one flesh whip.

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The cut surface was instantly sealed in ice, and for a time, it could not regenerate.

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The severed cross-section was instantly sealed in ice, and for a moment, it couldn't regenerate.

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But Gu Changchuan gave him no time to think. He slashed several more times, every blow wrapped in bone-piercing cold.

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But Gu Changchuan gave him no time to think. He slashed again and again, each strike carrying bone-piercing cold.

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Luo Yi was forced to retreat again and again, his regeneration speed clearly unable to keep up with the spread of the ice.

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Luo Yi was forced into repeated retreats; his regeneration speed clearly couldn't keep up with the spread of the ice.

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"Human civilization? You don't even deserve to speak that phrase!" Gu Changchuan's attacks grew fiercer, the frost on his blade nearly freezing the air.

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"Human civilization? You're not even worthy of saying that word!" Gu Changchuan's attacks grew fiercer and fiercer, the frost on his blade nearly freezing the air itself.

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"If you're saying that you garbage represent human civilization, then I only hope you go extinct sooner rather than later!"

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"If you're going to say that trash like you represents human civilization, then I only hope you go extinct as soon as possible!"

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You saw a little bit of things and learned a few vile methods, and then you started thinking you were so superior.

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You think that just because you've seen a few things and picked up a few foul tricks, you're so superior.

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You can't wait to treat those ugly ideas that should long ago have been swept into the dustbin of history as some kind of profound truth. I just find you both pathetic and laughable."

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You can't wait to treat ugly ideas that should have been swept into the scrap heap as some kind of profound insight. I just find you pitiful and laughable."

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"You don't look very old, but your thinking is rotten enough to make people sick!

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"You may look young, but your thinking is so rotten it's nauseating!

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You read history, but you can't remember to criticize it while understanding it. You've truly wasted being born in this land and this era.

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You read history but can't remember to critique it while understanding it. You've really wasted being born on this land, in this era.

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You claim to understand history, but you've completely forgotten that on this very land beneath your feet, countless martyrs once fought and died, generation after generation, resisting the bitter fruit forged by disgusting ideas exactly like yours!"

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You claim to understand history, but you've completely forgotten that on this very land beneath your feet, what countless martyrs who came one after another fought against was precisely the bitter fruit forged by disgusting thinking like yours!"

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Every one of Gu Changchuan's slashes landed precisely on the weak points of Luo Yi's defense, nearly whipping him around like a top.

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Every slash Gu Changchuan made landed precisely on the weak points of Luo Yi's defense, nearly whipping him into a spinning top.

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What can continue civilization is every person who refuses to die, the resilient and noble people themselves—not a beast like you who steals the world's name!

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What sustains civilization is every stubborn, resilient, and noble person who refuses to die - not beasts like you who steal fame from the world!

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Those who wrote true history on this land were never emperors, kings, or generals, but those silent people!

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Those who truly wrote history on this land were never emperors, generals, or ministers, but the silent people!

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And true heroes will always, always be born among them!"

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And true heroes will only ever be born among them!"

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"Nonsense!" The boy's face twisted. "You're only saying all this because you happen to be stronger than me for the moment!

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"Nonsense!" The youth's face twisted. "You say all this simply because you happen to be stronger than me for now!

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How hateful that this world has never had any fairness! I toiled and schemed, never daring to rest for a moment, and in the end I'm no match for a braggart fool like you!"

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Curse this world for having no fairness at all! I've racked my brains and never dared to stop for even a moment, and yet I come out worse than a fool like you who only talks big!"

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"Right, how hard it's been for you!"

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"Oh yes, you've suffered so much!"

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Gu Changchuan was literally angered into laughter.

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Gu Changchuan was so angry he laughed out loud.

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At that moment, countless faces flashed through his mind.

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In that moment, countless faces flashed through his mind.

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Senior Zhang Xiuming, those doctor companions who had died in foreign lands, those ordinary people who had died protecting others in the apocalypse...

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Senior Zhang Xiuming, those doctor companions who died on foreign soil, those ordinary people who died protecting others in the apocalypse...

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There were friends he had made later while working with Doctors Without Borders, and friends he had fled with after the disaster. They were all good people, and they had all already died.

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Friends he'd made later while working with Doctors Without Borders, friends he'd fled with after the disaster. They had all been good people. But they were all dead now.

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Right! Whenever heroes were mentioned, it was always so glorious, so dazzling. It always drew the envy, jealousy, and hatred of a swarm of parasites, who even slandered them as just being lucky, and lamented that they themselves simply hadn't had the luck to become heroes and enjoy adoration.

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Yes! When heroes were mentioned, it was always so glorious, so brilliant, inevitably making a bunch of parasites envious, jealous, and hateful, to the point of slandering them as "just lucky" - and regretting that they themselves didn't have the luck to become heroes and enjoy adoration.

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They never once considered what kind of risks and resolve those people had once faced in making their choices.

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They never once considered what risks and resolve these people had faced in making their choices.

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There was a very young girl whom Gu Changchuan still remembered vividly. Her looks were actually not outstanding, but she loved to smile, and her eyes always held a special light.

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There was one very young girl who had left a deep impression on Gu Changchuan to this day. Her appearance was actually unremarkable, but she loved to smile, and her eyes always held a light unlike anyone else's.

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She loved the starry sky, loved sunny days, loved desserts. But in the end, she chose to become an investigative journalist venturing deep into war zones. She said it was an important thing that, if she didn't do it, probably no one else would.

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She loved the starry sky, sunny days, and desserts. But in the end, she chose to become an investigative journalist who went deep into war zones. She said it was such an important thing that if she didn't do it, there really might be no one else who would.

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Yet on her very first day on the job, she met with misfortune, and no culprit was ever found.

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Yet on the very first day she set foot in that work, she met with misfortune - they couldn't even find the culprit.

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And the photographs she took caused barely a ripple on the internet, as if they were a joke.

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And the photos she took barely stirred even a single ripple on the internet, as if it were all a joke.

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They—all of them—had made that resolve. Including these 150 people now acting recklessly alongside Gu Changchuan. Who among them had not prepared for the possibility of dying on the very first day they set out, and not only failing to become heroes, but instead becoming laughingstocks?

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They - all of them - had made this resolve, including the 150 people currently acting recklessly alongside Gu Changchuan. Who among them hadn't prepared for the possibility of dying on their very first day out, failing to become heroes and instead becoming laughingstocks?

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In the end, it was the parasites obsessed with personal gain who went around saying that good people were just lucky, while they themselves were so hardworking and long-suffering?

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And in the end, it was the parasites who schemed only for their own gain who kept saying good people were just lucky, while they themselves were so hardworking and suffered so much?

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At this moment, Gu Changchuan could not be bothered to say another word of nonsense to Luo Yi.

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At that moment, Gu Changchuan couldn't be bothered to waste another word on Luo Yi.

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Blade light flared, aimed straight at Luo Yi's head.

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A flash of blade light rose, driving straight at Luo Yi's head.

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Knowing there was no hope of survival, a flash of crazed venom appeared in Luo Yi's eyes.

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Knowing he had no hope of survival, Luo Yi's eyes flashed with mad venom.

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He dodged abruptly, then pulled the blue crystal from his chest and shoved it into his mouth.

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He dodged abruptly, then pulled the blue crystal out from his chest and shoved it into his mouth.

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"If I can't live, none of you will live either! All of you, die with me!"

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"If I can't live, none of you will! All of you, die with me!"

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The next instant, his body suddenly swelled and elongated. His skin split, flesh churned, and in an instant he transformed into an ever-expanding worm-like monster, emitting a sickening stench.

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The next instant, his body suddenly swelled and stretched. Skin tore, flesh churned, and in an instant he became an ever-expanding, worm-like monster, emanating a nauseating stench.

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However, Gu Changchuan merely expressionlessly kicked the disgusting worm out through the hole in the top floor.

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However, Gu Changchuan, his face expressionless, simply kicked the disgusting worm out through the hole in the top floor.

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In midair, a high-explosive grenade trailing a tail flame struck precisely beside it.

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In midair, a high-explosive shell trailing flame slammed precisely down beside it.

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"Boom—"

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"Boom——"

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Blood, flesh, and flame burst into a brilliant firework in the night sky.

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Flesh and flame blossomed into a brilliant firework in the night.

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At almost the same moment, throughout the entire Wangjin City area, all the Blood God Gang core members who had entered a frenzied state also lost their lives.

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At almost the same moment, across the entire city of Wangjin, all the Blood God Gang core members who had entered a berserk state also lost their lives.

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Just as Luo Yi had said: if he could not live, no one else was allowed to live.

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Just as Luo Yi had said - if he couldn't live, no one was allowed to live.

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But this bloody victory brought no joy to anyone, only oppression.

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But this bloody victory brought no joy to anyone - only gloom.

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Gu Changchuan swiftly and decisively oversaw the subsequent consolidation and purge work.

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Gu Changchuan led the subsequent integration and cleansing work with swift and decisive efficiency.

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For safety's sake, the new joint camp was moved to an open area on the outskirts of Wangjin City.

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For safety, the new joint camp was moved to an open area on the outskirts of Wangjin City.

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He Siqi, Zhao Jinshu, and Qin Xiao became members of the provisional management committee of the joint camp.

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He Siqi, Zhao Jinshu, and Qin Xiao became members of the joint camp's provisional management committee.

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Thanks to the reactivation of a small thermal power plant on the outskirts of Wangjin City, the basic units of the "Hive" were also successfully established here, providing the camp with stable electricity and basic defense.

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Thanks to the reactivation of a small thermal power plant on the outskirts of Wangjin, the Hive's basic units were also successfully built here, providing the camp with stable electricity and basic defense.

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Gu Changchuan sat on the high watchtower of the camp, looking at the city skyline in the distance.

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Gu Changchuan sat on the watchtower high above the camp, gazing at the distant city's silhouette.

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The setting sun dyed that strange ice-crystal cloud layer pale gold, giving the apocalypse a rare sense of peace.

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The setting sun dyed that strange ice-crystal cloud layer a pale gold - giving it, after all, a kind of rare tranquility amid the apocalypse.

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However, just at the final moment before the day ended, when the last rays of the setting sun were about to be swallowed by darkness—

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However, at the final moment when the day was about to end and the last glow of the sunset was about to be swallowed by darkness,

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"Ang—"

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"Aooo——"

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A dragon's roar that seemed to come from the primordial wilderness rang out across heaven and earth!

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A Dragon's Roar that seemed to come from the depths of ancient primordial time resounded across heaven and earth!

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At the far edge of their vision, in the center of Wangjin City, a silhouette too vast to imagine was slowly rising from the city ruins!

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At the edge of their vision, in the center of Wangjin City, a silhouette so immense it was hard to imagine was slowly rising from the ruins of the city!

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It was a creature made of pure crystal, its body winding like a dragon, its scales refracting dreamlike luster in the setting sun.

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It was a creature made of pure crystal, its body winding like a dragon, its scales refracting a dreamlike luster in the sunset.

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It propped open the sky, like a giant crystal pillar connecting heaven and earth. If it had not been slowly ascending, people would not even have been able to tell whether it was a living thing.

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It pushed open the sky, like a giant crystal pillar connecting heaven and earth. If it weren't slowly ascending, people couldn't even have told whether it was a living thing.

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Just as everyone was dazed by this miraculous sight, A Hao suddenly pointed in another direction, his voice trembling with terror.

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Just as everyone was spellbound by this miracle-like sight, A Hao suddenly pointed in another direction, voice trembling with fear.

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They saw that, in the direction from which they had come, a vast expanse of clouds had, at some unknown time, been dyed a shocking crimson!

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Looking over, in the direction they had come from, a vast expanse of cloud had at some point been dyed an alarming scarlet!

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The crimson spread madly like a plague, reaching the horizon almost in the blink of an eye.

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That scarlet expanded wildly like a plague, and in almost the blink of an eye, it had spread across the horizon.

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But when the red clouds arrived above Wangjin City, they struck an invisible wall and were firmly blocked by that ice-crystal cloud layer, unable to advance even an inch further.

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And when the red cloud reached the sky above Wangjin City, it seemed to hit an invisible wall, firmly stopped by that ice-crystal-like cloud layer, unable to advance even an inch.

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Only then did the tiny humans finally realize that the inconceivable crystal dragon seemed to be roaring furiously at that crimson sea of clouds!

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Only then did the tiny, insignificant people finally realize - that inconceivable crystal giant dragon seemed to be roaring in fury at that scarlet sea of clouds!

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Gu Changchuan's heart sank violently.

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Gu Changchuan's heart sank heavily.

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He looked at the Sentinel Robot beside him and shouted into the communicator, "Zhuangsheng! What's the situation over in Yuanjiang?!"

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He looked at the Sentinel Robot beside him and shouted into the communicator: "Zhuangsheng! What's the situation in Yuanjiang?!"

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But this time, the voice of that AI who always replied instantly did not sound right away.

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But this time, the voice of that AI which always responded instantly did not come immediately.

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Then, a calm electronic voice so steady it was frightening slowly came through.

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Then, an electronic voice so calm it was unnerving slowly came through.

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[The flower has bloomed. The war has begun.]

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[The flowers have bloomed. The war has begun.]