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Xinzhou District, boundary defense line.

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Xinzhou District, border defense line.

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The rumble of tanks and the roar of heavy machine guns interwove into a thunder of steel.

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The roar of tanks and the howl of heavy machine guns wove together into a single chorus of steel fury.

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Twelve 99A main battle tanks ground over the concrete barricades, their 125mm smoothbore cannons letting out dull booms.

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Twelve 99A main battle tanks rumbled over the concrete barricades, their 125mm smoothbore guns letting out dull thunder.

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Armor-piercing shells tore through the fog, plowing bloody furrows through the crystallized corpse tide.

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Armor-piercing rounds tore through the fog, plowing bloody swaths through the crystallized corpse tide.

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But those furrows were refilled within half a second.

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But the gaps were refilled within half a second.

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Crystallized zombies surged out of every street and every building in Xinzhou District like a blue flood.

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Crystallized zombies poured out like a blue flood from every street and every building in Xinzhou District.

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Blue cold light burned in their eye sockets, their limbs skimming across the ground in bestial gaits.

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Blue cold light burned in their eye sockets, and their limbs skimmed across the ground in beastlike strides.

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Crystallized Hundred Eyes, Abyssal Centipedes, and even Pilgrims had appeared in the midst of the corpse tide.

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Crystallized Hundred Eyes, Abyssal Centipedes, and even Pilgrims—all appeared in the middle of the corpse tide.

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"Too many!" a team member roared. "At least ten times more than before!"

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“Too many!” a team member shouted. “At least ten times more than before!”

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"Tanks forward, suppress them! Armored vehicles, seal the flanks!" Chen Mo's orders were calm and swift. "Artillery positions, cover target zones C-3 through C-7!"

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“Tanks, advance and suppress! Armored vehicles, seal the flanks!” Chen Mo's orders were calm and rapid. “Artillery positions, cover target zones C-3 through C-7!”

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Wearing the "Dawn" exoskeleton, he raised the priority-issued electromagnetic machine gun and suppressed a vast swath of the corpse tide single-handedly.

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Wearing the “Dawn” exoskeleton, he gripped a priority-issued electromagnetic machine gun and directly suppressed a massive stretch of the corpse tide.

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Under the hypersonic rain of the electromagnetic machine gun, crystallized carapaces were like paper, easily torn to shreds.

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The crystallized shells were like paper before the hypersonic hail of the electromagnetic machine gun, easily shredded to pieces.

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And yet the monsters surging from the pale fog seemed utterly endless.

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Yet the monsters surging out of the pale fog seemed endless.

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"Left flank! Three o'clock! First-stage mutant 'Crystal Blade' incoming!"

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“Left flank! Three o'clock! A first-stage mutant 'Crystal Blade' is coming!”

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Ahead, dozens of monsters whose arms had mutated into long crystal blades were charging at speeds far exceeding those of their kind. They even knew to use abandoned vehicles as cover, closing in on winding routes.

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Ahead, dozens of monsters whose arms had mutated into crystal long-blades were charging in at speeds far exceeding their kind's norm. They even understood how to use abandoned vehicles as cover, weaving closer in a zigzag.

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"Grenades, suppress!"

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“Grenade suppression!”

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Before Chen Mo's words faded, several rifle grenades had already whistled out, bursting a net of fire among the Crystal Blades and slowing their assault.

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Before Chen Mo's words had even faded, several rifle grenades were already howling out, bursting a net of fire among the Crystal Blade pack and stalling their advance.

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The artillery positions in the rear had also opened fire. Dozens of 152mm high-explosive shells streaked across the sky and landed precisely in Xinzhou District's forward blocks.

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The artillery positions in the rear had also opened fire. Dozens of 152mm high-explosive shells streaked across the sky and landed precisely in the forward blocks of Xinzhou District.

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A chain of continuous explosions turned the entire area upside down, shattered blue crystals scattering like hail.

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A continuous chain of explosions turned the entire area upside down, and shattered blue crystals scattered like hail.

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But the pale fog always knitted itself back together after the fire of the blasts died down, then disgorged even more monsters.

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But the pale fog always sealed itself back up quickly after the flames of the explosions died out, then spat out even more monsters.

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And just as the ground battle fell into a stalemate, everyone felt an increasingly violent tremor rising from the earth beneath their feet.

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And just as the ground battle was bogging down in a stalemate, everyone felt an increasingly violent tremor coming from the earth beneath their feet.

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From the direction of the Cold Lake Research Institute, the giant crystal serpent that had been coiled there all along finally moved.

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In the direction of the Cold Lake Research Institute, the gigantic crystal serpent that had been coiled there all along finally moved.

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A thin layer of aged crystal shell, as delicate as cicada wings, cracked and peeled away inch by inch from its colossal body.

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Upon its colossal body, a thin layer of old crystalline shell, frail as cicada wings, cracked and peeled away inch by inch.

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And what emerged from the shed shell was a brand-new, even more ferocious silhouette.

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And what emerged from the shed old shell was a brand-new, even more ferocious silhouette.

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Its size had swelled by nearly a third. The originally thick, powerful serpentine body had grown sleeker and more fluid, and the scales covering it had become a strange crystal like colored glass, shimmering with iridescent halos in the sunlight.

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Its size had swollen by nearly a third. The originally thick serpentine body had become longer and sleeker, and the scales covering it had transformed into a strange crystal, like colored glass, that rippled with iridescent halos in the sunlight.

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But the most striking change lay along its back—from nape to tail tip, two rows of flat, finlike translucent crystal wings extended symmetrically down its spine. Inside every wing membrane, intricate vein-like patterns flowed with luminous halos.

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But the most striking change lay along its spine—from the head and neck to the tail tip, two rows of flat, finlike translucent crystal wings extended symmetrically along the spine. Inside each wing membrane, fine, intricate vein-like patterns flowed with light.

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Its head was no longer a simple serpent's, either. Two crystal horns curving backward had grown from its crown, and whisker-like antennae extended from both sides of its lower jaw, trailing in the air currents.

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Its head was no longer a mere serpent's skull, either. Two backward-sweeping crystal horns had grown from the crown, and whisker-like antennae extended from either side of its lower jaw, drifting in the air currents.

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And at the roots of the crystal wings along its spine, dozens of fully crystallized humanoid silhouettes were merging into the serpent's body in an eerie manner.

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And at the roots of the crystal wings along its spine, dozens of fully crystallized human-shaped outlines were merging into the serpent's body in an uncanny manner.

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Their forms half-sunk into the crystal shell, faces turned upward, lips moving, they murmured low chants whose meaning was wholly incomprehensible.

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Their forms were half-sunk into the crystal shell, faces turned upward, lips moving, letting out low chants whose meaning was utterly unintelligible.

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With each one that merged, the luminous veins on the serpent's wing membranes brightened a degree.

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As each one merged in, the light veins on the giant serpent's wing membranes brightened a degree.

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When the final merging was complete, the serpent's crystal wings snapped open.

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When the final fusion was complete, the giant serpent's crystal wings suddenly spread wide.

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"ROOOAR—!"

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ROOOAR——!

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A roar shook the heavens. For that moment, even all the zombies on the ground battlefield and Chen Mo's men locked in combat with them came to a halt.

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A roar shook the heavens. At that moment, it even made all the zombies on the ground battlefield and Chen Mo's men locked in combat with them pause for a beat.

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An indescribable fear detonated in their hearts, making their bodies stiffen by reflex.

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An indescribable terror burst in their hearts, making their bodies instinctively go rigid.

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Then the crystal wings on the serpent's back gave a violent beat. With its absurdly massive body, it tore free of gravity, soared straight up, and raced away at tremendous speed toward the southern horizon.

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Then the crystal wings on the giant serpent's back gave one violent beat, and somehow carried that absurdly colossal body free of gravity's pull, soaring straight up into the high sky and speeding away toward the southern horizon at tremendous velocity.

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With the lesson of Linwu City before him, Ling Yu reacted almost instantly.

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With the lesson of Linwu City fresh in mind, Ling Yu reacted almost instantly.

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This attack had never been anything but a feint—they were trying to run!

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This attack had been a feint all along—they were trying to run!

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Run? Did you ask my permission?

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Run? Did you ask my opinion?

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Almost at the same moment the serpent took to the air with such defiance of reason, a dark gray phantom tore through the clouds and dove at supersonic speed—the Lightning-Chasing Shadow.

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Almost at the exact moment the giant serpent took to the air in that impossible manner, a deep-gray phantom tore through the clouds and dove at supersonic speed—the Lightning-Chasing Shadow.

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But when it was only two kilometers from the serpent—

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But just as it closed to within two kilometers of the giant serpent—

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Six black silhouettes suddenly shot out from the depths of the thick fog, charging straight into the Lightning-Chasing Shadow's flight path.

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Six black shadows suddenly shot out from deep within the thick fog, charging straight into the Lightning-Chasing Shadow's flight path.

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They were six giant eagle mutants the size of small passenger aircraft, with wingspans exceeding fifteen meters. Their bodies were encased in a smooth layer of blue crystal shell, and every flight feather on their wings was like a sharp crystal blade.

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They were six giant eagle mutants, each the size of a small airliner. Their wingspans exceeded fifteen meters, and their entire bodies were wrapped in a smooth blue crystal shell. Every flight feather of their wings was like a razor-sharp crystal blade.

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And beneath that translucent crystal shell, countless swiveling eyeballs were packed so densely that they formed the creatures' skin.

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And beneath that semitransparent crystal shell, countless endlessly rotating eyeballs were packed densely together, forming their skin.

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The crystallized giant eagles met the Lightning-Chasing Shadow fearlessly the moment they appeared, encircling it in a triangular formation. With a beat of their wings, countless fist-sized blue crystal clusters broke loose from their wingtips and shot toward the Lightning-Chasing Shadow at high speed, trailing cold light.

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The moment these crystallized giant eagles appeared, they flung themselves fearlessly at the Lightning-Chasing Shadow, converging in a three-point encirclement. With a flap of their wings, countless fist-sized blue crystal clusters detached from their wingtips and streaked toward the Lightning-Chasing Shadow at high speed, cold light trailing behind.

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Boom!

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BOOM!

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The crystal clusters detonated violently the instant they touched roads and buildings.

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The instant the crystal clusters touched roads and buildings, they detonated violently.

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Each one had enough power to blast a three-meter-wide crater into the ground.

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Each one packed enough power to blast a three-meter-wide crater into the ground.

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And the density of their volleys had sealed off most of the Lightning-Chasing Shadow's room to evade.

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And the density of their volleys nearly sealed off most of the Lightning-Chasing Shadow's evasive space.

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Boom! Boom! Boom!

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BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!

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The crystal clusters collided in midair with the decoy flares released by the drone, bursting into blinding blossoms of blue light. The violent energy shock waves even warped the air into rippling distortions.

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The crystal clusters collided midair with the decoy flares the drone had released, bursting into blinding clusters of blue light. The savage energy shockwaves even warped the air into rippling distortions.

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At the same time, Ling Yu put the drone through an extreme barrel-roll evasion, narrowly surviving the barrage.

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At the same time, Ling Yu put the drone through an extreme barrel roll, narrowly surviving the barrage.

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The nearest cluster detonated less than ten meters from the drone's belly, and the shock wave sent the Lightning-Chasing Shadow lurching violently.

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The closest crystal cluster detonated less than ten meters below the drone's belly, and the shockwave sent the Lightning-Chasing Shadow lurching violently.

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But what unsettled Ling Yu even more was these mutants' speed—they had actually kept pace with the Lightning-Chasing Shadow at Mach 2.8!

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But what rattled Ling Yu even more was these mutants' speed—they had actually kept pace with a Lightning-Chasing Shadow at Mach 2.8!

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A flash of understanding crossed Ling Yu's mind. So this was the defensive line prepared for him!

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A sudden flash of understanding went through Ling Yu's mind. This was a defensive line prepared specifically for him!

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But if they thought this could stop his pursuit, they were being far too naive.

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But if they thought this could stop his pursuit, they were being far too naive!

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SCREECH—!

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TSSSS——!

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The next second, three massive plasma rounds, like blue meteors, pierced the sky at tremendous speed and sealed off one giant eagle's path.

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The next second, three enormous plasma rounds, like blue meteors, tore across the sky at extreme speed, sealing off one giant eagle's route.

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That crystallized giant eagle didn't even have time to react before one of the plasma rounds struck it head-on.

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The crystallized giant eagle couldn't even react before one of the plasma rounds struck it head-on.

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Its hard crystal shell vaporized in an instant like thin paper, and together with the densely packed eyeballs beneath and its entire body, it was reduced to drifting ash in that blaze of blue-white light.

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The hard crystal shell on its body vaporized in an instant like thin paper, and along with the densely packed eyeballs beneath and its entire frame, all of it turned to drifting ash in that blaze of blue-white light.

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The remaining crystallized giant eagles were thrown into disarray by the sudden strike. And what awaited them was a swarm of more than ten thousand Worker Bee suicide drones surging in from every direction.

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The remaining crystallized giant eagles were thrown into complete disarray by the sudden blow, and what awaited them were over ten thousand Worker Bee suicide drones surging in from every direction.

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No tactics, no dogfighting—only the most artistic saturation self-detonation.

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No tactics. No dogfighting. Only the most artistic saturation self-destruction.

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The fire of the explosions dyed nearly the entire sky orange.

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The light of the explosions dyed nearly the entire sky orange-red.

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And against this backdrop of destruction, the giant serpent turned its head in alarm and saw a sight enough to terrify it.

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And against this backdrop of devastation, the giant serpent turned its head in alarm and saw something terrifying enough to strike fear into its heart.

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In the sky, eight dark gray phantoms identical to the previous Lightning-Chasing Shadow had arrived on the battlefield.

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In the sky, eight deep-gray phantoms identical to the previous Lightning-Chasing Shadow had arrived on the battlefield.

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Together with the original, nine dark gray blades slashed across the heavens at once, tearing through the last remnants of the explosions with unstoppable momentum, pursuing it directly!

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Together with the original one, nine deep-gray blades split the sky at once, tearing through the last remnants of the explosions in an unstoppable manner, and came straight after it!

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Maximum speed: Mach 3.5!

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Maximum speed, Mach 3.5!

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The crystal wings on the serpent's back vibrated madly at an unprecedented frequency, pushing its speed up another notch to nearly Mach 2.6.

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The crystal wings on the giant serpent's back beat frantically at an unprecedented frequency, and its speed climbed another notch, approaching Mach 2.6.

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Those wings seemed able to give it lift and thrust in a way that defied aerodynamics, but compared to the Lightning-Chasing Shadows, this speed was still far too slow!

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These crystal wings seemed to supply it with lift and thrust in a way that defied aerodynamics. But compared with the Lightning-Chasing Shadow, this speed was still far too slow!

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The nine drones, in groups of three, converged from three directions, compressing the serpent's escape route into an ever-narrowing corridor.

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Nine drones swept in from three directions in groups of three, compressing the serpent's escape route into an ever-narrowing channel.

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First assault wave.

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First round of attacks.

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Three drones launched air-to-ground missiles simultaneously, and six missiles struck the serpent's midsection in a crossfire.

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Three drones launched air-to-surface missiles simultaneously. Six missiles struck the serpent's waist and belly in a crossfire.

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The explosions blasted away large patches of its newly grown crystal scales, exposing the luminous tissue beneath.

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The explosions blew off great swaths of the newly grown crystal scales, exposing the luminous tissue within.

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The serpent let out a deafening shriek and swept its tail in a vicious arc.

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The giant serpent let out a deafening, hissing roar and swept its tail in a violent arc.

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But the nine drones were spread too wide and moving too fast—the tail swept through nothing.

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But the nine drones were spread too wide and too fast. The serpent's tail swiped at nothing.

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Then it swung its head around. The crystal horns on its skull drew slightly together, and a blue-white orb of light condensed between them.

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Then it swung its head around. The crystal horns on its crown drew slightly together, and a blue-white orb of light condensed between them.

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The next instant, several plasma jets erupted from the orb, lancing in every direction and sweeping across a vast stretch of sky.

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The next instant, several plasma jets burst from the orb, lancing in every direction and sweeping across a vast stretch of sky.

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But to Ling Yu, even this was still too slow. The drones easily evaded that round of attack.

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But to Ling Yu, this was still too slow. The drones evaded the attack with ease.

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They could even use their lasers to return fire at the same time.

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They could even fire back with their lasers at the same time.

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Nine high-energy purple lasers lanced out simultaneously.

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Nine purple high-energy lasers struck simultaneously.

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Four struck the crystal horns, shattering them into flying fragments.

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Four hit the crystal horns. The horns snapped and scattered.

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One pierced a wing membrane, and the glowing veins inside abruptly dimmed.

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One punched through a wing membrane, and the light-flowing veins suddenly dimmed.

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Two struck its body, searing deep, charred marks into the crystal scales.

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Two struck the torso, burning deep charred marks into the crystal scales.

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Maddened with pain, the serpent's body thrashed ever more violently, but the nine drones coordinated seamlessly, never giving it a chance to break through.

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Wracked with pain, the giant serpent thrashed and rolled ever more violently, but the nine drones worked in seamless coordination, never giving it a chance to open a breakthrough.

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In less than three minutes of fighting, the Soaring Serpent's gorgeous colored-glass crystal scales were already covered in cracks, and from several bloody holes, crystal blood glowing faint blue gushed out like waterfalls, raining onto the land below.

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In less than three minutes of fighting, the Soaring Serpent's magnificent colored-glass crystal scales were covered in cracks. From several bloody holes, crystal blood glowing with faint blue light gushed out like waterfalls, splashing down onto the land below.

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Seeing that it could not break free, the giant serpent let out another earth-shaking roar, then gave up on counterattacking entirely.

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Seeing that it could not break free, the giant serpent let out another earth-shattering roar, then abandoned all further counterattacks.

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The frequency of its wingbeats suddenly surged once more, and its speed approached Mach 2.8.

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The beat of its wings suddenly quickened once more, and its speed approached Mach 2.8.

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Dead ahead, a stretch of cloud with an extremely abnormal color was drawing near.

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And ahead of it, a cloud bank of highly abnormal color was drawing near.

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It was a dark red cloud.

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It was a vast dark red cloud.

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Lightning flashed and thunder rolled within the cloud, and vast silhouettes could be faintly seen gliding in its depths.

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Lightning flashed and thunder rumbled within the cloud, and vast silhouettes could be faintly seen swimming in its depths.

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It wanted to charge in and flee—to use the cloud's cover to get away!

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It wanted to charge inside and escape—use the cloud as a screen to run!

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Ling Yu saw through its intention in an instant. That cloud was clearly not right. If he let that serpent charge into it, this entire pursuit would lose all meaning.

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Ling Yu saw through its intent in an instant. That cloud bank was clearly wrong. Once this serpent got inside it, this entire pursuit would become meaningless.

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At that thought, Ling Yu steeled his heart.

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With that thought, Ling Yu steeled himself.

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The next second, on the lead Lightning-Chasing Shadow, the four vector-thrust engines at its tail erupted with unprecedented radiance, and its speed instantly broke through its limits.

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The next second, the four vectoring engines at the tail of the lead Lightning-Chasing Shadow erupted with unprecedented radiance, and its speed broke through its limits in an instant.

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The temperature of its fuselage skyrocketed under aerodynamic heating, and the radar-absorbing coating on its surface began to peel and char.

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The temperature of the fuselage shell spiked under aerodynamic heating, and the radar-absorbing coating on its surface began to peel and char.

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Then it swung around to directly in front of the Soaring Serpent and, like an arrow loosed from a bowstring, met the serpent's skull head-on!

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Then it swung around to the front of the Soaring Serpent, and like an arrow loosed from a bowstring, flew head-on straight into the giant serpent's skull!

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BOOM—!

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BOOM——!

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The violent explosion bloomed into a colossal fireball high in the sky. The shock wave wrenched the serpent's head backward, forcibly checking its forward charge.

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A violent explosion blasted a huge fireball into the high sky. The shockwave snapped the giant serpent's head back, and its forward charge was forcibly checked by the blast.

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At the same time, the other eight drones seized the chance to concentrate their fire. They emptied their missiles in a rush, blasting several more bloody holes into the serpent's body.

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At the same time, the other eight drones seized the chance to concentrate their fire. Their missiles were emptied in rapid succession, blasting several more bloody holes into the giant serpent.

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Then eight high-energy laser beams blazed at maximum power, ultimately carving the serpent's body cleanly into three segments.

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And eight high-energy laser beams bored in at maximum power, until at last they forcibly sliced the giant serpent's body into three sections.

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The crystal serpent's colossal body stiffened abruptly, and the light in its eyes rapidly dimmed.

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The crystal serpent's colossal body stiffened abruptly, and the light in its eyes dimmed swiftly.

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Finally, carrying the crystallized humans already fused into its body, it plummeted like a falling meteor toward the land below, shrouded in storm and thunder.

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Finally, carrying the crystallized people already merged into its body, it plummeted like a falling meteor, smashing toward the land below, shrouded in storm and thunder.

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Almost at the same moment, an icy system notification rang in the depths of Ling Yu's consciousness.

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Almost at the same moment, deep in Ling Yu's consciousness, a cold system notification sounded.

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[Ding! Detected: host killed mid-tier Dragon-Blood Mutant "Soaring Serpent (Colored-Glass Species)" x1. Civilization points obtained: 5000.]

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[Ding! Detected: host has slain a mid-tier Dragon-Blood Mutant, 'Soaring Serpent (Colored-Glass Species)' x1. Civilization points gained: 5000.]

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[Ding! Obtained special drop blueprint: "Dragon Bone" Bio-Graft Armor Tactical Framework Blueprint x1.]

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[Ding! Special drop blueprint obtained: 'Dragon Bone' Bio-Graft Armor tactical frame blueprint x1.]

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Immediately after, he sent the remaining eight drones down to a lower altitude, trying to lock onto the Soaring Serpent's crash coordinates so its corpse could be recovered later.

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Right after, he immediately brought the remaining eight drones down to a lower altitude, trying to lock onto the Soaring Serpent's crash coordinates so its corpse could be recovered later.

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But when the drones dove down through the clouds in pursuit, the scene in their view instantly wiped away all of Ling Yu's ease.

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However, as the drones followed it down through the cloud layer, the scene that filled their view made Ling Yu instantly cast aside every trace of ease.

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But now, this place was unrecognizable.

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But now, it was unrecognizable.

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The coastline had advanced inland for who knows how many kilometers. Turbid seawater had swallowed the former cities, leaving only the upper halves of high-rises exposed, like a cluster of gray tombstones.

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The coastline had pushed inland for who knows how many kilometers. Murky seawater had swallowed the former cities, leaving only the upper halves of high-rises exposed, like a field of gray tombstones.

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An unceasing storm whipped everything, and lightning struck again and again from the red clouds in the distance.

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An unending storm whipped everything in sight, and lightning continually struck down among the red clouds in the distance.

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And among those half-submerged ruins, the shadows of mountain-sized colossal beasts flickered past from time to time.

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And among the half-submerged ruins, the shadows of colossal beasts, each the size of a mountain, flickered past from time to time.

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The serpent's corpse was at that moment falling toward the edge of one ruined city.

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The giant serpent's corpse, at this moment, was falling toward the edge of a ruined city.

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But just as it was about to crash into the ground—that "city" opened a giant maw.

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But just as it was about to smash into the ground—that “city” opened a gaping mouth.

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Countless buildings toppled to both sides like toy blocks, revealing a bottomless, tooth-lined fissure below.

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Countless buildings toppled to either side like building blocks, revealing a colossal, bottomless maw lined with teeth beneath.

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That was no city at all. It was a colossal creature mimicking an entire city block.

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That was no city at all. It was a colossal creature that mimicked an entire city block.

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In the instant before the serpent's remains hit the ground, the giant maw snapped shut, swallowing it, along with the ground for a hundred meters around, into its belly.

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At the instant the serpent's mangled remains were about to land, the giant mouth snapped shut, swallowing them along with the ground for a hundred meters around into its belly.

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Then the giant maw slowly opened again, and the "ground" disguised as city ruins returned to stillness, as if nothing had ever happened.

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Then the giant mouth slowly opened again, and the “ground” disguised as city ruins settled back into calm, as if nothing at all had happened.

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Only the terrifying roars, rising and falling from every direction, proclaimed to Ling Yu the utter abnormality and danger of this land.

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Only the terrifying roars, rising and falling from every direction, proclaimed to Ling Yu just how profoundly abnormal and dangerous this land was.

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Ling Yu did not continue trying to attack—not because he was unwilling, but because he was unable.

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Ling Yu did not try to attack again. Not because he was unwilling, but because he couldn't.

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The energy of the eight Lightning-Chasing Shadows was nearly depleted; he had to return.

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The eight Lightning-Chasing Shadows were nearly out of power. He had to head back.

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But he had already noted this place. Whatever dared to steal his kill would one day face his revenge.

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But he had already marked this place. It dared to steal his kill—sooner or later, one day, he would come back to settle the score.

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The next second, the eight Lightning-Chasing Shadows banked around and raced back at full speed.

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The next second, the eight Lightning-Chasing Shadows reversed course and sped home at full throttle.

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Behind them, the roars rising and falling within the storm were gradually swallowed by distance.

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Behind them, the roars rising and falling in the storm were gradually swallowed up by distance.