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“Thick fog!?”

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"Thick fog!?"

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Almost instantly, Zheng Hai, standing nearby, changed expression.

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Almost instantly, Zheng Hai, who was standing off to the side, changed expression.

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Having spent several days at Dawn Shelter, Zheng Hai knew all too well what thick fog meant.

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Having spent several days at Dawn Shelter, he knew all too well what thick fog meant.

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The monsters inside it were no pushovers, and they also had the dangerous ability to cause mutations.

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The monsters inside were no pushovers, and it also had the dangerous ability to cause mutation in people.

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As for Li Dingguo, the battle-hardened old regiment commander, his pupils contracted sharply the moment he heard the words “thick fog.”

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And Li Dingguo, this battle-hardened old regiment commander, also had his pupils suddenly contract the moment he heard the words "thick fog."

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Though he had never seen it with his own eyes, Zheng Hai’s report just now had indeed placed major emphasis on this phenomenon.

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Although he had never seen it with his own eyes, the report Zheng Hai had just given did contain a key description of this phenomenon.

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Without any hesitation, he immediately issued the order: “Everyone on emergency assembly! Abandon the camp and move to the prepared positions on the east side! Move!”

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Without any hesitation, he immediately issued the order: "All hands, emergency assembly! Abandon the camp, move to the eastern reserve position! Move!"

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The order was swiftly carried out.

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The order was carried out swiftly.

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The convoy sped over rough roads, and only after more than a dozen kilometers, when it reached the vicinity of a highway toll station on the southeastern edge of Lishan City, could it be considered completely clear of the rapidly spreading fog zone.

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The convoy sped along the rugged roads until it had driven more than ten kilometers, reaching the vicinity of a highway toll station at the southeastern edge of Lishan City proper, before finally breaking completely free of that rapidly spreading fog zone.

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Everyone looked back and saw that in the direction they had come from, the entire center of Lishan City had been swallowed by milky-white thick fog, with only faint outlines of some buildings still visible.

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Everyone turned to look back, and saw that in the direction they had come, the entire center of Lishan City had already been swallowed by milky-white thick fog, with only faint outlines of some buildings visible.

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Under the night sky, the fog churned endlessly, like the breath puffed out by a colossal beast, and from time to time there came heart-stopping, piercing howls that made its unnaturalness all too clear.

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Under the night sky, the fog rolled and churned endlessly, like the breath exhaled from a giant beast's nostrils, and from within it came shrill, spine-chilling howls from time to time, heralding that something was out of the ordinary.

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Zheng Hai stood at the edge of the fog zone and looked at the “radiation shield monitor” on his wrist. The number on it had already reached “Level 1-52,” and it was still slowly rising.

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Zheng Hai stood at the edge of the fog zone, glanced at the "radiation shield monitor" on his wrist—the number on it had already reached "Level 1-52," and it was still rising slowly.

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“What does that mean?” Li Dingguo asked in a low voice.

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"What does this mean?" Li Dingguo asked in a low voice.

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[It means the mutant inside is very likely at the third stage, and a relatively powerful third-stage mutant at that. There is even a possibility of an existence beyond the third stage.]

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[It means the mutant inside is very likely at the third stage, and a fairly powerful third-stage mutant at that—possibly even something beyond the third stage.]

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Ling Yu’s tone was also somewhat grave. The scope of this fog zone had even surpassed the previous Hairui Biological “High Court Lord.”

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Ling Yu's tone was also somewhat grave. This fog zone's scope had already exceeded the level of that "High Court Lord" from Hairui Biological before.

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“I see,” Li Dingguo nodded. When Zheng Hai had made his report earlier, Li Dingguo had already learned about this classification system for monsters.

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"I see," Li Dingguo nodded. When Zheng Hai had given his report earlier, he had already learned about this kind of classification system for monsters.

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Then he continued with curiosity, “Then what kind of monster might be inside? Have you encountered it before?”

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Then, he continued curiously, "So what kind of monster could be in there? Have you encountered one before?"

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[I don’t know. We haven’t encountered fog zones too many times either, and this is the first time I’ve heard this strange howling,] Ling Yu answered honestly.

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[I don't know. We haven't encountered fog zones too many times either, and this is the first time I've heard this kind of eerie howling,] Ling Yu answered honestly.

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[Besides, my Sky Blade is also unable to penetrate this fog zone for scanning.]

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[Also, my 'Sky Blade' can't penetrate this fog zone to scan it either.]

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In the images sent back by the drones, the fog was like an enormous curtain, cutting off every effective means of detection.

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In the footage transmitted back by the drone, that layer of fog was like a huge curtain, cutting off all effective means of reconnaissance.

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[However, since the fog is spreading from the city center,] Ling Yu shifted tone, [perhaps it should be me asking you — what was originally there?]

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[However, since the fog spread out from the city center,] Ling Yu shifted the topic, [maybe I should be the one asking you—what was originally there?]

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At those words, Li Dingguo fell silent for a few seconds.

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At these words, Li Dingguo was silent for a few seconds.

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“Come with me.”

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"Come with me."

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Then he turned and walked back into the temporary tent, with the Sentinel following close behind.

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Then, he turned and walked back into the temporary tent, with the Sentinel following closely.

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Inside the tent, Li Dingguo took a waterproof document pouch from a table to the side, pulled out some photographs, and spread them on the folding table.

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Inside the tent, Li Dingguo picked up a waterproof document bag from the table beside him, took out some photographs from inside, and spread them on the folding table.

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Ling Yu scanned the contents of the photographs through the Sentinel’s optical lens, and was immediately somewhat astonished.

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Ling Yu scanned the contents of the photos through the Sentinel's optical lens, and was somewhat surprised as well.

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In the photograph was a super-giant, quasi-biological structure occupying the center of Lishan City: a gigantic mushroom nearly thirty meters tall with an absurd diameter.

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In the photos was a colossal, organism-like structure occupying the center of Lishan City—a giant mushroom of exaggerated diameter and a height of nearly thirty meters.

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It was entrenched in Lishan City’s central square, squeezing into and piercing through the former landmarks and skyscrapers, forcefully carving out a space all its own.

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It was perched in the city's central plaza, crushing and piercing through what had once been landmark buildings and skyscrapers, forcibly carving out a space of its own.

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At its top was a cap-like structure more than forty meters in diameter, its edges jagged and curling downward.

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Its top was an umbrella-cap-shaped structure over forty meters in diameter, with jagged edges that curled downward.

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But its composition appeared rather bizarre, as if it were formed from layer upon layer of tangled, interwoven dark-red, keratinized rotten flesh.

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But its composition seemed rather bizarre—it looked as though it was made of layer upon layer of intertwined, gnarled dark-red keratinized rotting flesh.

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Its surface was covered with countless sponge-like holes and deep folds, and from the edge of the cap hung countless fleshy tendrils that still dripped a dark-red mucus.

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Its surface was also covered in countless sponge-like pores and deep wrinkles, and from the edges of the cap hung countless fleshy tentacles dripping dark-red viscous fluid.

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This dark-red, rotten-flesh-like substance immediately reminded Ling Yu of the second-stage mutant group that came in many different forms but were all uniformly covered in dark-red rotten flesh — the Rot-Beasts.

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This dark-red, rotting-flesh-like substance immediately made Ling Yu think of those second-stage mutant groups—the Rot-Beasts—which came in various forms but were uniformly covered in dark-red rotting flesh.

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[I remember hearing from Zheng Hai that you killed quite a few Rot-Beasts here, right?] Ling Yu’s voice sounded again. [Were they all near this mushroom?]

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[I remember Zheng Hai mentioning that you killed quite a few Rot-Beasts here, right?] Ling Yu's voice sounded again. [Were they all beside this mushroom?]

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“That’s right.” Li Dingguo pulled up several more photographs. In the images, nearly a hundred canine, avian, and giant-python-type Rot-Beasts, like birds returning to the nest, were densely packed onto the cap and stalk of this “rotten-flesh mushroom.”

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"That's right." Li Dingguo brought up a few more photos. In the images, nearly a hundred canine, bird, and giant python type Rot-Beasts were densely perched on the cap and stalk of this "rotting-flesh mushroom," like a flock of birds returning to their nests.

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“They seem to have made this place into their nest. Back then, clearing these things cost us no small price.” Li Dingguo’s voice was somewhat hoarse.

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"They seem to have made this place their nest. At the time, we paid a considerable price to clean these things out." Li Dingguo's voice was somewhat hoarse.

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[Then what about this mushroom? It couldn’t be cleared?]

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[And this mushroom? Couldn't it be eliminated?]

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“No.” A trace of bitterness and helplessness appeared on Li Dingguo’s face. “We tried many methods. Heavy artillery only left some shallow pits on its surface, and within a few minutes those would be filled back in by newly grown rotten flesh.

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"Yeah." A trace of bitterness and helplessness appeared on Li Dingguo's face. "We tried many methods. Heavy artillery bombardment could only leave shallow pits on its surface, which would be filled in by newly grown rotting flesh within a few minutes.

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With napalm, the flames could not keep burning on its surface at all. That mucus seems to be a natural flame retardant.

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With napalm, flames simply couldn't sustain burning on its surface—that mucus seemed to be a natural fire extinguisher.

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We even tried drilling and blasting from underground, but its structural strength is absurdly high. The drill bits simply couldn’t penetrate it.”

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We even tried drilling and blasting from underground, but its structural strength was absurdly high, and the drill bits couldn't penetrate it at all."

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“What else could we do?” Li Dingguo sighed. “After confirming that it had no active aggression and was simply growing there, we could only list it as a forbidden zone.

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"What else could we do?" Li Dingguo let out a sigh. "After confirming that it had no active aggression and just grew there, we could only designate it a restricted zone.

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Then we put our energy into gathering survivors and contacting the authorities. After all, we didn’t have the energy to keep battering ourselves against an unknown thing like this.”

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Then, we put our energy toward gathering survivors and getting in contact with the authorities. After all, we didn't have the energy to throw into a drawn-out fight with some unknown thing like that."

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“We did, but our analysis conditions were limited. Apart from knowing that it is rich in some unknown protein and has extremely strong proliferative ability, we got nothing.”

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"We did, but our analysis capabilities were limited. Other than knowing it was rich in some unknown protein and possessed extremely strong proliferative ability, we got nothing."

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[No matter. Send the samples to us later. We have a relatively complete laboratory and research personnel over there.] Ling Yu’s voice became resolute.

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[That's fine. Give us the samples when you get the chance—we have relatively well-equipped laboratories and researchers on our end.] Ling Yu's voice turned resolute.

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[But since the situation is urgent now, I suggest moving up your transfer plan. Leave tomorrow at dawn, with ordinary survivors prioritized.]

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[But now, since the situation is urgent, I suggest you move up your evacuation plan. Leave at dawn tomorrow, with ordinary survivors priority.]

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“Mm. I was thinking the same.” Li Dingguo nodded. Originally he had already been inclined to believe Zheng Hai’s words, and now, with the situation urgent, he was naturally not an indecisive man.

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"Yes, I feel the same way." Li Dingguo nodded. He had already been inclined to believe Zheng Hai's words; now, with the situation urgent, he was hardly a man to hem and haw.

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Thus, after a brief emergency meeting, the relocation plan was settled.

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And so, after an urgent, brief meeting, the relocation plan was settled.

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Li Dingguo would lead the group. They would temporarily abandon supplies that could not easily be moved in one trip and prioritize the evacuation of everyone. Lin Yue would send people from the shelter to meet them.

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Li Dingguo would lead the group, temporarily abandoning supplies that couldn't be transported in one trip, prioritizing the evacuation of all personnel. On the shelter's end, Lin Yue would send people to provide support.

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At the same time, Ling Yu’s drone formation would also serve as escort, ensuring the smoothness and safety of the transfer process.

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At the same time, Ling Yu's drone formation would also be responsible for escort, ensuring the smoothness and safety of the transfer process.

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The next day, just as dawn was breaking, an enormous convoy of nearly two hundred vehicles of every kind drove out of the temporary stronghold in a grand procession.

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The next day, just as dawn was breaking, a massive convoy of nearly two hundred vehicles of all kinds rumbled out of the temporary stronghold in full force.

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In the convoy, more than 1,200 survivors were settled in modified trucks and buses in the middle of the formation, their faces carrying unease about the unknown and confusion about the future.

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In the convoy, more than twelve hundred survivors were placed in the modified trucks and buses at the center of the column, their faces carrying unease about the unknown and confusion about the future.

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Li Dingguo divided the soldiers into front, middle, and rear groups to escort the line.

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Li Dingguo split the soldiers into three groups—front, middle, and rear—to escort the convoy along the way.

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On Ling Yu’s side, he dispatched Operation Squad Two led by Lin Yue, as well as over a thousand Soldier Bee laser drones, to provide air cover and reconnaissance for the entire journey.

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On Ling Yu's end, he dispatched Operation Squad Two led by Lin Yue, along with over a thousand "Soldier Bee" laser drones, to provide aerial cover and reconnaissance throughout the journey.

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The road was not peaceful. The massive, high-profile transfer naturally attracted the attention of quite a few zombies, and there were even several second-stage Rot-Beasts.

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The road was not peaceful. The massive transfer naturally drew the attention of quite a few zombies, and even a few second-stage Rot-Beasts.

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But for the now-combined convoy, these were only minor nuisances.

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But for the combined convoy, these were only minor troubles.

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Boom! Boom! Boom!

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BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!

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Amid deafening cannon fire, the small zombie swarms were annihilated in an instant.

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Amid the deafening roar of gunfire, small clusters of the zombie horde were annihilated in an instant.

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Immediately afterward, the Rot-Beasts besieged by the drones also lost their lives under the baptism of the laser rain.

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Following that, the Rot-Beasts besieged by the drones lost their vitality under the baptism of laser rain.

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The whole process flowed smoothly. The transfer lasted four and a half hours, and not a single person was injured.

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The entire process went off without a hitch. The transfer took four and a half hours in total, without a single casualty.

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And when Li Dingguo personally saw how the nearly one thousand drones in the sky easily riddled a Rot-Beast with holes, he seemed at last to make some kind of resolution.

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And when Li Dingguo personally witnessed how easily nearly a thousand drones in the sky could shoot a Rot-Beast full of holes, he seemed to finally make some kind of resolution.

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When the convoy reached Anlan District and the twelve-meter-high black ring-shaped barrier came into view, all the survivors from Lishan fell into a long daze.

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When the convoy arrived at Anlan District and that twelve-meter-tall black ring-shaped barrier came into view, all the survivors from Lishan fell into a long daze.

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A young soldier slumped by the vehicle window stared blankly at the slowly rotating turrets on the barrier. His lips trembled for a long time before he managed only one sentence: “Is this a movie?”

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A young soldier pressed against the window stared blankly at the slowly rotating turrets on the barrier, his lips trembling for a long time before he managed to blurt out: "Are they filming a movie?"

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The automatically opening quantum-state passageway, the fierce six-barreled rapid-fire turrets on the barrier, the clean and orderly streets inside the base, the aroma of food drifting through the air, and the shelter members whose spirits were high and rising...

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The auto-opening quantum-state passageway, the vicious six-barreled rapid-fire turrets on the barrier, the clean and tidy streets inside the base, the aroma of food wafting through the air, and the shelter members with their spirited, upward-looking demeanor...

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All of it struck their hearts like a heavy hammer, leaving them unable to calm down for a long time.

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All of it struck like a heavy hammer against their hearts, leaving them unable to calm down for a long time.

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So this was... Dawn Shelter?

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This was... Dawn Shelter?

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Could such a scene really exist in the post-apocalyptic world?

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Was this really what should exist in the apocalypse?

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At the same time, Ling Yu’s attention swept over every person entering the barrier.

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Meanwhile, Ling Yu's attention swept over every person entering the barrier.

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The composition of the Lishan survivors was somewhat more complicated than he had expected. There were around six hundred soldiers, ranging in age from nineteen to forty-five. Their equipment level was uneven, but their discipline was passable.

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The composition of Lishan's survivors was more complex than he had anticipated. Around six hundred soldiers, ranging in age from nineteen to forty-five, with uneven equipment levels but passable discipline.

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Among the remaining over 1,100 civilians, workers and technical personnel accounted for nearly thirty percent, and there were even a few engineers with considerable experience. That was good news.

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Of the remaining eleven hundred-plus civilians, workers and technicians made up nearly thirty percent, and there were even a few engineers with considerable seniority—that was good news.

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But at the same time, he also noticed some less reassuring signs.

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But he also noticed some not-so-good signals.

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Several young men mixed in with the civilian group had shifty eyes. The first thing they did after entering the barrier was not look at the road, but size up the distribution of the robots and drones.

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A few young men mixed in with the civilian crowd had shifty eyes. The first thing they did after entering the barrier wasn't to look where they were going, but to size up the distribution of the robots and drones.

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Only after realizing that there seemed to be surveillance everywhere did they suddenly behave themselves.

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Only after discovering that surveillance seemed to be everywhere did they suddenly start behaving themselves.

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There were also more than a dozen people wearing military uniforms but whose bearing was clearly different from that of regular troops. They gathered together, whispering and making comments about everything they saw.

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There were also a dozen or so people wearing military uniforms but whose demeanor was clearly different from regular soldiers, huddled together whispering, commenting on everything they saw.

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Their mouths clicked in admiration, but their eyes were full of the sharp gleam of scheming.

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Their mouths made sounds of wonder, but their eyes were full of calculating shrewdness.

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These people are all very interesting! Ling Yu silently noted the general situation of every one of them. No matter what kind of people they were, Ling Yu would eliminate any possibility of them causing trouble.

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These people were all very interesting! Ling Yu silently noted the general situation of each and every one of them. No matter what kind of people they were, Ling Yu was determined to nip any possibility of troublemaking in the bud.

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And with the influx of more than 1,500 new members, the shelter’s population suddenly more than doubled, which inevitably brought some temporary chaos.

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And with the influx of more than fifteen hundred new members, the shelter's population abruptly more than doubled, which naturally brought with it some unavoidable brief chaos.

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For example, when the survivors were registering.

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For example, during survivor registration.

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“Why do you get to confiscate my gun? I found this gun myself!”

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"Why the hell are you confiscating my gun? I found this gun myself!"

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A burly bald man kicked up a fuss at the registration area. He was clutching a shotgun, veins bulging on his neck, his face full of resentment.

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A burly bald man kicked up a fuss at the registration desk. He clutched a shotgun in his hand, veins bulging on his neck, wearing an indignant expression.

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Zhou Yi, who was responsible for maintaining order, raised his eyelids slightly and said nothing.

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Zhou Yi, who was in charge of maintaining order, lifted his eyelids but said nothing.

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The several team members behind him directly aimed their guns at the man, and the bald man’s voice instantly caught in his throat.

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The several team members behind him directly trained their muzzles on the man, and the bald man's voice immediately got stuck in his throat.

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“Article One of the shelter’s weapons management regulations,” Zhou Yi recited unhurriedly, “All lethal weapons personally held by individuals shall be uniformly registered and catalogued upon entry, and shall be kept and distributed by the Operations Department.

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"Article One of the shelter's weapon management regulations," Zhou Yi read out slowly and deliberately, "All lethal weapons held by individuals shall be uniformly registered upon entry and stored and distributed by the Operations Department.

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Those with objections may appeal to the management.”

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If you have objections, you may appeal to the management."

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“Of course, you can also choose not to join. Leave right now, and no one will stop you.”

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"Of course, you can also choose not to join. You can leave right now, and no one will stop you."

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The bald man fell silent for two seconds, then put the gun on the table.

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The bald man was silent for two seconds, then placed the gun on the table.

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Several similar small frictions occurred on the first day. Some people complained the dormitory assignments were unfair, some were dissatisfied with the drones and surveillance, and there were even a few troublemakers who fancied themselves capable and tried to provoke the old members maintaining order.

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Similar minor frictions occurred several times on the first day. Some people complained that housing assignments weren't fair, some expressed dissatisfaction with the drones and surveillance, and there were even a few hotheads who thought they were tough, trying to provoke the veteran members maintaining order.

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The shelter’s initially gentle welcoming measures seemed to have had the opposite effect, making these people begin to mistake this for a good place where a group of people would unconditionally let them have their own “reason.”

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The shelter's initially gentle welcome measures seemed to have had the opposite effect, making them mistakenly believe that this was a place where a group of people willing to unconditionally listen to their own "reasoning" lived.

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In the end, these “stars of humanity” who had “unshakably” decided that this shelter had no humanity were all invited to leave the shelter.

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In the end, these "shining stars of humanity" who "firmly" believed that this shelter was too inhumane were all escorted out of the shelter.

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Nothing could be done. They had already been persuaded with kind words three times, but the more they were persuaded, the more worked up they became. Ling Yu quite admired this spirit of preferring to break rather than bend.

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There was nothing to be done—they had already kindly advised them three times, but the more they advised, the more energized these people became. Ling Yu truly admired this unbending spirit.

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He believed they would certainly be able to overcome the world’s cruel malice on their own. Just thinking about it, Ling Yu felt the reactor core itself was about to be “deeply moved” to the point of breakdown—how could he possibly tarnish their yearning for a high-quality life?

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He believed they would surely be able to overcome the world's cruel malice on their own. Thinking about it, Ling Yu felt his reactor core was about to be moved to pieces by "emotion"—how could he possibly defile their longing for a high-quality life?

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“Those people are still crying over by the wall!” In the Personnel Certification Center, Shen Yan said to the air as she browsed through the profile data of the newly arrived members.

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"Those people are still crying outside the wall!" At the Personnel Certification Center, Shen Yan spoke to the air as she browsed the profile materials of the newly joined members.

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[I’ve already used drones to drive them off. After all, it was they themselves who made those impassioned declarations about independence and freedom. I had to help them stick to it.]

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[I've already sent drones to drive them away. After all, they were the ones who declared with such fervor that they wanted independence and freedom—I have to help them stick to it.]

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Ling Yu’s voice came from the identity card she wore.

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Ling Yu's voice came from the identity card she wore.

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“Oh, good then,” Shen Yan shook her head and sighed. “There really are all kinds of people!”

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"Oh, that's good then," Shen Yan shook her head, then sighed in admiration, "There really are all kinds of people!"

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[In the future, as the scale expands, such things will increase. You’ll need to get used to it.]

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[In the future, as the scale grows, this kind of thing will only increase. You'll have to get used to it.]

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“I understand.”

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"I understand."

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In the evening, a “Welcome and Shelter Code of Conduct Orientation” for all new members was held in the power station square.

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In the evening, a "Welcome and Shelter Code of Conduct Orientation Meeting" for all new members was held in the power station plaza.

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At the opening, Ling Yu gathered the swarm drones, which had by then returned to a scale of nearly ten thousand, and nearly one hundred Sentinel Robots, and had a copy of the “Dawn Management Regulations” distributed to everyone.

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To open, Ling Yu assembled the nearly ten thousand swarm drones, which had once again been restored to their previous numbers, along with nearly a hundred Sentinel Robots, and distributed a copy of the Dawn Management Regulations to everyone.

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Then, on the enormous holographic screen, Ling Yu, in the identity of “Zhuangsheng,” used the calmest tone to explain the core rules of Dawn Shelter:

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Then, on the massive holographic screen, Ling Yu, in the persona of "Zhuangsheng," used the calmest tone to explain to everyone the core rules of Dawn Shelter:

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First, absolute order and discipline. Everyone must obey the rules. Contributions are tied to rewards. Anyone who attempts to undermine the rules will be severely punished.

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First, absolute order and discipline. Everyone must abide by the rules; contributions are tied to rewards, and anyone who attempts to break the rules will be severely punished.

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Second, the absolute value of life. Here, every person’s life is equally precious. Any form of internal slaughter or oppression is prohibited.

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Second, the absolute value of life. Here, every person's life is equally precious. Any form of internal killing and oppression is prohibited.

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Third, a shared vision for the future. This is not the endpoint of merely surviving, but the starting point of rebuilding civilization.

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Third, a shared vision for the future. This is not the end of mere survival, but the starting point for rebuilding civilization.

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Since every member has chosen to join and to enjoy everything the shelter provides, they have the responsibility to contribute their own strength to this goal, rather than becoming an unstable factor that destroys it.

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Every member, having chosen to join, having chosen to enjoy everything the shelter provides, has the responsibility to contribute their strength to this goal, rather than becoming an unstable factor that destroys it.

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Finally, Ling Yu’s voice rang out from every corner of the shelter.

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Finally, Ling Yu's voice rang out from every corner of the shelter.

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[Here, I once again sincerely welcome every new member, and at the same time I ask you to remember.]

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[Here, I once again sincerely welcome every newly joined member, and I also ask you to remember.]

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[Every mouthful of food, every brick, and every bullet in this shelter comes from the shared efforts of everyone.]

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[Every mouthful of food, every brick, and every bullet in this shelter comes from the joint efforts of all people.]

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[This place supports no idlers, indulges no evildoers, and owes nothing to anyone.]

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[This place does not keep idlers, does not indulge evildoers, and does not owe anyone anything.]

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As the words fell, the entire venue was silent. At that moment, all the newcomers felt a chill, and instinctively fell as silent as cicadas in winter.

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As the voice fell, the entire venue was silent as death. At this moment, all the newcomers felt a chill that made them involuntarily hold their breath.

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And this was exactly what Ling Yu needed. In the current era, caution was a virtue.

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And that was exactly what Ling Yu needed. In this era, caution was a virtue.

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Quickly integrating into the shelter was not Ling Yu’s task, but their own. What Ling Yu had to do, from beginning to end, was only one thing.

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Integrating into the shelter as quickly as possible was not Ling Yu's task—it was their own. From start to finish, there was only one thing Ling Yu had to do.

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That was to tell them this place was not lawless, that he had both the will and the ability to enforce the law, and to prevent some people from committing irreparable acts of stupidity.

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That was to tell them this was not a lawless place. He had both the will and the ability to enforce the law, to keep some people from making irreparable foolish mistakes.

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Having dealt with the ordinary survivors, the next issue was the military.

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Having dealt with the ordinary survivors, the next matter was the military.

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The integration of these nearly six hundred soldiers was discussed among Ling Yu, Zhang Wu, and Li Dingguo.

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Regarding the integration of nearly six hundred soldiers, after discussion between Ling Yu, Zhang Wu, and Li Dingguo.

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Over four hundred of them would be dispersed into the Operation Department’s existing Squads One and Two to supplement the combat-capable troops, while the rest would be reorganized into Operation Squad Three, led by the former battalion commander Li Guang.

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More than four hundred of them would be dispersed and merged into the existing Squad One and Squad Two of the Operations Department to supplement the high-combat-level soldiery, while the rest would be reorganized into Operation Squad Three, led by former battalion commander Li Guang.

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Li Dingguo, meanwhile, became the deputy head of the Operations Department, assisting Zhang Wu’s leadership.

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And Li Dingguo would become the deputy head of the Operations Department, assisting Zhang Wu in his leadership work.

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“Commander Li, this isn’t right, is it?” Zhang Wu stared blankly at the tall, straight-backed old man, a little dazed.

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"Regiment Commander Li, this isn't right, is it?" Zhang Wu looked at the tall, upright old man in a bit of a daze.

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In fact, it was not only Zhang Wu who was surprised—even Ling Yu was somewhat surprised. Not that he would have completely revised his field personnel command system because of the other man’s position.

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In fact, it wasn't just Zhang Wu—even Ling Yu was somewhat surprised. Although he wouldn't go so far as to completely overhaul his external operations command system because of the latter's position.

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But he had never thought of having such a clearly capable veteran merely do auxiliary work. He had originally expected to set up a second operations department.

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But he had never thought of having such an obviously capable old general just do auxiliary work. He had originally planned to establish a second Operations Department.

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“Ah, I should have retired long ago this year. If it weren’t for this damn mess, I wouldn’t have wanted to do it at all!

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"Oh! I should have retired this year anyway. If it weren't for running into this damn mess! There's no way in hell I'd want to do this!

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Besides, this emergency independent regiment was just something we organized temporarily ourselves. It doesn’t count as a regular force.”

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Besides, this Emergency Reconstituted Independent Regiment was organized temporarily by us anyway—it's not a proper regular unit."

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Facing Zhang Wu, who was clearly still in a daze, Li Dingguo merely waved his hand. “And anyway, I think you kid have been doing a fine job!”

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Facing the clearly bewildered Zhang Wu, Li Dingguo just waved his hand. "And besides, I think you're doing a pretty good job, kid!"

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“But I was just pushed into it. I really lack experience.” Zhang Wu scratched his head sheepishly.

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"But I was just thrown into the role. Honestly, I don't have much experience." Zhang Wu rubbed his head helplessly.

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“Lacking experience? Fight a few battles and you’ll have experience! I’ve seen the battles you people fought. They were all fought well!

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"If you lack experience, just fight a few battles and you'll have it! I've looked at your battle records—you've all fought pretty well!

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Or is it that you think an old wreck like me isn’t qualified to be deputy head?”

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Or what, are you saying you think this old geezer isn't qualified to be deputy head?"

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“No, that’s not what I meant.” Zhang Wu hurriedly shook his head.

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"No, no, that's not what I mean." Zhang Wu quickly shook his head.

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“Then that settles it. You have no objections, and I have no objections. Mr. Zhuangsheng, what do you think?” Li Dingguo looked toward the Sentinel Robot at his side.

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"Then it's settled. You have no objection, I have no objection. Mr. Zhuangsheng, what do you think?" Li Dingguo looked at the Sentinel Robot beside him.

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[I understand. Then we’ll arrange it that way.]

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[Understood. Then let's arrange it that way.]

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And so, the newly arrived children were led by teachers into the warm and bright Basic Education Center.

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And so, the newly arrived children were led by teachers into the warm and bright Basic Education Center;

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Workers and technical personnel with professional skills were quickly assigned by Shen Yan to the posts where they were needed most.

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workers and technicians with professional skills were quickly assigned by Shen Yan to the positions that needed them most;

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And ordinary survivors would begin basic military training and production training the next day.

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and the ordinary survivors would begin receiving basic military training and production training the next day.

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Three days later, with the end of the adaptation period, the shelter once again returned to good order.

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Three days later, with the end of the adaptation period, the shelter returned to order once again.

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The newcomers’ identity cards began to show records of Energy Points and Honor Value. In the cafeteria, new faces and old faces sat mixed together to eat, and the shelter’s atmosphere once again became lively.

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The newcomers' identity cards began to have records of Energy Points and Honor Value. In the cafeteria, new faces and old faces sat together eating, and the shelter's atmosphere regained its liveliness.

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Only then did the shelter’s total population truly reach 2,941.

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It was only at this point that the shelter's total population truly reached 2,941 people.

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Five days later, in the underground base, Conference Room No. 1.

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Five days later, underground base, Meeting Room No. 1.

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The shelter’s core members gathered together.

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The shelter's core members gathered together.

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“...Overall, the integration of the new members is basically complete.” Shen Yan closed the report in her hands. “The population growth directly drove the expansion of the Production Team. At present, the expansion plan for the Phantom No. 1 production line has already been put on the agenda.”

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"...In general, the integration work for the new members is basically complete." Shen Yan closed the report in her hands. "The population growth has directly driven the expansion of the Production Team. Currently, the expansion plan for the 'Phantom No. 1' production line has been put on the agenda."

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“The electromagnetic rifle production line has finished debugging and is expected to achieve stable production next week. The Military Factory construction is also only short of a few pieces of special equipment. We plan to salvage them from existing factories,” Lin Yue added.

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"The electromagnetic rifle production line has been debugged and is expected to achieve stable production next week. The Military Factory's construction is also only short a few special pieces of equipment—we plan to tear them out from existing factories." Lin Yue added.

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[Very good.] Ling Yu’s voice sounded.

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[Very good.] Ling Yu's voice sounded.

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[In summary, the improvement in population and industrial scale has finally given us the ability to carry out some plans that we could not execute before.]

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[In summary, the increase in population and industrial scale has finally given us the capability to execute some plans we couldn't complete before.]

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“Do you have some new plan?” Zhang Wu asked.

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"Do you have a new plan in mind?" Zhang Wu asked.

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[That’s right.]

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[That's right.]

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As Ling Yu’s words fell, a holographic map unfolded in the center of the conference table.

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As Ling Yu's words fell, a holographic map unfolded in the center of the conference table.

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[First, the Gangshan Mine.] Ling Yu’s electronic voice pointed to the marked point closest to the shelter on the map.

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[First, the Gangshan Mine.] Ling Yu's electronic voice pointed to the marker on the map closest to the shelter.

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[According to the exploration reports, the iron ore reserves there are very plentiful, but transportation is a major problem. The underground passage has too little transport capacity.

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[According to exploration reports, the iron ore reserves there are very abundant, but transportation is a big problem—the capacity of the underground passage is too small.

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Now that we have enough manpower, we can completely attempt to open a highway transport route from the mine to the shelter.]

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Now that we have enough manpower, we can completely try to open up a highway transport route from the mine to the shelter.]

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“That is indeed feasible. As long as we clear out the zombies and then set up sonic repulsion devices along the route, we can maintain a relatively clean road.”

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"This is indeed feasible. As long as we clear out the zombies and deploy sonic repulsion devices along the way, we can maintain a relatively clean road."

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[Correct. And afterward, I will also arrange swarm drones to monitor road conditions and further raise the safety level. At the same time, we can also try to further probe the specific situation of Gangshan City and gather the survivors from there.]

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[Exactly. And afterward, I'll also arrange for swarm drones to monitor the road conditions to further raise the safety level. At the same time, we can also try to further investigate the specific situation in Gangshan City and gather survivors from over there.]

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“Mm. What about the next target?” Shen Yan asked after jotting down some notes.

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"Hmm, then what's the next target?" Shen Yan asked, looking up after briefly jotting down some notes.

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[Second, Xinzhou District. Before the disaster, that was Yuanjiang City’s high-tech industrial cluster. It has the highest density of research institutes, laboratories, and tech enterprises in the entire city. There may be a large amount of technical data and precision equipment extremely valuable to us.]

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[Second, Xinzhou District. That's Yuanjiang City's pre-disaster high-tech industrial cluster, with the highest density of research institutes, laboratories, and tech enterprises in the entire city. There may be large amounts of technical data and precision equipment that are extremely valuable to us.]

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“But the situation there may not necessarily be good!” Xu Jianguo shook his head. To this day, he still remembered vividly the enormous raised outline of the ground at Cold Lake Research Institute. That damn thing was just too huge?!!

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"But the situation there may not be all that great!" Xu Jianguo shook his head. He still had a vivid memory of the huge outline that had risen from the ground at the Cold Lake Research Institute. That was way too damn big, wasn't it?!

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[So I don’t plan to attack it head-on. My initial idea is for Wang Hai to lead the exploration team to complete the relevant underground detection first. After the enemy has been identified, we can then develop a further combat plan.]

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[So, I don't plan to launch a frontal assault. My initial idea is to have Wang Hai lead the exploration team to complete underground survey work first, and after confirming the enemy, then develop a further combat plan.]

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[Team Leader Wang Hai, I’ll entrust this matter to you.]

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[Team Leader Wang, I'll leave this matter to you.]

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“Yes! I’ll produce a plan as soon as possible.” Wang Hai immediately stood up solemnly.

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"Understood! I'll have a proposal ready as soon as possible." Wang Hai immediately stood up solemnly.

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[As for the third target...] Ling Yu projected the photograph of the giant fungal mushroom in the center of Lishan City onto the screen.

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[As for the third target...] Ling Yu projected a photo of the giant mushroom in the center of Lishan City onto the screen.

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[According to the observations of the Sentinel I left there, the mysterious fog zone in Lishan is still slowly expanding, and it has now even engulfed the outskirts.]

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[According to the observations of the Sentinels I left there, the mysterious fog zone in Lishan City is still slowly expanding, and has now even encompassed the suburbs.]

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[I have a premonition that we must formulate a plan to retake Lishan as soon as possible.]

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[I have a feeling we need to formulate a plan to counterattack Lishan City as soon as possible.]