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The Sky Blade's engine screamed shrilly in its overloaded state, the fuselage surface glowing faintly red from the air friction of high-speed flight.

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The Sky Blade's engine let out a piercing shriek under overload, the airframe surface faintly reddening from the air friction of high-speed flight.

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Ahead of the nose, the diamond-shaped crystal was slowly rising, now less than thirty meters from the enormous semi-transparent limb in the sky.

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Ahead of the nose, the diamond-shaped crystal was slowly rising—now less than thirty meters from the enormous semi-transparent limb hanging in the sky.

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In the span of a lightning flash, the contest was decided.

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In a flash, the contest was decided.

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Under Ling Yu's damn-the-torpedoes maneuvering, the Sky Blade beat the semi-transparent limb to the punch, slamming headlong into the floating diamond-shaped crystal.

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Under Ling Yu's desperate, damn-the-torpedoes maneuvering, the Sky Blade beat the semi-transparent limb to the punch and slammed head-on into the hovering diamond-shaped crystal.

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But there was no expected impact feedback. The instant the drone's nose touched the crystal, it seemed to pass through a layer of insubstantial illusion.

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But there was no impact feedback as expected. The instant the UAV's nose touched the crystal, it was as if it had passed through an illusory phantom.

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At the same time, the enormous limb extending from the rift in the clouds finally arrived.

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At the same moment, the enormous limb that had reached out of the rift in the clouds finally arrived.

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Squelch!

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Chhk!

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Like a blade piercing metal, it produced a grating, teeth-aching sound.

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Like a blade piercing metal, it gave off a teeth-grating sound.

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The Sky Blade's airframe was instantly pierced through, its internal structure erupting in a chain of sparks before it blasted apart into a burning fireball in midair.

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The Sky Blade's airframe was pierced through in an instant. Sparks burst from its internal structure in a chain, and then it exploded in midair into a ball of burning fire.

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But both Ling Yu and the unknown existence behind the clouds were now plunged into confusion.

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But both Ling Yu and the unknown existence behind the clouds were plunged into confusion.

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The crystal had vanished. Ling Yu hadn't even noticed how it disappeared, as if it had been an illusion from the very start.

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The crystal had vanished. Ling Yu hadn't even noticed how it disappeared—as if it had been an illusion from the very start.

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"ROAR——!!!"

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“ROAR——!!!”

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From the sky came an enraged roar that seemed capable of tearing the firmament apart.

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From the sky came an enraged roar that seemed to tear the firmament apart.

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The thick, dark clouds coiled over Huining District churned and swirled madly at that moment, like a colossal beast provoked into fury.

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The thick, heavy clouds that had been coiled over Huining District churned and spun madly at that moment, like a giant beast provoked into a frenzy.

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Deep within the cloud layer, blinding bolts of lightning flashed, followed by rolling thunder that shook heaven and earth.

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Deep within the clouds, blinding bolts of lightning flashed again and again; then the rumble of thunder shook heaven and earth.

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Rumble! Rumble-rumble-rumble!

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BOOM! BOOOOM!

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Hundreds of lightning strikes, like an inverted forest of suspended swords, descended from the sky and blasted indiscriminately into the ruins of Huining District.

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Hundreds of thunderbolts descended like an inverted forest of sharp swords, hammering indiscriminately into the ruins of Huining District.

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Violet-white arcs illuminated the earth as bright as day, and zombies on the streets were electrocuted into charcoal, swath after swath.

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Violet-white arcs lit the earth bright as day, and zombies on the streets were charred into blackened husks in swaths.

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Then, an enormous tornado connecting heaven and earth descended vertically from the center of the churning cloud opening. Everything in the path of the wind column was sucked in and shredded to pieces.

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Then, a colossal tornado linking heaven and earth dropped vertically from the center of the churning cloud hole. Everything the wind column passed through was dragged in and torn to shreds.

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On the distant highway.

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On a distant highway.

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Zhang Wu lowered the binoculars in his hands, watching the absurd tornado column and the unbroken flashes of lightning over Huining District, and instinctively swallowed.

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Zhang Wu lowered the binoculars in his hands, watching the absurd tornado column and the successive flashes of lightning in the direction of Huining District, and swallowed reflexively.

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The visual impact of this mythic scene was simply too overwhelming.

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This mythic scene was far too overwhelming in its visual impact.

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"Zhuangsheng," he said into his identity card, his tone unusually taut, "what did you do to make it this angry?"

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“Zhuangsheng,” he said into his identity card, his tone rarely this strained, “what did you do to make it this angry?”

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[To be honest, I'm baffled too.]

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[Actually, I'm quite confused too.]

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Ling Yu's voice sounded, carrying undisguised bewilderment.

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Ling Yu's voice rang out, carrying undisguised bewilderment.

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He had already braced himself for a wasted trip. So what if the Sky Blade reached the crystal?

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He had already steeled himself for coming away empty-handed. So what if the Sky Blade touched the crystal?

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That limb was clearly faster than him. There was no way he could grab it and run.

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That limb was clearly faster than he was—there was no way he could grab it and escape.

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But unexpectedly, the instant the airframe touched the crystal, the crystal vanished, and the system popped up an unprecedented notification.

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But unexpectedly, the instant the airframe made contact with the crystal, the crystal vanished, and at the same time the system popped up a notification unlike anything before.

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A whole string of question marks left even Ling Yu feeling dazed, and he even suspected the system had hit a bug.

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That string of question marks left even Ling Yu dumbfounded, and he even suspected the system had hit a bug.

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But one thing was certain: that crystal had absolutely not been taken by the big thing in the sky. Otherwise, it wouldn't have thrown such a furious tantrum.

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But one thing was certain: the crystal had definitely not been taken by that big thing in the sky, or else it wouldn't have thrown such a fit.

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Anyway, in this apocalypse, there were plenty of things he couldn't make sense of. This was hardly the only one.

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After all, there were plenty of things in this apocalypse that defied understanding—one more hardly made a difference.

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When Xu Jianguo led his still-shaken team, scrambling back with the Sentinel Robot into the depths of the underground passage, what greeted them was an already-excavated, brightly lit tunnel.

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When Xu Jianguo led his shaken little team scrambling back through the depths of the underground passage alongside the Sentinel Robot, what greeted them was a tunnel that had already been broken through, brightly lit from end to end.

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At the other end of the tunnel, Wang Hai was leaning against the Pangolin war vehicle, chewing an energy bar, and waved at them.

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At the other end of the tunnel, Wang Hai, leaning back against the Pangolin armored vehicle and chewing on an energy bar, waved at them.

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"Professor Xu! It's really great that you're all safe!" A crowd at the tunnel entrance surrounded them and explained in a babble of voices. "They're people from a rescue team called Dawn Shelter."

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“Professor Xu! It's so great that you're all safe!” A crowd at the tunnel mouth surrounded them and began explaining in a jumble of voices. “They're a rescue team from a place called Dawn Shelter.”

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After the explanation, Xu Jianguo and the others understood that this was the rescue Zhuangsheng had mentioned. Most of the people had already evacuated in an orderly manner.

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After some explanation, Xu Jianguo and the others understood that this was the rescue Zhuangsheng had mentioned; most of the people had already evacuated in an orderly manner.

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Only a handful of people had deliberately stayed behind to wait for their return.

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Only a few had stayed behind specifically to wait for them to return.

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On learning this, Xu Jianguo and the people behind him fell silent.

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At this realization, Xu Jianguo and the people behind him all fell silent.

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A young student couldn't help muttering under his breath: "So... what exactly were we running around for this whole time?"

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A young student couldn't help muttering softly: “So... what was all that running around for?”

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If they'd left a little later, they'd probably have already evacuated on that big thing that clearly looked so safe.

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If they had left just a little later back then, they'd probably already be riding this big machine that obviously looked very safe, heading straight out.

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[Relax,] the Sentinel Robot's speaker broadcast Zhuangsheng's placid electronic voice. [Even if it was useless, at least you got a workout.]

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[Relax,] Zhuangsheng's steady electronic voice came from the Sentinel Robot's speaker. [It may not have been of any use, but at least it tired you out.]

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"..."

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“...”

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Everyone was at a loss for words, but their taut nerves unconsciously loosened at the dry joke.

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The group was left speechless, yet their taut nerves unconsciously loosened at the deadpan joke.

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Fatigue and lingering fear surged in like a tide. Someone plopped down on the ground, panting heavily.

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Exhaustion and lingering fear surged in like a tide. Someone plopped down on the ground, gasping for breath.

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The relief of having survived and the confusion about what lay ahead were interwoven on every face.

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The relief of surviving and the bewilderment about the future were interwoven on every face.

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Afterward, under Wang Hai's coordination, the last batch of survivors from underground in Huining District also returned to the shelter through this newly opened tunnel.

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Afterward, under Wang Hai's coordination, the last batch of survivors from beneath Huining all returned to the shelter through the newly opened underground tunnel.

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With that, the two hundred-plus people from beneath Huining, plus Sun Siyuan and the others from the mall, became new members of Dawn Shelter—284 people in total.

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With that, the more than two hundred people from Huining's underground, plus Sun Siyuan and the others from the mall, became new members of Dawn Shelter—two hundred eighty-four people in total.

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The most notable trait of this batch of survivors was their relatively decent education level—after all, they all came from Xinzhou District!

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The most notable characteristic of this batch of survivors was their relatively decent level of education. After all, they had all come from Xinzhou District!

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Especially the twenty-odd people led by Xu Jianguo, all researchers from the Cold Lake Science Academy. Before the disaster, they were bona fide, highly educated talents.

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Especially the twenty-odd people led by Xu Jianguo—all of them researchers at the Cold Lake Science Academy, bona fide highly educated talents before the disaster.

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Their addition would undoubtedly greatly accelerate the progress of the shelter's various construction missions.

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Their arrival would undoubtedly greatly accelerate the progress of the shelter's various construction missions.

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At this moment, at Dawn Shelter, in the underground base cafeteria.

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At this moment, Dawn Shelter, the cafeteria of the underground base.

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"This... this flavor is absolutely authentic." Xu Jianguo set down his chopsticks and sighed in heartfelt admiration, then looked at the identity card he'd just received on the table. "Mr. Zhuangsheng, your chef here is amazing!"

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“Th-this... this flavor is too authentic.” Xu Jianguo set down his chopsticks and sighed with genuine appreciation, then looked at the identity card he had just received on the table. “Mr. Zhuangsheng, the chef you have here is amazing!”

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As for this AI that was almost indistinguishable from a real person, Xu Jianguo had undoubtedly been extremely shocked at first. After all, even if he wasn't qualified to participate in such a project, theoretically he shouldn't have been completely in the dark about it, right?

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As for this AI that rivaled a real person, Xu Jianguo had naturally been utterly shocked at first. After all, even if he wasn't qualified to participate in such a project, theoretically he shouldn't have been completely unaware of it, right?

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But after touring the shelter's many incredible technologies, he fully understood: if the state's classified projects were researching technologies like this, then it was entirely normal that he hadn't been cleared to know about them back then.

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But after touring all the black technology in the shelter, he fully understood: if the state's classified projects researched these very technologies, then it was only natural that he hadn't been qualified to know about them back then.

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[Basic survival support is the prerequisite for the continuation of civilization,] Ling Yu's voice came from the identity card. [Professor Xu, I'm very interested in that weapon you used before.]

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[Basic survival support is the prerequisite for the continuation of civilization,] Ling Yu's voice came from the identity card. [Professor Xu, I'm very interested in that weapon you all used before.]

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"Oh, you mean that electromagnetic gun," Xu Jianguo wiped his mouth. "It's just a semi-finished product. Its power is limited, endurance is a major problem, and the cost is shockingly high. At this stage, it's honestly a bit useless."

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“Oh, you mean that electromagnetic gun,” Xu Jianguo wiped his mouth. “That's just a half-finished product. Limited power, endurance problems, and a terrifyingly high cost. Honestly, it's pretty useless at this stage.”

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"I just grabbed it on a whim from Old Zhang's lab. Mainly it can be used as a long spear, and it's pretty sturdy."

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“I just grabbed it from Old Zhang's lab on a whim. Mainly it can serve as a spear—it's pretty sturdy.”

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[No problem—these are all minor issues. I'm just curious about its experimental data. Do you have the relevant parameter files?]

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[No problem, those are all minor issues. I'm just curious about its experimental data. Do you have the related parameter documentation?]

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"Yes, of course I do," Xu Jianguo nodded. "The evacuation was rushed, but I grabbed a few files off the desktop on my way out. There should be some in there."

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“Yes, of course,” Xu Jianguo nodded. “We evacuated in a hurry, but I grabbed a few files from the desk on the way out. There should be some in there.”

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With that, he put down his utensils and carefully pulled a stack of slightly crumpled paper documents from the backpack he carried.

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With that, he set down his utensils, took out the bag he carried, and carefully pulled out a stack of slightly crumpled paper documents.

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A Sentinel Robot on standby walked over, and Xu Jianguo spread the documents out page by page, letting the Sentinel's camera scan them.

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A Sentinel Robot on standby walked over. Xu Jianguo then spread the documents out page by page, letting the Sentinel's camera scan them.

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As the relevant data was recorded, the system notification he had been waiting for sounded deep in Ling Yu's consciousness.

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As the relevant data was entered, the system notification he had been waiting for rang out in the depths of Ling Yu's consciousness.

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[Ding! Detected that a survivor is carrying technical data and samples related to electromagnetic weapons.]

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[Ding! Detected that someone among the survivors is carrying technical documentation and samples related to electromagnetic weapons.]

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[Technology automatically unlocked: Electromagnetic Kinetic Weapons (Lv.1)]

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[Technology auto-unlocked: Electromagnetic Kinetic Weapons (Lv.1)]

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[Reward: Unlocked manufacturing technology for electromagnetic rifles and electromagnetic machine guns, supporting ammunition production lines, and corresponding blueprints. 1,000 civilization points.]

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[Reward: Unlocked manufacturing technology for electromagnetic rifles and electromagnetic machine guns, along with supporting ammunition production lines and corresponding blueprints. 1000 civilization points.]

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Along with the notification, another node that had been dim on the colossal tech tree in his consciousness quietly lit up with a soft white glow.

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Along with the notification, on the vast tech tree in his mind, another node that had been dim quietly lit up with a soft white glow.

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Ling Yu's mood soared.

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Ling Yu's mood immediately soared.

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Nothing you spend points on ever tastes as good as free!

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Nothing paid for with points is ever as sweet as something free!

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He had refrained from researching this technology before, mainly because conventional weapons were still sufficient for now, and mass-producing advanced weapons wasn't easy.

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The main reason he hadn't unlocked this tech before was that conventional weapons were still sufficient for now, and advanced weapons weren't easy to mass-produce.

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And now, not only had he not spent a single point, he'd actually netted a thousand points. An absolute steal.

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But now, not only had he not spent a single point, he had netted a thousand instead. An absolute steal.

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[Professor Xu, I see in your background profile that you have experience participating in military-industrial projects.] After composing himself, Ling Yu continued, [If I wanted to build a comprehensive military factory here at the shelter, what suggestions would you have?]

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[Professor Xu, I saw in your background information that you have experience participating in military-industrial projects.] After calming his control rod, Ling Yu continued. [If I wanted to establish a comprehensive Military Factory here at the shelter, what suggestions would you have?]

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"A military factory?" Xu Jianguo's expression turned solemn, and he said thoughtfully, "Oh, right. That really is something we should consider building."

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“A Military Factory?” Xu Jianguo's expression turned serious as he mused. “Oh, right. That really is something worth considering.”

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He pondered for a moment, then continued: "But honestly, I only know a little about this field. To build one from scratch, the first priorities are site selection and planning, then equipment."

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He thought for a moment, then continued: “But honestly, I only know a little about this. If we're truly starting from zero, the first things are site selection and planning, and then equipment.”

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"I remember that in the Yuanjiang Industrial Park, there are several large precision instrument factories and special steel plants. If we could bring the equipment back from there, it would save us a lot of trouble."

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“I recall that in the Yuanjiang Industrial Park there are several large precision-instrument factories and special-steel plants. If we can move the equipment from there, it would save us a lot of trouble.”

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"Oh, and moving equipment from existing facilities would work too. There are at least two large munitions factories in Zhongping Province, but they're a bit far."

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“Oh, and if we can salvage from existing facilities, that works too. There are at least two major munitions factories in Zhongping Province, though they're a bit far.”

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Xu Jianguo spoke at length, from basic equipment selection to production line layout planning to personnel training systems, displaying an extremely high level of professional expertise.

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Xu Jianguo spoke at length with ease, from basic equipment selection, to production-line layout planning, to personnel training systems—displaying extremely high professional competence.

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As he listened, Ling Yu silently marked the locations Xu Jianguo mentioned on the map, and at the same time, transmitted a data set to Xu Jianguo's identity card.

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As he listened, Ling Yu silently marked the locations he had mentioned on the map, and at the same time, transmitted a set of data to Xu Jianguo's identity card.

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[These are two mature weapon designs and supporting production line plans I extrapolated from your semi-finished data, combined with the theoretical models in my database. Please have a look and see whether they're feasible.]

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[These are two mature weapon designs and supporting production-line plans I extrapolated from your prototype data, combined with the theoretical models in my database. Take a look and see if they're feasible.]

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Xu Jianguo opened the projection. Looking at the two electromagnetic weapon designs full of sci-fi aesthetic on the screen, and the production line flowchart beside them detailed down to every single component, his breath caught sharply.

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Xu Jianguo opened the projection. Gazing at the two electromagnetic-weapon designs full of sci-fi beauty on the screen, and the production-line flowchart beside them that detailed every single component, his breath caught sharply.

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He adjusted his glasses and examined them carefully three times before saying in a rather odd tone: "Feasible... more than feasible!"

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He adjusted his glasses and examined them closely three times before speaking in a rather strange tone: “Feasible... 'Feasible' doesn't even begin to describe it!”

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"This... this is already the peak of perfection. Mr. Zhuangsheng, your computing power is truly incredible!"

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“Th-this... this is simply the pinnacle. Mr. Zhuangsheng, your computing power is truly incredible!”

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Although this wasn't his main field of research, Xu Jianguo understood it to a certain degree. The moment he saw the design drawings, he immediately felt like he was looking at the standard answer.

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Although this wasn't his main area of research, Xu Jianguo did know a thing or two. The moment he saw the designs, he got the immediate sensation of looking at a standard answer key.

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It was simply unbelievable. But when he remembered that the one on the other side was an AI beyond its era, it no longer seemed strange.

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It was simply inconceivable—but once he remembered that the one on the other side was an AI beyond its era, it was no longer strange.

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At that thought, Xu Jianguo smiled self-deprecatingly, then turned serious. "Alright, I have a general idea of what to do. I'll write up a detailed proposal later, laying out the priorities and feasible options."

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At that thought, Xu Jianguo laughed at himself, then turned serious. “Alright, I have a rough idea now. I'll write up a detailed proposal later, laying out the priorities and feasible plans.”

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"You're welcome."

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“You're welcome.”

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Meanwhile, in the ruins at the blast's core in Huining District.

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Meanwhile, in the ruins at the core of the explosion in Huining District.

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The lightning strikes had long since subsided, and even the sky had cleared for the first time in a while. The dark clouds that had lingered so long had dispersed at some point.

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The thunderbolts had long since ceased, and even the sky had cleared for the first time in ages—the clouds that had lingered for so long had dispersed at some unknown point.

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A woman in a white skirt suit appeared silently atop a raised mound of rubble.

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A lady in a white dress appeared noiselessly atop a mound of rubble.

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Her pure white dress stood out starkly against this scorched black land.

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Her pure white long dress stood out harshly against the scorched black earth.

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Behind her, four vivid crimson flesh tentacles suddenly shot out.

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Behind her, four vivid red flesh tentacles suddenly shot out.

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Like nimble pythons, they easily pried apart the layered rubble and rebar, revealing the enormous black creature buried beneath—it was Black Wing, its presence faint.

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Like agile pythons, they easily pushed aside the layers of rubble and steel rebar, revealing the massive black creature buried beneath—it was Black Wing, its presence faint.

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Catching sight of the woman's figure, one of Black Wing's limbs trembled slightly as it carefully pushed out, from a gap between the carapace plates of its abdomen, a perfectly intact, fist-sized blood-red fruit.

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At the sight of the woman, one of Black Wing's limbs trembled slightly as it carefully offered up, from a gap in the carapace of its abdomen, a perfectly intact blood-red fruit the size of a fist.

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The outline of an embryo was faintly visible at the center of the fruit.

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The outline of an embryo was faintly visible at the fruit's center.

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The woman took the red fruit, placed it into a silver-white container, and dropped it into a huge pit nearby.

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The woman took the fruit, placed it into a silver-white container, and dropped it into a huge pit nearby.

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At the bottom of the pit, what seemed to be an enormous creature flashed by and vanished.

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At the bottom of the pit, a colossal creature seemed to flash past and vanish.

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After doing all this, a trace of a smile finally appeared on her formerly indifferent face.

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After doing all this, a trace of a smile finally appeared on her previously indifferent face.

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"Well done."

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“Well done.”

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She said softly, "This way, Master can become a true complete form."

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She said softly, “This way, the master can become a true complete form.”

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However, the next second, the flesh tentacles behind her reversed direction and, like venomous snakes, burrowed into the wounds on Black Wing's body that were deep enough to show bone.

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However, in the next second, the flesh tentacles behind her reversed direction and, like venomous snakes, bored into the wounds on Black Wing's body that were deep enough to show bone.

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"Hiss..." Black Wing let out a series of strange, rapid syllables, as if in protest and confusion.

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“Hiss...” Black Wing let out a series of strange, rapid syllables, as if protesting and failing to understand.

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The woman's expression returned to coldness. "I know you can recover, but we don't have time."

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The woman's expression returned to coldness. “I know you can recover, but we're out of time.”

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The woman raised her head, gazing toward the Shuguang Nuclear Power Station, her eyes filled with undisguised killing intent and wariness.

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The woman raised her head, looking toward the Shuguang Nuclear Power Station, her eyes filled with undisguised killing intent and wariness.

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"The war is about to begin."

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“The war is about to begin.”

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"That power station is too dangerous. No matter what it is, we absolutely cannot give it any more chance to grow... For the sake of the great civilization, we must end it."

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“That power station is too dangerous. No matter what it is, we absolutely cannot give it any more chance to grow... For the sake of the great civilization, we must end it.”

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Black Wing's limbs scraped fretfully against the ground as it let out another string of syllables.

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Black Wing's limbs scraped anxiously against the ground, again emitting a string of syllables.

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The woman's movements paused for an instant. She looked down at the enormous monster before her, her gaze like that of someone inspecting a tool in need of repair.

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The woman's movements paused for a beat. She looked down at the enormous monster before her, her gaze like that of someone inspecting a tool in need of repair.

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"You're afraid?"

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“You're afraid?”

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A trace of incomprehension crept into the woman's voice. "Afraid of death?"

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A trace of incomprehension crept into the woman's voice. “Afraid of death?”

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Then she reached out, gently stroking the vertical pupil slit in the center of Black Wing's face.

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Then she reached out and gently stroked the vertical eye slit in the center of Black Wing's face.

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"Don't forget, from the moment we appeared, we didn't exist for the sake of 'living.'"

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“Don't forget, from the moment we appeared, we never existed for the sake of 'being alive.'”

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Her voice suddenly turned shrill, carrying a fanatical, operatic cadence.

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Her voice suddenly turned shrill, carrying a fanatical, aria-like cadence.

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"Only life itself is great—not you, not me, not those foolish husks, and certainly not that cold, twisted steel monster."

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“The only thing that is great is life itself—not you, not me, not those foolish husks, and certainly not that cold, twisted steel monster.”

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"The only thing worthy of praise is the vivid thing not yet born. 【Life】 will manifest itself in the instant of its birth."

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“The only thing worthy of praise is the vivid thing not yet born. [Life] will reveal itself in the instant of its birth.”

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"Everything else that already exists is merely an ugly transition! Only the ceaseless creation of greater, more perfect life, at any cost, deserves to be called true civilization."

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“Everything that already exists is nothing but an ugly transition! Only by ceaselessly creating greater and more perfect life, at any cost, can anything be worthy of the name of true civilization.”

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"Just as at this very moment! We will all die, and a more perfect life will be born because of it. That is the only meaning."

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“Just like this very moment! We will all die, and a more perfect life will be born because of it. That is the only meaning.”

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The moment the woman finished speaking, her entire body began to melt like a wax figure, transforming into a viscous, living torrent of flesh that poured madly through the four tentacles and into Black Wing's wounds.

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The moment the woman finished speaking, her entire body began to melt like a wax figure, turning into a viscous, vivid torrent of flesh that, following the four tentacles, surged madly into Black Wing's wounds.

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The next second, the vertical pupil on Black Wing's face blazed with a scarlet light.

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In the next second, the vertical eye on Black Wing's face blazed with a scarlet light.

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Across its pitch-black carapace, countless blood-red filaments burst outward from within like a spiderweb, covering its entire body in the blink of an eye.

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Across its jet-black carapace, countless crimson filaments burst out from within like a spider's web, covering its entire body in the blink of an eye.

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At the same time, its body began to swell at a rate visible to the naked eye.

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At the same time, its body began to swell at a clearly visible speed.