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"This damned world just keeps getting scarier!"

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"This damned world just gets scarier and scarier!"

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In Qingyuan County, Yuanjiang, on the third floor of a shopping mall building, Gu Changchuan lowered the high-powered binoculars, a trace of shock still lingering on his face.

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In Qingyuan County, Yuanjiang, on the third floor of a shopping mall, Gu Changchuan lowered his high-powered binoculars, a trace of shock still on his face.

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In the direction of Huining District, at the far edge of his vision, only broken walls and ruins remained. The once-prosperous ancient city had completely vanished.

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Toward Huining District, nothing remained at the horizon's edge but rubble and broken walls; the once-prosperous old city had completely vanished.

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The power unleashed by that monster hidden above the clouds in a single furious strike was simply too incredible.

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The power unleashed by that monster lurking above the clouds in its furious strike was simply too inconceivable.

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However, based on confirmation from monitors set up at the edge of Huining District, that terrifying black cloud had already drifted far to the north a few days ago.

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However, according to surveillance placed at Huining District's perimeter, that terrifying dark cloud had drifted off toward the far north days ago.

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It seemed that after that eerie giant flesh tree disappeared, there was nothing left here to attract it anymore.

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It seemed that after that bizarre giant flesh tree disappeared, nothing here could attract it any longer.

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"Brother Chuan, stop looking and come see what I found!" Not far away, team member A Hao's excited shout rang out.

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"Brother Chuan, stop looking and come check out what I found!" Not far away, team member A Hao's excited shout rang out.

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Gu Changchuan turned his head and saw the kid running over, hugging a set of brand-new, high-end fishing rods that gleamed with a glossy black sheen in the sunlight.

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Gu Changchuan turned his head to see the kid jogging over carrying a brand-new set of high-end fishing rods, the shafts gleaming dark under the sun.

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Judging by the craftsmanship and brand, before the disaster, you probably couldn't get them for less than tens of thousands of yuan.

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Judging by the craftsmanship and brand, before the disaster it probably would have cost at least tens of thousands.

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"You little brat, your luck is really something!" Old Song popped out from one side, slung an arm around A Hao's shoulder, eyes shining. "How about we brothers go try our luck at the Yuanjiang riverbank one of these days?"

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"You little brat, your luck is amazing!" Old Song popped up from one side, slung an arm around A Hao's shoulders, eyes shining. "Another day, how about us guys go try our luck by the Yuanjiang river?"

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"If you're not afraid of hooking a mutant crocodile, go right ahead," Gu Changchuan said irritably, walking over and giving A Hao a light smack on the back of the head.

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"If you're not afraid of hooking a mutated crocodile, go right ahead," Gu Changchuan said irritably as he walked over and smacked A Hao on the back of the head.

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"We're here to scavenge supplies, not for a picnic! Look at Crew Cut over there, so serious."

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"We're here to scavenge supplies, not for a field trip! Look at Crew Cut over there, so diligent."

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Crew Cut, who had been called out, was grunting with effort as he moved a case of hardware tools out, and upon hearing this, he gave a simple, sheepish grin and touched his head.

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Crew Cut, thus named, was laboriously hauling a crate of hardware tools out, and at those words he scratched his head with a simple, honest smile.

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"Brother Chuan, you just don't get it!" A Hao said, full of conviction. "What's wrong with fishing? Fishing is also a production tool! Didn't you see the task list from big shot Zhuangsheng posted on the kitchen big screen? 'Self-Sufficiency,' you know!"

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"Brother Chuan, you just don't get it!" A Hao argued with conviction. "What's wrong with fishing? Fishing is also a production tool! Didn't you see the mission list from big boss Zhuangsheng posted on the kitchen screen? 'Self-Sufficiency,' you know!"

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"That's a task for the Production Team, what's it got to do with you!" Crew Cut retorted with a grin.

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"That's the Production Team's mission, what's it got to do with you!" Crew Cut shot back with a laugh.

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Listening to the joking and teasing of his team members, Gu Changchuan's tense heartstrings relaxed a little.

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Listening to the banter and laughter of his teammates, Gu Changchuan felt the tension in his heart loosen a little.

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Whatever that giant monster in the clouds was, there would be a way to deal with it someday.

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Whatever that giant monster in the clouds was, there would always be a way to deal with it someday.

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Since joining Dawn Shelter, even a perennial pessimist like him had become a lot more positive.

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Ever since joining Dawn Shelter, even a pessimist like him had become considerably more positive.

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"Alright, cut it out," Gu Changchuan coughed, reassuming the team leader's seriousness. "Get back to work, earn more Honor Value. I heard there's new equipment about to be rolled out, and those with high Honor Value get priority distribution."

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"Alright, quit fooling around," Gu Changchuan coughed, reverting to his captain's solemnity. "Get back to work, earn more Honor Value. I heard there's new gear coming in soon, and those with high Honor Value get first dibs."

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"What new equipment?" A Hao's eyes lit up instantly.

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"What new gear?" A Hao's eyes lit up instantly.

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Gu Changchuan smiled. "Rumor has it it's an electromagnetic rifle."

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Gu Changchuan smiled. "Rumor has it, it's an electromagnetic rifle."

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"Holy shit! For real?!"

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"No shit! For real?!"

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Lin Yue was practically fondling the new gun in his hands with reluctance to put it down.

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Lin Yue was practically fondling the new gun in his hands, unable to put it down.

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The gun body was a matte dark gray, with sleek, powerful lines. It abandoned the complex mechanical structures of traditional firearms, replacing them with a cleaner, more sci-fi modular design.

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The entire body was a matte dark gray, with smooth lines full of a sense of power, abandoning the complex mechanical structures of traditional firearms for a cleaner, sci-fi modular design.

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The outer barrel was wrapped with several rows of cooling fins, and beneath the handguard was a removable, hefty rectangular battery.

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The barrel was wrapped in several rings of heat sinks, and beneath the handguard was a detachable, hefty rectangular battery.

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This was the first experimental sample that Xu Jianguo's team had "cobbled together" on overtime, based on the complete blueprints provided by Ling Yu.

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This was the first experimental sample that Xu Jianguo's team had "whipped up" by working overtime, based on the complete blueprints provided by Ling Yu.

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However, restricted by the shelter's current industrial level, many core components had to use substitute materials of slightly lower performance, but even so, it far surpassed the semi-finished product Xu Jianguo had originally brought.

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However, limited by the shelter's current industrial level, many core components used substitutes with slightly inferior performance, but even so, it far surpassed the semi-finished product Xu Jianguo had brought.

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Lin Yue was the test shooter for this gun. Originally, Ling Yu had planned to assign Zhang Wu or Shen Yan for this task.

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Lin Yue was the test shooter for this gun; originally Ling Yu had planned to have Zhang Wu or Shen Yan do it.

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But when this "Lone Hero" found out about it, he practically threw a tantrum, making a huge fuss and using every trick in the book just to get his hands on the gun first for testing. Ling Yu was deeply impressed by his spirit.

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But once this [Lone Hero] found out about it, he practically threw a fit—crying, fussing, threatening to hang himself—used every trick in the book just to get his hands on the gun first and test it. Ling Yu was deeply shaken by his spirit.

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"Ready?" At the other end of the range, the researcher in charge of data logging spoke into the microphone.

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"Ready?" From the other end of the range, the researcher in charge of recording data shouted into the microphone.

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There was no deafening gunshot, only a faint "hiss," like a high-pressure gas canister releasing pressure.

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There was no deafening gunfire, only a faint hiss like a high-pressure gas cylinder releasing pressure.

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A thread of blue light flashed at the muzzle.

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A tiny flash of blue light flickered at the muzzle.

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In the next instant, on the special concrete target wall a hundred meters away, a smooth circular hole simply appeared out of nowhere, and on the backup steel plate target over a dozen meters behind the concrete wall, the same spot was cleanly pierced.

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The next moment, a smooth round hole appeared out of nowhere in the special concrete target wall a hundred meters away, and on the backup steel plate target over ten meters behind it, the same spot was cleanly pierced through.

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The hypersonic projectile had reached its endpoint almost without a sound. Its terrifying penetrative power made everyone present draw a sharp breath.

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The hypersonic projectile reached its destination almost silently, its terrifying penetrative power making everyone present gasp.

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"Team Leader, let us try it later, okay?" Fang Yi led a bunch of squad leaders from Team Two as they crowded around eagerly. "Look, testing a gun with just one person, the data might not be accurate, right?"

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"Team Leader, let us give it a try later!" Fang Yi, with a bunch of Team Two squad leaders, surrounded him eagerly. "Look, testing it with just one person, the data might not be accurate, don't you think?"

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"Yeah, yeah, we all think Fang Yi's right!" a chorus of agreement sounded around them.

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"Yes, yes, we all think Fang Yi is right!" A chorus of agreement rose around them.

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Aside from those out on missions, practically all the backbone of Team Two was crammed in here, watching Lin Yue fiddle with the firearm with longing eyes. One could only say that as expected of a single team, they were all cut from the same cloth.

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Apart from those on missions, nearly all of Team Two's backbone members had crowded over here, watching Lin Yue fiddle with the firearm. It had to be said they were all cut from the same cloth.

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"Scram!" Lin Yue hugged the gun to his chest like a treasure and waved them off impatiently. "All your training's done? You're all just idle! I haven't had my fill of fun yet!"

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"Shoo, shoo!" Lin Yue hugged the gun protectively to his chest, impatiently waving them off. "All your training done? You're all just lazing about! I'm not done having fun yet!"

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"We finished ages ago!" Fang Yi grew anxious. All his life he'd only loved two kinds of guns: the cool-looking ones and the big-caliber ones. This electromagnetic rifle hit the bullseye right on his heartstrings.

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"Long done!" Fang Yi was desperate. All his life he'd only loved two kinds of guns: cool ones and big-bore ones. This electromagnetic rifle hit right on his heartstrings.

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"How about this, Brother Yue? That limited-quantity braised pig head meat in the cafeteria today at noon—I'll give you my portion, and you let me have one try, okay?"

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"How about this, Brother Yue, today's limited braised pig head meat in the cafeteria—I'll give you my portion in exchange for one try, okay?"

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"Alright, alright, look at you guys and your pathetic aspirations!" Lin Yue was caught between laughs and tears. He cleared his throat. "I'll shoot one more round, then each of you can shoot two rounds."

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"Alright, alright, look at you, so pathetic!" Lin Yue found them both amusing and exasperating. He cleared his throat. "I'll fire one more round, then each of you can fire two."

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"The pig head meat's not necessary, I'm not short on food. But one thing: if you're going to test, do it properly. Anyone whose score is poor goes and adds an extra five-kilometer weighted run!"

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"Forget the pig head meat, I'm not hurting for food. But one thing: if you're going to test, do it properly. If anyone's results are poor, they'll do an extra five kilometers with a weighted pack themselves!"

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"Yes!" The group immediately stood at attention, their voices resounding like a giant bell.

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"Yes, sir!" The group snapped to attention in unison, their voices like a bell.

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The perfectly braised pig head meat glistened with tempting sheen, and Zhao Haisheng, looking at that big tray at the window, was practically drooling.

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The perfectly braised pig head meat gleamed with tantalizing oil. Zhao Haisheng looked at the large tray in the serving window, his mouth watering.

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Fortunately, he'd calculated the duty roster days ago; today's route was just right, allowing him to be among the first diners, arriving right on time.

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Fortunately, he had calculated the work schedule days in advance; today's route was just right, allowing him to arrive precisely on time as one of the first diners.

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Soon he'd grab a plate of neatly sliced pig head meat, then go buy a chilled beer at the window—ah, life of a god!

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Soon he'd carry a plate of neatly sliced pig head meat, then buy a cold beer at the counter—ah, the life of an immortal!

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Even though he came this early, there were still two people in front of him in line.

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Even though he'd arrived so early, there were still two people ahead of him in line.

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An adult and a child, both of whom he knew.

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One adult, one child, both of whom he knew.

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The adult was a newcomer named Xu Jianguo. Hmm, a good name, not flashy.

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The adult was a newcomer named Xu Jianguo—hmm, a good name, not flashy.

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It was said his learning was terrifyingly profound, even more impressive than Professor Su, who practically lived in the shelter's lab every day.

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Rumor had it his learning was frighteningly profound, even more impressive than Professor Su who spent all day in the laboratory at the shelter.

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But Zhao Haisheng didn't care about that; he only knew that this little old man was interesting to talk to and didn't look down his nose at people.

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But Zhao Haisheng didn't care about that; he only knew the little old man was very interesting to talk to and didn't look down his nose at people.

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More importantly, he enjoyed a drink or two, just like Zhao Haisheng, but never overdid it—an excellent drinking buddy.

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More importantly, like him, he enjoyed a drink or two but never overdid it, making an excellent drinking buddy.

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Coincidentally, the two had hit it off right away.

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As fate would have it, they'd hit it off right away.

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Ever since then, in a corner of the cafeteria in the afternoon, you could often see the two old men bragging about their youthful experiences. One would tell how he ventured up mountains to repair electrical lines in terrible weather; the other would recount how he oversaw engineering projects deep in the remote mountains.

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Ever since, in the corner of the cafeteria afternoons, you could often see two old men boasting about their youthful exploits—one telling how he braved harsh weather to climb mountains and repair electrical lines, the other recounting how he oversaw engineering projects deep in the wild mountains.

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Their stories were completely unrelated, yet they chatted with inexplicable rapport, becoming a peculiar sight in the shelter.

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Their stories made no sense together, but they chatted with an inexplicable rapport, becoming a curious spectacle in the shelter.

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And that child was Zhou Qiming, a very thoughtful kid.

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And that child was named Zhou Qiming, a very sensible kid.

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It was said he'd suffered greatly before entering the shelter; stories that made even a grown man like him shake his head.

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It was said he'd suffered terribly before entering the shelter, tales that even made a grown man like him shake his head.

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"What is it, Uncle Zhao?" Zhou Qiming turned around, holding his tray.

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"What is it, Uncle Zhao?" Zhou Qiming turned around with his tray.

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"Oh, Xiaomin didn't finish her homework yesterday, so Teacher Zhang Jing kept her to make it up," Zhou Qiming said quietly.

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"Oh, Xiaomin didn't finish her homework yesterday, so Teacher Zhang Jing kept her behind to make it up," Zhou Qiming said quietly.

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"So you're bringing food back for her!"

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"So you're bringing her food!"

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Without another word, Zhao Haisheng grabbed a clean pair of chopsticks from the side, took half of the piping-hot pig head meat he'd just gotten, and transferred it to the boy's plate, piling it up like a little mountain.

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Without a word, Zhao Haisheng grabbed a clean pair of chopsticks from the side and transferred half of his own steaming hot pig head meat onto the boy's plate, piling it up like a small mountain.

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"Here! A reward for helping me pass the screwdriver yesterday."

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"Here! Reward for handing me the screwdriver yesterday."

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"Uncle Zhao, I can't accept this!" The boy was a little flustered, his face flushing red.

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"Uncle Zhao, I can't!" The boy was a bit flustered, his face flushing red.

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"Enough, you're a man, when I say it's fine it's fine!" Zhao Haisheng slapped the chopsticks on the table. "Take it back and share it with your sister. Kids need to eat more meat to grow."

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"Enough, you're a man, I say it's fine, so it's fine!" Zhao Haisheng slapped his chopsticks on the table. "Take it back and share it with your sister. Kids need more meat to grow up fast."

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"...Thank you, Uncle Zhao!" The boy looked at the meat on his plate and thanked him earnestly.

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"...Thank you, Uncle Zhao!" The boy looked at the meat on his plate and thanked him solemnly.

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"This kid, what's there to be polite about!" Zhao Haisheng waved it off.

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"This kid, what's there to be so polite about!" Zhao Haisheng waved his hand.

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"Old Zhao, mind if we table together?" A familiar voice sounded behind him.

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"Old Zhao, mind if I join you?" A familiar voice sounded behind him.

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He turned around. Xu Jianguo was holding a plate of the same braised pig head meat, with two bottles of beer dangling from his hand, smiling at him.

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He turned around to see Xu Jianguo holding the same braised pig head meat and two bottles of beer, smiling at him.

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Zhao Haisheng laughed. "Hey! How come you even carry a tray like you're about to deliver a report, with your back ramrod straight!"

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Zhao Haisheng laughed. "Hey! I've got to say, even carrying a plate, you look like you're about to give a report, back ramrod straight!"

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"Of course. Let me tell you, back in the day, when I was overseeing the construction of that... in Xichuan..." Xu Jianguo set the snacks on the table and naturally launched into his health tips.

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"Of course. Let me tell you, back in my day when I was in charge of construction in Xichuan..." Xu Jianguo set the snacks on the table and smoothly launched into his health tips.

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The old electrician listened with great interest, occasionally picking up a piece of meat and taking a sip of beer. Such a life was truly comfortable!

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The old electrician listened with relish, occasionally taking a bite of meat and a sip of wine. Life was good!

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"Teacher, I'm so tired! Can I write it tomorrow instead?" Song Xiaomin opened her big, watery eyes wide, trying to cute her way out of it.

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"Teacher, I'm so tired! Can I write it tomorrow?" Song Xiaomin opened her big, watery eyes wide, attempting to cute her way out.

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"No. Tomorrow has tomorrow's homework." Zhang Jing didn't look up as she graded another assignment, her tone gentle but firm.

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"No, tomorrow you'll have tomorrow's homework." Zhang Jing didn't look up from grading another assignment, her tone gentle but firm.

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"But Sister Xiao Xue and Sister Weiyue have all gone out to play!" The girl's eyes quickly filled with tears, looking extremely aggrieved.

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"But Sister Xiao Xue and Sister Wei Yue have all gone out to play!" The girl's eyes rapidly welled up with tears, looking terribly wronged.

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Actually, if her Sister Xiao Xue were here, she would definitely tell her that crying in front of Teacher Zhang was useless; it would only earn her double the homework.

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In truth, if her Sister Xiao Xue were here, she'd definitely tell her that crying in front of Teacher Zhang was useless—it would only earn her double the homework.

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Because Teacher Zhang Jing's credo had always been: you can be fragile, but you must never be weak.

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Because Teacher Zhang Jing's creed had always been: you can be fragile, but you must never be weak.

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In her view, giving in to laziness was a form of weakness.

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In her eyes, giving in to laziness was a form of weakness.

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However, this time, before Teacher Zhang could utter "double homework," the girl's tears miraculously dried up.

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However, this time, before Teacher Zhang could utter "double homework," the girl's tears miraculously receded.

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Because Zhou Qiming's voice sounded at the door: "Teacher, Xiaomin, I've brought lunch back. Hurry and eat!"

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Because Zhou Qiming's voice sounded from the doorway: "Teacher, Xiaomin, I've brought lunch back. Please eat!"

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"Okay!" After getting Zhang Jing's permission, Song Xiaomin darted out like a little rabbit and took the lunch box.

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"Oh!" After receiving Zhang Jing's permission, Song Xiaomin immediately darted out like a little rabbit and took the lunch box.

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Watching the girl's tears vanish in an instant and her unconscious straightening of her little back in front of her brother, Zhang Jing's expression softened a bit.

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Watching the girl instantly hold back her tears and subconsciously straighten her little back in front of her brother, Zhang Jing's gaze softened somewhat.

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This girl seemed very afraid of worrying her brother; whenever Zhou Qiming was around, she would try hard to play the role of a "little adult."

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This girl seemed very afraid of worrying her brother; as long as Zhou Qiming was around, she would strive to play the role of a "little adult."

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This wasn't really a good habit, but... as long as they grew up a bit more, things would get better.

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This wasn't really a good habit, but... as long as they grew a little older, things would get better.

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"Eat slowly, don't rush," Zhang Jing gently stroked the heads of the two children who were buried in their food. "But after eating, you need to quickly finish the homework, because this afternoon we're going to the ecological pod for a practical lesson."

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"Eat slowly, don't rush your meal," Zhang Jing gently stroked the heads of the two children who were devouring their food. "But after eating, you need to finish your homework quickly. There's a practical class in the ecological pod this afternoon."

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"Practical lesson! Yay!" As soon as she heard there would be no listening to lectures, Song Xiaomin immediately cheered. "I want to plant tomatoes!"

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"Practical class! Yay!" As soon as she heard there would be no lectures, Song Xiaomin cheered. "I want to plant tomatoes!"

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"Then quickly finish the homework, or you'll miss the planting phase."

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"Then finish your homework quickly, or you'll miss the planting stage."

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Inside the ecological planting pod, a new batch of vegetables had just been harvested. The person in charge, Sun Yuanzhou, looked at the lush greenery filling the pod and finally breathed a sigh of relief.

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Inside the ecological planting pod, a new batch of vegetables had just been harvested. The person in charge, Sun Yuanzhou, looked at the greenery filling the bins and finally breathed a sigh of relief.

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"Team Leader Shen, I'd like to apply for an experimental plot to try my improved new seeds," he said, turning to Shen Yan, who had come to help prepare the nutrient solution.

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"Team Leader Shen, I'd like to apply for a test plot to try my improved new seeds." He turned to Shen Yan, who had come to help mix nutrient solutions.

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Shen Yan thought for a moment and pointed to a corner area. "As long as it doesn't affect normal fruit and vegetable production, I have no objection."

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Shen Yan thought for a moment and pointed to a corner area. "As long as it doesn't affect normal fruit and vegetable production, I have no objections."

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"But if you want to avoid genetic contamination, you'll probably need to redo some isolation modifications. Put together a list of requirements later, and I'll arrange it."

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"However, to avoid genetic contamination, you'll probably need to do some isolation modifications. Later, compile a list of your requirements, and I'll arrange it."

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"That's great! Thank you so much!"

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"Great! Thank you so much!"

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"No need to thank me. It's just part of my job."

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"No need to thank me. Just part of the job."

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Seeing that things were settled here, Shen Yan turned and left, stopping by the cafeteria to pack two meals, then headed straight to the outside of the Biological Laboratory in Zone B.

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Seeing nothing else to do here, Shen Yan turned to leave, stopped by the cafeteria to pack two meals, and brought them straight to the Biological Laboratory in Zone B.

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There was no response from inside.

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No response from inside.

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Shen Yan was in no hurry. She cleared her throat and raised her voice: "Su Wan! If you don't come out, I'll have Zhuangsheng cut the power to your lab! You don't want the lab to be cut off, do you?"

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Shen Yan wasn't in a hurry. She cleared her throat and raised her voice: "Su Wan! If you don't come out, I'll have Zhuangsheng cut the power to your lab! You don't want the lab to lose power, do you!"

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After a long while, Su Wan's tired and resigned voice came from inside: "Alright, I'm coming out right away."

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After a long while, Su Wan's slightly tired and resigned voice came from inside: "I know! I'll be out right away."

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"Good, I bought food. I'll wait for you on the wall; the view's nice up there!"

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"Alright, I bought food. I'll wait for you on the wall, the view's nice there!"

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"OK!"

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"Okay!"

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On top of the twelve-meter-high black bulwark, Zhou Yi was idly watching the scattered zombies roaming in the distance. His hands itching, he switched a nearby "Rainstorm" rapid-fire turret into manual mode and sprayed the distance with a wild burst.

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Atop the twelve-meter-high black bulwark, Zhou Yi watched the scattered zombies roaming in the distance, bored. On a whim, he switched a nearby "Rainstorm" rapid-fire turret to manual mode and sprayed wildly into the distance.

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Six barrels spun, spewing tongues of flame, and the dense rain of bullets instantly tore a small cluster of zombies a hundred meters away to shreds.

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Six barrels rotated, spitting tongues of flame, and the dense hail of bullets instantly tore a small cluster of zombies a hundred meters away to shreds.

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[Comrade Zhou Yi, please note that your ammunition-wasting behavior has violated the shelter's material management regulations. The corresponding Energy Points have been deducted from your account.]

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[Comrade Zhou Yi, please note that your ammunition wastage violates the shelter's material management regulations. The corresponding Energy Points have been deducted from your account.]

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"I know!" Zhou Yi touched his nose, slightly put out. "It's just a bit annoying. I was the one who hauled all that equipment back, so how did Brother Yue get there first?"

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"I know!" Zhou Yi muttered disgruntledly, rubbing his nose. "It's just frustrating. I was the one who hauled all that equipment back, so how did Brother Yue get the jump on me?"

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[You've been going on about this all morning. Aren't you tired?]

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[You've been grumbling about this all morning. Aren't you tired?]

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[Fine, fine. The next new electromagnetic machine gun, I'll let you try it.]

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[Fine, fine. Next time the new electromagnetic machine gun comes out, we'll get you to test it.]

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[Fake. You'd be better suited as a target. If you've got this much free time, why not go to the range and practice your shooting.]

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[Fake. You'd make a better target. With all this free time, you'd be better off at the range practicing your marksmanship.]

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"Tch!" Zhou Yi curled his lip, but from the corner of his eye, he caught sight of a convoy appearing at the edge of his vision.

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"Tch!" Zhou Yi curled his lip, but out of the corner of his eye he caught sight of a convoy appearing at the edge of his vision.

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"Old bro Zhuangsheng, open the gate, the department head and the others are back."

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"Brother Zhuangsheng, open the gate. The Minister and the others are back."

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The heavy gate slid open silently. Zhang Wu and Chen Mo jumped down from the leading armored vehicle, but both their expressions were somewhat grim.

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The heavy gate slid open silently. Zhang Wu and Chen Mo jumped down from the lead armored vehicle, but both wore serious expressions.

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"We took a look around the Huining ruins. Not much of value, and besides..." Zhang Wu said heavily, "We didn't find the corpse of 'Black Wing' or that parasitized Abyssal Centipede."

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"We took a look around the Huining ruins. Not much of value, and..." Zhang Wu said gravely, "We didn't find the bodies of 'Black Wing' or that parasitized Abyssal Centipede."

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"Either they were obliterated without a trace, or..."

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"Either they were blown to bits, or..."

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He didn't finish his sentence, but everyone present understood what it implied.

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He didn't finish the sentence, but everyone present understood what that meant.

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"Also, on the way back, we discovered that in many areas that originally had dense zombie populations, like around Linping County, the zombie numbers have dropped drastically," Chen Mo added.

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"Furthermore, on the way back, we discovered that in many areas originally dense with zombies, like around Linping County, the zombie numbers had abruptly dropped significantly," Chen Mo added.

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"It's not clear where they went, but at this critical juncture, it's definitely not a good thing."

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"It's currently unclear where they went, but at this critical juncture, it's definitely not good news."

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[No matter. Soldiers against soldiers, earth against water.] Ling Yu's voice sounded at the right moment. [Since you're back, don't overthink it for now. First, go have a good meal.]

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[No matter. We'll stop soldiers with generals, and block water with earth.] Ling Yu's voice chimed in at the right moment. [Since you're back, don't overthink it. First, go have a good meal.]

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[Of all things under heaven, eating is the greatest.]

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[The world might be big, but eating comes first.]

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"A nuclear power station AI, saying something like that?" Shen Yan, who happened to walk over at that moment, said with a strange look.

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"You're a nuclear power station AI, and you can talk like that?" Shen Yan, who happened to walk by and overheard this, said with a strange look.

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[What? Not convinced? What's wrong with a nuclear power station? I eat uranium-235, which is way more nutritious than your food.]

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[What? Not convinced? What's wrong with a nuclear power station? I eat uranium-235, far more nutritious than your food.]

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After a few casual words, Shen Yan temporarily took over Zhou Yi's defensive duty, and the latter went off to eat with Zhang Wu and the others.

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After a few casual exchanges, Shen Yan temporarily took over Zhou Yi's defense duties, while the latter went off with Zhang Wu and the others to eat.

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While waiting for Su Wan, Shen Yan stood on the high wall, gazing far into the distance.

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While waiting for Su Wan, Shen Yan stood atop the high wall, gazing into the distance.

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In the direction of Hairui Biological, dark clouds hung low, as if brewing a sizable storm.

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In the direction of Hairui Biological, dark clouds hung low, as if brewing a storm of considerable scale.

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After watching for a long while, Shen Yan asked softly, "The final battle is coming, isn't it?"

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After watching for a long while, Shen Yan asked softly, "The decisive battle is coming, isn't it?"

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[Based on current intelligence analysis, the probability is no less than 80%.] Ling Yu's voice was calm. [What, scared?]

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[Based on current intelligence analysis, the probability is no less than 80%.] Ling Yu's voice was calm and unruffled. [What, scared?]

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"Scared? What's there to be scared of?" Shen Yan chuckled softly. "You, who can't even run away if you wanted to, aren't scared—what do I have to fear?"

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"Scared? What do I have to be scared of?" Shen Yan chuckled lightly. "You, who can't even run away, aren't scared, so why would I be?"

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[Why do you assume an AI has a concept of fear?]

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[Why would you think an AI has a concept of fear?]

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"Right, you're not human." Shen Yan pretended to consider it seriously for a moment before saying, "It's fine. Being able to fear makes you more human, so I suggest you learn to be afraid."

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"Oh right, you're not human." Shen Yan pretended to ponder seriously for a moment, then said, "It's fine. Being capable of fear makes one more human, so I suggest you learn to be scared."

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[Unfortunately, I'm already perfect. I have no need to become more human.]

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[Unfortunately, I'm already quite fine. There's no need to become more human.]

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"Then you're quite the narcissist." Shen Yan laughed and shook her head. Then her tone turned utterly earnest. "No matter what, I believe we will definitely win."

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"Then you're pretty narcissistic." Shen Yan shook her head with a smile. Then her tone turned extremely serious. "No matter what, I believe we will definitely win."

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"A shelter we worked so hard to build must not collapse because of a few monsters."

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"This shelter we built through so much hardship cannot collapse because of a few monsters."

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The dark clouds of crisis were once again closing in on this rare shelter in the post-apocalyptic world, but the people, who were busily working in an orderly fashion, would no longer be easily panicked.

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The dark clouds of crisis once again loomed over this rare post-apocalyptic refuge, but the people, busy in an orderly fashion with their work, no longer felt easily panicked.

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Even if disaster had once caught them off guard, since they had survived, it was now their turn to launch an all-out counterattack.

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Even though disaster had once caught them off guard, since they had survived, it was now their turn to launch a full counterattack.

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On the highway, Zheng Hai had already set out with his troops on the journey back to Lishan City.

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On the national highway, Zheng Hai and their troops were already on the way back to Lishan.

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Midway, Zheng Hai keenly sensed something off.

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Halfway there, Zheng Hai keenly sensed something was off.

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"What's going on? The number of zombies suddenly dropped so much?"

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"What's going on? The number of zombies has suddenly become so low?"

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He recalled the shelter troops that seemed to be contracting their defensive lines when he left.

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Zheng Hai also recalled the shelter troops that seemed to be pulling back their defensive lines when they left the shelter.

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He looked back in the direction of Anlan District, then turned to the Sentinel beside him and asked worriedly, "Is everything... alright on your side?"

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He looked back in the direction of Anlan District, then, with a worried expression, asked the Sentinel beside him, "Is everything... alright over there?"

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[A minor issue. Just about to go to war.]

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[A minor issue. We're just about to fight a war, that's all.]

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"You call that a minor issue?!" Zheng Hai's heart sank, and he immediately ordered the convoy to pick up speed.

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"You call that a minor issue?!" Zheng Hai's heart sank, and they immediately ordered the convoy to speed up.

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[Either way, you won't make it in time for the first wave of the offensive. No need to rush.]

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[Anyway, you won't make it in time for the first wave, so no need to rush so much.]

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"Three days from now?"

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"Three days later?"

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At the same time, in the shelter area, on the far horizon, a gray-black tide silently emerged.

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At the same time, in the shelter area, on the distant horizon, a gray-black tide silently emerged.

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Then with overwhelming force, it slammed fiercely into the shelter's outermost electric fence defense, sending dazzling electric sparks shooting into the sky.

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Then, with overwhelming force, it slammed violently into the shelter's outermost electric fence lines, sending blinding electric sparks shooting into the sky.

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On the high wall, Shen Yan's eyes blazed brightly. She stared fixedly at the enormous black silhouette on the horizon drawing closer, and softly uttered four words.

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Atop the high wall, Shen Yan's eyes blazed as she stared unblinkingly at the enormous black silhouette approaching from the horizon, and she uttered four words softly.