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The truck stopped at the intersection of Chaoyang Road in Anlan District. Uncle Lin Yue, whose name had a flashy ring to it, jumped down from the driver's seat and waved at them.

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The truck stopped at the entrance of Chaoyang Road in Anlan District. Uncle Lin Yue—whose name had a flashy, colorful ring to it—jumped down from the driver's seat and waved at them.

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"This is the place. Let's go." Lin Yue patted his head. "We already cleared it once ahead of time. Don't be scared."

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"We're here. Let's go," Lin Yue patted his head. "We cleared the place once already. Don't be scared."

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More than a dozen children filed out of the truck bed—some looked around, some stayed silent, some clutched their identity cards with blank, bewildered faces.

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More than a dozen children filed out of the cargo bed. Some looked around, some remained silent, some clutched their identity cards with blank, bewildered faces.

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Zhou Qiming stood at the base of the apartment block, tilting his head up to look at the window on the sixth floor.

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Zhou Qiming stood at the base of the apartment building, looking up at the sixth-floor window.

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The curtain was still the way it had been the day he left, half drawn.

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The curtain was still the way it had been on the day he left—half drawn.

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He asked in a low voice, "This... won't be too much trouble, will it?"

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He asked quietly, "This... won't be too much trouble?"

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The signature electronic voice representing "Zhuangsheng" rang out from the identity card in his hand.

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The iconic electronic voice representing "Zhuangsheng" sounded from the identity card in his hand.

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[This shelter has never objected to survivors searching for family or revisiting old places. We just need to stay rational and not recklessly charge into dangerous areas.]

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[This shelter has never objected to survivors searching for family or revisiting old places. We just need to stay rational and not blindly rush into dangerous areas.]

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[But you're different. You're qualified for priority.]

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[But you're different. You've earned the right to priority.]

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The stairwell was very quiet. No zombies.

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The stairwell was quiet. No zombies.

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There were dried dark stains on the steps, but they had already been treated with lime powder.

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There were dried, dark stains on the steps, but they had already been treated with lime powder.

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At the corner of every floor was a yellow label printed with the words "Cleared—Dawn Shelter Operations Department."

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At the corner of every floor was pasted a yellow label printed with the words "CLEARED — Dawn Shelter Operations Department."

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(This was Zhang Wu's idea. He believed that a sense of ritual was the key factor in coordinating operations and maintaining order.

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(This was Zhang Wu's idea. He believed ritual was a key factor in keeping coordinated operations orderly.

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Besides, if traces were left everywhere, then any survivors who saw them in the future would immediately know that such a shelter existed.)

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And besides, leaving traces everywhere meant that if any survivors came across them in the future, they'd quickly know that a shelter like this existed.)

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The air was thick with the mingled smell of dust and decay.

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The air was thick with the mixed smell of dust and decay.

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Zhou Qiming climbed step by step to the sixth floor, relying on Lin Yue to force open the security door for him.

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Zhou Qiming climbed up to the sixth floor step by step, relying on Lin Yue to force the security door open.

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The living room was a bit messy—a chair had toppled over, half a sofa cushion lay on the floor, and the wall clock had fallen to the ground too.

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The living room was a little messy—a chair toppled over, half the sofa cushion on the floor, and the wall clock had fallen down too.

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On the coffee table still sat a half-eaten apple, now shriveled beyond recognition, and the contents of the refrigerator had molded into black lumps.

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On the coffee table sat a half-eaten apple, now shriveled beyond recognition. The contents of the fridge had already molded into black clumps.

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But perhaps thanks to his having shut the door tightly before he left, there was no blood or anything like that in the house.

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But perhaps thanks to his having closed the doors before he left, there was no blood or anything of the sort in the house.

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After looking around, he crossed the living room and walked into his own room.

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After looking around, he walked through the living room and into his own bedroom.

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Unfinished summer homework sat on the desk, a pencil still clipped between the pages of a notebook.

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Unfinished summer homework lay on the desk, a pencil still tucked between the pages.

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The corners of the dinosaur poster on the wall had curled up, but that Tyrannosaurus rex was still as fierce and mighty as ever.

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The corners of the dinosaur poster on the wall had curled up, but that Tyrannosaurus rex was still as mighty and imposing as ever.

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Then he pulled open the drawer. Three brand-new tickets still lay quietly in the corner. On the face of each ticket, a cartoon dinosaur was grinning, beaming with dazzling joy.

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Then he pulled open the drawer. Three brand-new tickets lay quietly in the corner. On their faces, a cartoon dinosaur grinned, smiling brilliantly.

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Scenes like this were playing out in many homes throughout Anlan District's residential neighborhoods—in the homes these children had once lived in.

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Scenes like this were playing out in many homes in Anlan District's residential neighborhoods—in the former homes of these children.

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All the children whose families were in Anlan and who wanted to go back for a look had been divided into four groups under Ling Yu's unified planning.

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All the children whose homes were in Anlan and wanted to go back for a visit had been divided into four groups under Ling Yu's unified planning.

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Escorted separately by the four squads led by Lin Yue within the Core Operations Department, they had begun this special "spring outing."

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Escorted respectively by the four squads under Lin Yue's leadership in the Core Operations Department, they set out on this special "spring outing."

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Thanks to the sonic repulsion devices Ling Yu had deployed in advance and the repeated clearing by the "Hive" drone system, the danger level on most streets in Anlan District had dropped significantly.

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Thanks to the sonic repulsion devices Ling Yu had deployed in advance and the repeated clearing by the "Hive" UAV system, the danger level of most streets in Anlan District had dropped significantly.

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What's more, the large influx of new population had greatly accelerated the construction of the "Phantom No. 1" pheromone production line, allowing it to be completed ahead of schedule, with enough output to cover the needs of all personnel going out.

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On top of that, the large influx of new population had greatly accelerated the construction of the "Phantom No. 1" pheromone production line, allowing it to be completed ahead of schedule, with output sufficient to cover the needs of all personnel going outside.

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As a result, this special "spring outing" wasn't actually too much trouble, and didn't even affect normal field operations.

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So this special "spring outing" wasn't actually too much trouble, and didn't even affect normal field operations.

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The children went home to look around, while the adults, "in a most unsportsmanlike fashion," cleared out the remaining stray zombies along the way.

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The children went home to take a look, while the adults took the opportunity to "fight dirty" and clear out the remaining scattered zombies along the way.

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They also remapped the urban terrain, or searched every nook and cranny for any wild survivors that might be out there.

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They re-surveyed the urban terrain, or searched the nooks and crannies for any wild survivors who might be out there.

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Only after crying for a long time did Zhou Qiming wipe away his tears and carefully tuck the three tickets against his body.

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After crying for a long time, Zhou Qiming wiped away his tears and carefully tucked the three tickets close to his body.

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Then he rummaged through the room again, packed up a big bundle of comic books and model figures, and also picked up the real "Jiabao."

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Then he rummaged through the room again, packed up a big bag of comic books and models, and picked up the real "Jiabao" as well.

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"Can I... take these?" he asked Lin Yue at the door, a little nervous.

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"These... is it okay?" he asked Lin Yue at the door nervously.

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Lin Yue glanced at the robot vacuum in his arms, smiled, and reached out to ruffle his hair. "Of course you can. We've got several big trucks! Take whatever you want."

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Lin Yue glanced at the robot vacuum in his arms, smiled, and reached out to ruffle his hair: "Of course it's okay. We've got several big trucks! Move whatever you want."

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The back of the truck was already piled with quite a lot of things.

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Quite a bit of stuff had already piled up behind the truck.

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One child was hugging an oversized teddy bear, another had hauled an entire box of Ultraman discs, and a little girl insisted on taking the potted cactus from her balcony despite the risk of getting pricked.

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One child was hugging an oversized teddy bear, another had carried a whole box of Ultraman discs, and a little girl was determined to take the potted cactus from her balcony even at the risk of getting pricked.

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Almost every child was like this. Things that used to feel like boring junk now made them reluctant to part with even the most inconspicuous stool.

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Almost every child was like this—things once felt like boring junk now seemed unbearable to part with, even a nondescript little stool.

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"Things remain, but people are gone"—this was probably what that feeling was.

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This must be what "things remain, but people are gone" felt like.

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Zhou Qiming sat in the truck bed, looking out through the gap in the tarp.

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Zhou Qiming sat in the cargo bed, peering out through the gap in the tarpaulin.

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The streets were quiet. Occasionally a few Operations Department brothers and sisters could be seen slowly patrolling the intersections, carefully keeping the roads safe.

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The streets were quiet. Occasionally he could spot a few older brothers and sisters from the Operations Department slowly patrolling the intersections, carefully ensuring the roads were safe.

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"Over there... was that an explosion?" He pointed in a direction and asked, a little puzzled.

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"Over there... is that an explosion?" He pointed in a direction and asked, puzzled.

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[Your hearing's pretty sharp!] Ling Yu's voice rang out from his identity card.

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[Not bad ears you've got!] Ling Yu's voice sounded from his identity card.

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[It's nothing. There's a strange bird lurking around over there. I'm carrying out some neutralization on it. No need to worry.]

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[It's nothing. There's a strange bird showing up over there. I'm carrying out some neutralization procedures on it. No need to worry.]

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[Received.]

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[Received]

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From his identity card, a simple map was projected into midair.

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On his identity card, a simple map was being projected in midair.

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The map covered a vast area stretching from the Shuguang Nuclear Power Station to nearly half of Anlan District.

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The map covered a broad area from the Shuguang Nuclear Power Station to nearly half of Anlan District.

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Large patches were marked green or yellow, indicating relative safety.

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Large areas were marked green or yellow, indicating relative safety.

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But scattered among them were several eye-catching red skull markers with the words "second-stage mutant" written beside them—forbidden zones that couldn't be approached.

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But dotted among them were several eye-catching red skull markers, labeled "second-stage mutant," marking restricted zones that could not be approached.

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In addition, there were two large blue safe-zone symbols on the map. One was, naturally, the nuclear power station. The other was located at the "Shengshi Huating" residential complex—the deployment site of the "Hive" drone mother unit, and an important frontline relay station.

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In addition, the map had two large blue safe-zone markers. One was naturally the nuclear power station; the other was located in the "Shengshi Huating" neighborhood—the deployment site of the "Hive" UAV mother unit, and an important frontline relay station.

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According to Ling Yu's plan, this could serve as a temporary refuge for Field Squads that encountered emergencies.

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According to Ling Yu's plan, this place could serve as a temporary refuge for Field Squads encountering emergency situations.

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There were also three blue dashed lines—relatively fixed supply transport routes, along which sonic repulsion devices and simple barricades had been deployed.

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There were also three blue dashed lines—relatively fixed supply transport routes, along which sonic repulsion devices and simple roadblocks had been deployed.

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This, then, was the full extent of the Dawn Shelter's influence on the surface at this stage.

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This, then, was the full extent of Dawn Shelter's influence on the surface at the current stage.

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Unlike the warm, relaxed mood of the "spring outing" group, the atmosphere at the edge of that small park could only be described as grim to the extreme.

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Unlike the warm, relaxed mood of the "spring outing" group, at the outskirts of that small park, the atmosphere could only be described as tense to the extreme.

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Chen Mo lay prone on the rooftop of a residential building on the park's periphery, raising binoculars to stare at the distant lake.

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Chen Mo lay prone on the rooftop of a residential building at the park's outskirts, holding binoculars and staring at the lake in the distance.

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Deep in the park, the artificial lake that had once been planted full of lotus flowers was now more than half dried up.

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Deep in the park, the artificial lake once planted with lotus flowers had now dried up by more than half.

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The exposed mud of the lakebed was covered with a dark red, rotting-flesh-like unknown substance. From a distance, it looked like a festering wound.

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The exposed lakebed mud was covered in dark-red, rot-flesh-like unknown matter. From a distance, it looked like a festering wound.

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And in the withered tree canopy beside the lake, a mass of dark red was curled up there.

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And in the crown of a withered tree beside the lake, a dark-red mass lay curled up.

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That was the code name Ling Yu had given it—wingspan over three meters, body surface covered in filthy, rotting-flesh-like tissue, and the ability to launch directional sonic attacks.

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That was the code name Ling Yu had given it. Its wingspan exceeded three meters, its body covered in filthy, rot-flesh-like tissue, and it had the ability to launch directional sonic attacks.

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After initially clearing the low-tier zombies out of Anlan District, pulling out these "hard nails" one by one had long been a plan Ling Yu had settled on.

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After the preliminary purge of low-level zombies in Anlan District, pulling out these "hard nails" one by one had long been Ling Yu's plan.

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After all, he was really looking forward to the reward for his first kill of a second-stage mutant. Last time he killed the "Abyssal Centipede," the reward—the underground ecological barrier and expansion hub—could be said to be extremely useful.

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After all, he was quite looking forward to the reward for his first kill of a second-stage mutant. Last time he killed the "Abyssal Centipede," the underground ecological barrier and expansion hub he'd been rewarded with could be said to be extremely useful.

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"Report. All squad members are in position, and the perimeter has been cleared." Chen Mo said into his identity card.

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"Reporting. All team members are in position. The perimeter has been cleared." Chen Mo said into his identity card.

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[Received. All groups, hold your positions. Do not come within four hundred meters.]

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[Received. All groups hold your positions. Do not approach within four hundred meters.]

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[Your task is perimeter security, and to provide possible support if necessary. Don't get too close.]

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[Your task is perimeter guard, and to provide support if necessary. Don't get too close.]

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"Understood!" Chen Mo replied in a low voice.

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"Understood!" Chen Mo answered in a low voice.

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Nowadays, trained field personnel fighting in teams with firearms could actually already handle first-stage mutants effectively.

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Nowadays, trained field personnel working in teams with firearms could, in fact, already deal with first-stage mutants effectively.

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But second-stage was still beyond what they could manage.

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But second-stage was still beyond what they could handle.

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Whether it was the "Hundred Eyes'" corpse swarm control and heaven-defying beams, the "Abyssal Centipede's" massive body and physical resistance, the white-winged creature's absurd mobility, or Cheng Lin's cheat-like recovery...

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Whether it was "Hundred Eyes'" corpse-horde manipulation and heaven-defying beams, the "Abyssal Centipede's" colossal body and physical resistance, the white-winged creature's absurd mobility, or Cheng Lin's cheat-level recovery...

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Every second-stage mutant possessed extraordinary traits that were difficult to deal with.

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Every second-stage mutant possessed extraordinary traits that were extremely difficult to counter.

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Given the shelter's current level of firepower, if ordinary people were to fight them, even a victory would inevitably be a pyrrhic one.

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With the firepower the shelter currently controlled, pitting ordinary people against them would be a costly victory at best, even if they managed to win.

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Ling Yu naturally wouldn't make such a losing deal, so this hunting operation was once again carried out by him in person.

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Ling Yu naturally wouldn't make such a losing deal, so this hunt was still carried out by him personally.

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Through several days of prior drone harassment and reconnaissance, Ling Yu had basically gotten to the bottom of this "Rot-Wing."

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Through days of prior UAV harassment and reconnaissance, Ling Yu had basically gotten a full measure of this "Rot-Wing's" capabilities.

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Its physical stats were relatively mediocre among second-stage mutants. Its only special feature was the ability to launch directional sonic attacks with physical destructive effects.

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Its physical stats were relatively unremarkable among second-stage mutants. Its only trait was the ability to fire directional sonic attacks with physical destructive effects.

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And so it became Ling Yu's first target.

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So it became Ling Yu's first target.

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After all, as the saying goes, pick the softest persimmon to squeeze!

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After all, as the saying goes, you pick the softest persimmon to squeeze!

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Ling Yu's cold declaration of battle rang through the communication channels of Chen Mo and the others.

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Ling Yu's cold declaration of war rang through the communication channel of Chen Mo and the others.

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It was a swarm of three thousand Soldier Bee drones, divided into six formations, closing in simultaneously from different directions.

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It was a swarm of three thousand Soldier Bee UAVs, divided into six formations, closing in from different directions at the same time.

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And at an altitude of two kilometers above them, a Sky Blade Type 2 UAV circled on standby, the high-energy laser emitter on its belly already primed.

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And at an altitude of two kilometers above them, a "Sky Blade" Type 2 UAV circled on standby, the high-energy laser emitter beneath its belly already primed.

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On the ground, five Sentinel Robots advanced slowly through the trees, their muzzles aimed straight at the monster in the tree.

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On the ground, five Sentinel Robots advanced slowly through the trees, their muzzles pointed straight at the monster in the tree.

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At the same moment, the twisted figure in the canopy abruptly opened its eyes.

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At the same moment, the twisted figure in the tree crown abruptly snapped its eyes open.

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Facing the sky-blanketing drone swarm, "Rot-Wing" opened its mouthparts—which had no beak, only rings of sharp teeth—and let out a piercing shriek.

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Facing the overwhelming UAV swarm, "Rot-Wing" opened its mouthparts—which had no beak, only rings of sharp teeth—and let out a piercing shriek.

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An invisible sonic shockwave burst outward from it!

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An invisible sonic shockwave erupted outward from its center!

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The air twisted violently. The dozens of drones bearing the brunt instantly disintegrated midair, turning into flying debris.

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The air twisted violently. The dozens of UAVs that bore the brunt disintegrated in midair in an instant, scattering into flying parts.

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But the lasers fired by the Soldier Bee drones behind had already struck "Rot-Wing's" body, burning countless small holes into it.

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But by then, the lasers fired by the Soldier Bee UAVs behind had already struck "Rot-Wing's" body, burning countless small holes into it.

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"Rot-Wing's" sonic shockwave was astonishingly powerful, but Ling Yu wasn't flustered.

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"Rot-Wing's" sonic blast was astonishingly powerful, but Ling Yu wasn't flustered.

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This kind of area attack most likely had the weakness of enormous energy consumption and an inability to fire continuously—but Ling Yu's drones were far more numerous than that.

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This kind of area attack most likely had the weakness of massive energy consumption and an inability to be fired consecutively. And Ling Yu's UAVs were far from limited to just that many.

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Above the park, the massive drone swarm moved as if at his command, rapidly climbing to escape the sonic wave's effective kill radius while the laser emitters beneath the drone frames began their next round of firing.

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Above the park, the massive UAV swarm, moving as easily as an extension of his own arm, rapidly climbed out of the sonic attack's effective kill radius, while the laser emitters beneath their hulls had already begun the next round of firing.

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Thousands of laser beams interwove into a net of death, precisely covering the withered tree where "Rot-Wing" perched.

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Thousands of laser beams wove into a net of death, precisely blanketing the withered tree where "Rot-Wing" perched.

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Its rotting-flesh tissue seemed able to absorb some of the energy, providing defense, but in the face of this all-directional, no-blind-spot continuous scorching, it still proved powerless.

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Its rotting flesh tissue seemed able to absorb some energy as defense, but against this all-directional, no-blind-spot sustained scorching, it still proved utterly futile.

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The shrill shriek rang out again, but far shorter than before, filled with pain and fury.

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A shrill shriek rang out again, much shorter than before, filled with pain and fury.

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The dark red tissue was scorched by the extreme heat, belching wisps of black smoke. The air filled with the stench of burned protein.

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Dark-red tissue burned under the high heat, belching plumes of black smoke, and the stench of scorched protein spread through the air.

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"Rot-Wing" suddenly spread its fleshy wings, trying to take to the air—but the five Sentinel Robots on the ground opened fire simultaneously.

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"Rot-Wing" suddenly spread its flesh wings, trying to take to the air, but the five Sentinel Robots on the ground opened fire simultaneously.

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Muzzles roared, spitting tongues of flame. The dense rain of bullets instantly shredded the canopy around it, and the powerful kinetic impact knocked it off balance in an instant.

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Gun muzzles roared, spitting tongues of flame. The dense hail of bullets instantly shredded the tree crown around it, and the powerful kinetic impact knocked it off balance in an instant.

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In that moment, its massive body became the easiest target to hit.

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In that moment, its massive body became the easiest target imaginable.

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Laser burns, bullets tearing—black bodily fluids splattered everywhere, wounds so deep the bone showed through.

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Lasers seared, bullets tore. Black bodily fluids splattered everywhere, wounds so deep the bone showed through.

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In a single exchange, it was nearly shot into a sieve.

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In a single exchange, it was nearly riddled into a sieve.

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But even so, it somehow still hadn't died. Instead, it suddenly contracted its body, the dark red patterns across its whole body flaring up, and then unleashed the most powerful sonic roar yet!

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But even so, it still wasn't dead. Instead, it suddenly contracted its body, all its dark-red patterns flaring to life at once, and then unleashed the most powerful sonic roar yet!

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The invisible shockwave swept out in a fan shape. The second formation of drones directly ahead lost more than half in an instant. Even the distant Sentinel Robots were shaken, their frames rocking and their firepower stalling for a split second.

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The invisible shockwave swept out in a fan shape. The Second Formation's UAVs directly ahead lost more than half in an instant. Even the distant Sentinel Robots were shaken, their fire faltering for a split second.

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Seizing this hair-thin opening, "Rot-Wing's" massive body shot skyward like a cannonball, fleeing toward the sky at terrifying speed.

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Seizing that hair's-breadth opening, "Rot-Wing's" massive body shot skyward like a cannonball, fleeing toward the sky at astonishing speed.

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However, the injuries inflicted earlier were not without effect. At this moment, its mobility was completely inferior to what it had been.

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However, the injuries it had sustained earlier were not without effect. At this moment, its mobility was now far worse than before.

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Then, a laser with power far exceeding that of the Soldier Bee drones shot out from the Sky Blade's belly.

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Then, a laser with power far exceeding the Soldier Bees' shot out from the Sky Blade's belly.

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A scream twisted out of shape by agony tore through the sky.

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A scream so shrill it warped tore through the sky.

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The high-energy laser instantly vaporized most of the flesh tissue connecting its right wing. At the charred black break, even its regeneration ability was completely destroyed.

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The high-energy laser instantly vaporized most of the flesh connecting its right wing. At the charred, blackened break, even its regeneration ability was completely destroyed.

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Off balance, "Rot-Wing" fell like a kite with a snapped string, spiraling down from the sky and slamming heavily onto the roof of an abandoned factory building, kicking up a huge cloud of dust.

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Thrown off balance, "Rot-Wing" spiraled down from high above like a kite with its string snapped, slamming heavily onto the roof of an abandoned factory and kicking up a large cloud of dust.

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Before it could even struggle to its feet, the three drone formations that had long been on standby swept in from all directions like a school of sharks that had caught the scent of blood.

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Before it could struggle back to its feet, the three UAV formations that had been on standby swept in from all directions like a school of sharks scenting blood.

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This time, there was no luck to be had.

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This time, there was no luck left.

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The sky-blanketing torrent of laser beams completely drowned it.

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The overwhelming laser barrage completely submerged it.

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[Operation concluded.]

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[Operation complete.]

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Chen Mo immediately led the team out, everyone's face carrying a hint of stunned excitement.

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Chen Mo immediately led the team out, a hint of awed excitement on everyone's face.

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[Ding! Detected host's first kill of second-stage mutant 'Rot-Beast' x1. Obtained civilization points: 500.]

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[Ding! Detected host's first kill of second-stage mutant "Rot-Beast" x1. Civilization points obtained: 500.]

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[Ding! Obtained special drop blueprint: Sonic Resonance Suppressor (Area Type) x1.]

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[Ding! Special drop blueprint obtained: Sonic Resonance Suppressor (Area Type) x1.]

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[Sonic Resonance Suppressor: Can create a special force field that interferes with and blocks sonic attacks of specific frequencies. Effective range: one kilometer. Note: extremely high energy consumption.]

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[Sonic Resonance Suppressor: Can create a special force field that interferes with and blocks sonic attacks of specific frequencies. Effective range: 1 kilometer. Note: extremely high energy consumption.]

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This is good stuff!

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Great stuff!

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Just from the description alone, this thing's technological sophistication was far from ordinary. It was absolutely in the same tier of black technology as that underground hub.

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Just from the description, the technological sophistication of this thing was anything but ordinary. It was definitely the same tier of black tech as that underground hub.

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He'd thought right—these second-stage mutants were each a genuine technology reward package!

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He'd been right. These second-stage mutants were each a genuine technology reward package!

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"Zhuangsheng, Team 2 found something over here!" Li Fei's voice was very excited, and the roar of a drilling rig could be heard in the background.

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"Zhuangsheng, Team 2 dug something up!" Li Fei's voice was excited, and the roar of running drill bits could be heard in the background.

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Hearing this, Ling Yu snapped to attention. For a moment, he was so excited his reactor nearly jumped out of its casing.

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Hearing this, Ling Yu snapped to attention, and for a moment he was so excited his reactor nearly jumped out.

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When the geological exploration team had been formed, it had been divided into two teams based on vehicles.

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When the geological exploration teams were formed, they had been split into two groups based on vehicles.

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Team 1, directly led by Wang Hai, was responsible for Yuanjiang's underground network, while Team 2, led by Li Fei, had been assigned a special task by Ling Yu—to see if they could find a route to the mine at Gangshan.

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Team 1, directly led by Wang Hai, was responsible for the underground network of Yuanjiang City, while Team 2, led by Li Fei, had been assigned a special mission by Ling Yu—to see whether they could open up a route to the mines at Gangshan.

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[Mission Description: The assembly line has taken initial shape, but the roar of machinery needs raw materials to feed it. The host must establish at least one stable mineral collection line and bring the primary industrial manufacturing center to full-load operation.]

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[Mission Description: The assembly line has taken initial shape, but the roar of machinery needs raw materials to feed it. Host must establish at least one stable mineral extraction line and bring the primary industrial manufacturing center to full-capacity operation.]

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[Mission Reward: 50,000 civilization points, unlock Ore Smelting Center ×1, blueprint ×1.]

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[Mission Reward: 50,000 civilization points, unlock Ore Smelting Center x1, blueprint x1.]

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If they could establish a stable mineral collection route, then this mission would have truly taken its first real step. How could Ling Yu not be excited?

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If a stable mineral extraction route could be established, this mission would have truly taken its first step. How could Ling Yu not be excited?