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The electric gate slid open to both sides ahead of time, and the battered trucks, covered in scrapes and dents, filed through one after another.

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The electric gate slid open in advance, and the battered trucks, covered in scrapes and dents, filed through one after another.

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Seven or eight zombies still trailed the tail of the last truck. They had chased the exhaust fumes and engine noise all the way here, less than fifty meters from the gate.

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Seven or eight zombies still trailed the last truck. They had chased the exhaust fumes and engine noise all the way here, ending up less than fifty meters from the gate.

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The moment the last truck was through, the gate slammed shut. The three zombies in the lead crashed headfirst into it, then were shot dead from behind.

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The moment the last truck was through, the gate slammed shut. The three zombies in front crashed headfirst into it, then were shot dead from behind.

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The number of zombies outside the gate wasn't large—a dozen or so, stragglers that had trailed the trucks.

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There weren't many zombies outside the gate—only a dozen or so stragglers that had followed the trucks.

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After a few rounds of sustained fire, quiet had returned outside the gate in under three minutes.

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After a few sustained bursts of gunfire, silence had returned outside the gate in less than three minutes.

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Zhou Yi led the hundred-plus new survivors, under the escort of several team members, to the registration center in the underground base.

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Zhou Yi led the hundred-plus new survivors, escorted by several team members, to the registration center in the underground base.

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Zhang Wu, meanwhile, took another group, leading the thirty-four "swollen-belly patients," including Chen Mo, to the shelter's newly opened medical center.

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Meanwhile, Zhang Wu took another group and led the thirty-four "swollen-belly patients," including Chen Mo, to the shelter's newly opened medical center.

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The shelter's only three doctors and one nurse were already prepared, standing by in full readiness.

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The shelter's only three doctors and one nurse were already prepared and standing by in full readiness.

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This temporary medical center was also something Ling Yu had urgently materialized while the convoy was on its way back.

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Ling Yu had also urgently materialized this temporary medical center while the convoy was on its way back.

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And the cost was only 300 civilization points—for the sake of the shelter's overall medical health, that wasn't expensive.

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And it had cost only 300 civilization points—for the sake of the shelter's overall medical health, that wasn't expensive.

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First came medical history inquiries, then a series of examinations. Fortunately, the number of patients wasn't large, and the equipment was fairly advanced, so the results came back quickly.

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They began with medical-history questions, followed by a series of examinations. Fortunately, there weren't many patients, and the equipment was fairly advanced, so the results came back quickly.

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After confirming that none of these people had any additional conditions that would affect the surgery, they prepared to begin.

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After confirming that none of the patients had any additional conditions that would affect the surgery, they prepared to begin.

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The shadowless lamp cast a stark white light across the operating table. Three doctors and one nurse were in position.

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The shadowless lamp cast a stark white light across the operating table. Three doctors and one nurse took their positions.

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Beyond them, Su Wan, who had heard the news, was also in the operating room, a box of inhibitors at her side, standing quietly in the corner.

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Su Wan, who had heard the news, was also in the operating room, a box of inhibitors at her side as she stood quietly in the corner.

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Chen Mo was the first on the table—his condition was relatively worse.

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Chen Mo was first on the table—his condition was relatively worse.

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He was fully conscious, even turning his head to glance at the Sentinel Robot that didn't seem to belong in an operating room—the thing stood beside the table, its mechanical arm's claw grippers swapped for precision clamps, like a not-very-friendly orderly.

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He was fully conscious. He even turned his head to glance at the Sentinel Robot that didn't seem to belong in an operating room. The thing stood beside the table, its mechanical arm's claw grippers replaced with precision clamps, like a not-very-friendly orderly.

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But in all his years of practice, he had never seen a condition like this. Watching the squirming beneath the skin, as if something alive, even he couldn't help but feel his scalp crawl.

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But in all his years of practice, he had never seen a condition like this. Watching something squirm beneath the skin as if it were alive, even he couldn't help but feel his scalp crawl.

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But the arrow was already on the string and had to be loosed—at this moment, there was nothing to do but steel himself and go in.

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But the arrow was already on the string and had to be loosed. At this point, there was nothing to do but steel himself and begin.

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The male doctor beside him switched on the anesthesia machine, adjusted the dosage, and began administering the anesthesia.

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The male doctor beside him switched on the anesthesia machine, adjusted the dosage, and began administering the anesthetic.

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"I'm fine. What's wrong, Doctor?" Chen Mo was a little confused.

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"I'm fine. What's wrong, Doctor?" Chen Mo asked, a little confused.

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The moment his skin was cut, Chen Mo's body only gave a slight twitch, then settled.

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The moment his skin was cut, Chen Mo's body gave only a slight twitch, then settled.

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He turned his head, stared at the ceiling, his breathing steady.

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He turned his head and stared at the ceiling, his breathing steady.

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Doctor Liu separated the tissue layer by layer, his movements quick and stable.

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Doctor Liu separated the tissue layer by layer, his movements quick and steady.

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It was about twice the size of an adult fist, overall an irregular ellipsoid, its surface covered in dense, tiny villous protrusions.

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It was about twice the size of an adult fist, an irregular ellipsoid overall, its surface covered in dense, tiny villous protrusions.

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At the tip of every "villus" was a black opening the size of a needlepoint, opening and closing rhythmically, as if breathing.

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At the tip of every "villus" was a black opening the size of a needlepoint. The openings opened and closed rhythmically, as if breathing.

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At the same time, a dozen or so translucent tubular structures extended from its base, plunging deep into the stomach wall. The stomach wall around the roots had already turned an abnormal gray-purple.

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At the same time, a dozen or so translucent tubular structures extended from its base, plunging deep into the stomach wall. The stomach wall around their roots had already turned an abnormal gray-purple.

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The moment the words left his mouth, the parasite seemed to sense the gaze upon it, and the villi over its entire surface suddenly stood on end.

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The moment the words left his mouth, the parasite seemed to sense the gaze upon it, and the villi covering its entire surface suddenly stood on end.

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The next second, the upper half exposed to the air began to change at a visible rate—the soft tissue rapidly hardened and deformed, its color shifting from red to black.

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The next second, the upper half exposed to the air began to change at a visible rate. The soft tissue rapidly hardened and deformed, its color shifting from red to black.

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The monitor let out a piercing alarm. The whites of his eyes were turning red, and black bloody foam was welling up from his mouth—the precursor to zombification.

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The monitor let out a piercing alarm. The whites of his eyes were turning red, and black, bloody foam welled up from his mouth—the precursor to zombification.

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But if they left it alone, the hardening was still spreading downward.

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But if they left it alone, the hardening would continue spreading downward.

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At the same time, at Su Wan's instruction, the female doctor picked up an inhibitor, leaned in, and, avoiding the hardened area, worked the needle into the still-unhardened translucent tubular roots at the parasite's base.

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At the same time, following Su Wan's instructions, the female doctor picked up an inhibitor, leaned in, and, avoiding the hardened area, worked the needle into the still-unhardened translucent tubular roots at the parasite's base.

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The parasite's writhing frequency began to drop.

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The parasite's writhing began to slow.

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The roots buried in the stomach wall went from taut to slack, as if the strength had been drained out of them.

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The roots buried in the stomach wall went from taut to slack, as if their strength had been drained away.

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The villous pores on its surface closed more slowly, and the central fissure stopped its squirming.

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The villous pores on its surface closed more slowly, and the central fissure stopped squirming.

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Each time a root was separated, the parasite shuddered, but under the double restraint of the Sentinel Robot's clamped arm and the inhibitor, it couldn't break loose.

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Each time a root was separated, the parasite shuddered, but under the Sentinel Robot's clamped arm and the inhibitor's double restraint, it couldn't break loose.

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Then Liu Mingyuan began re-examining the damage to the stomach wall.

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Then Liu Mingyuan began reexamining the damage to the stomach wall.

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"This isn't normal." Liu Mingyuan frowned and glanced up at Chen Mo, but the latter showed no strange changes, nor any sign of zombification.

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"This isn't normal." Liu Mingyuan frowned and glanced up at Chen Mo, but the latter showed no strange changes or any sign of zombification.

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Liu Mingyuan looked over at his words, and then he saw something incredible.

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Liu Mingyuan looked over, and then he saw something incredible.

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But he had barely begun the separation when Chen Mo's heart rate on the monitor jumped straight from sixty-eight beats per minute to one hundred forty, and his blood pressure began to plummet off a cliff.

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But he had barely begun separating it when Chen Mo's heart rate on the monitor jumped straight from sixty-eight beats per minute to one hundred forty, and his blood pressure began to plummet.

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On the operating table, Chen Mo had stayed conscious the whole time. He had heard every word.

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On the operating table, Chen Mo had remained conscious the whole time. He had heard every word.

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Ling Yu was the first to notice the anomaly—on the surveillance feed, thermal signals were increasing on the road north of the power station.

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Ling Yu was the first to notice the anomaly. On the surveillance feed, thermal signals were increasing on the road north of the power station.

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Shen Yan frowned, then stood up, hefting her rifle and looking toward the sentry post nearby.

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Shen Yan frowned, then stood up, hefted her rifle, and looked toward the nearby sentry post.

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"You mean, this kind of sound won't attract them—it'll drive them away?"

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"You mean this kind of sound won't attract them—it'll drive them away?"

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A rather grating sound came out of the speakers. Fortunately, Shen Yan and the others had come prepared with earplugs, so they weren't caught by it as well.

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A rather grating sound came out of the speakers. Fortunately, Shen Yan and the others had come prepared with earplugs, so they weren't affected by it as well.

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Their movements became more chaotic and disordered. Some started spinning in place, and others even clutched their heads and collapsed to the ground.

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Their movements became more chaotic and disordered. Some started spinning in place, while others even clutched their heads and collapsed to the ground.

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Like cats that had their tails stepped on, they lost all sense of direction and simply sprinted away from the sound source.

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Like cats whose tails had been stepped on, they lost all sense of direction and simply sprinted away from the sound source.

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This panic-like state spread rapidly, and the zombies further back quickly joined the mad dash out of the sound coverage.

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This panic-like state spread rapidly, and the zombies farther back quickly joined the mad dash out of the sound coverage.

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[Mm. Once we set up broadcast equipment on the perimeter and loop it twenty-four hours a day, it'll be like adding an invisible barrier.]

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[Mm. Once we set up broadcast equipment around the perimeter and loop it twenty-four hours a day, it'll be like adding an invisible barrier.]