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The three trucks were parked in a triangle formation on the plaza before the entrance, engines still running.

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The three trucks were parked in a triangle on the plaza in front of the entrance, their engines still running.

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A “Soldier Bee” formation formed a hemispherical defensive ring in the air, lasers continuously reaping the zombies flooding in from the surrounding streets.

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A “Soldier Bee” formation created a hemispherical defensive ring in the air, its lasers continuously reaping through the zombies flooding in from the surrounding streets.

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A layer of charred corpses had already covered the plaza, and the air reeked of burnt protein.

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A layer of charred corpses already covered the plaza, and the air reeked of burnt protein.

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The gray-white facade was crawling with dark-red flesh tissue, especially dense from the fifth floor down. Those pulsing sinews looked like blood vessels that had grown out of the building, slowly contracting with a steady rhythm.

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The gray-white facade was crawling with dark-red flesh, especially thick from the fifth floor downward. The pulsing sinews looked like blood vessels that had grown out of the building, slowly contracting in a steady rhythm.

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[Floors one through six have extremely high zombie density—rough estimate over four hundred. The passage to the seventh floor is sealed. Between the seventh floor and the roof is comparatively safe. Survivor heat sources are concentrated on the seventh floor and the roof.]

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[Floors one through six have extremely high zombie density—rough estimate: over four hundred. The passage to the seventh floor is sealed. The area between the seventh floor and the roof is comparatively safe. Survivor heat sources are concentrated on the seventh floor and the roof.]

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Two Sentinel Robots pushed open the main doors first, infrared sights on their muzzles glowing in the darkness.

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Two Sentinel Robots pushed open the main doors first, the infrared sights on their muzzles glowing in the darkness.

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The interior of the building was worse than it looked from outside. The first floor of the mall was almost entirely covered in flesh, like stepping onto a soft, rotten carpet of meat; every step made a sticky, squelching sound.

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The building’s interior was worse than it had appeared from outside. The first floor of the mall was almost entirely covered in flesh, like a soft, rotten carpet of meat; every step produced a sticky squelch.

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Shelves had toppled, merchandise was scattered everywhere, and a fine red network of flesh had grown over it all.

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Shelves had toppled, merchandise lay scattered everywhere, and a fine red network of flesh had grown over it all.

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The Sentinel Robots opened fire. Six tongues of flame erupted at once, the sharp reports merging into a continuous roar.

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The Sentinel Robots opened fire. Six tongues of flame erupted at once, their sharp reports merging into a continuous roar.

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Bullets poured down like a storm, mowing down swaths of the oncoming zombie horde.

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Bullets poured down like a storm, mowing through swaths of the oncoming zombie horde.

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The zombies on the first floor seemed unusually sluggish. Most were lying prone on the flesh covering the ground, as if feeding—or hibernating.

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The zombies on the first floor seemed unusually sluggish. Most lay prone on the flesh covering the ground, as if feeding—or hibernating.

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A path was quickly cleared. Zhang Wu and the others wasted no time; stepping over corpses, they hurried into the fire stairwell.

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A path was quickly cleared. Zhang Wu and the others wasted no time. Stepping over corpses, they hurried into the fire stairwell.

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The stairwell was narrower and darker, with only emergency lights still flickering fitfully.

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The stairwell was narrower and darker, with only the emergency lights still flickering fitfully.

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Zhang Wu joined the fight alongside his men, his assault rifle precisely headshotting every mutant that was about to break through the Sentinels’ fire net.

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Zhang Wu joined his men in the fight, his assault rifle precisely headshotting every mutant about to break through the Sentinels’ fire net.

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At the corner of the fifth floor, however, a zombie with a clearly different build appeared, crouching on the wall.

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At the corner of the fifth floor, however, a zombie with a distinctly different build appeared, crouching on the wall.

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It was thinner than a normal zombie. Its limb joints bent backward, and its spine was exposed, forming a row of serrated bone spurs.

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It was thinner than a normal zombie. Its limb joints bent backward, and its exposed spine formed a row of serrated bone spurs.

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It was so piercing that everyone felt a sharp sting in their temples.

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The sound was so piercing that everyone felt a sharp sting in their temples.

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But the thing reacted extremely fast. Its backward-bent limbs sprang violently, sending it from the wall to the ceiling, then to the opposite wall.

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But the thing reacted extremely fast. Its backward-bent limbs sprang violently, launching it from the wall to the ceiling, then to the opposite wall.

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But Zhang Wu caught it during its recovery and raised his rifle.

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But Zhang Wu caught it as it recovered and raised his rifle.

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The armor-piercing round hit it in midair, piercing its chest cavity, and as the zombie fell, a Sentinel Robot shot it in the head.

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The armor-piercing round struck it in midair, piercing its chest cavity. As the zombie fell, a Sentinel Robot shot it in the head.

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Ling Yu, however, paid no attention to this system notification, because through the Sky Blade Type 2’s perspective outside the building, he detected an extremely massive heat source approaching.

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Ling Yu, however, paid no attention to the system notification. Through the Sky Blade Type 2’s perspective outside the building, he had detected an extremely massive heat source approaching.

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“Understood!” Zhang Wu also realized the situation was dire and immediately ordered, “Everyone listen up! Follow me, charge!”

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“Understood!” Zhang Wu also realized how dire the situation was and immediately ordered, “Everyone, listen up! Follow me—charge!”

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There were a hundred or so, men and women, old and young. Their clothes were ragged, but there was still life in their eyes.

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There were around a hundred of them, men and women, old and young. Their clothes were ragged, but there was still life in their eyes.

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The man froze for a moment, then nodded hard, turned, and shouted inside, “Did you all hear that?! Grab your things and follow them!”

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The man froze for a moment, then nodded hard. He turned and shouted inside, “Did you all hear that?! Grab your things and follow them!”

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“Uncle!” she cried out anxiously. “Uncle Chen! Uncle Chen and the others are still upstairs!”

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“Uncle!” she cried anxiously. “Uncle Chen! Uncle Chen and the others are still upstairs!”

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“Yes, that’s right!” The man nodded hurriedly and explained in a rush, “Up there are my brothers—Chen Mo and the others! To leave food for us, they ate those... those god-awful things growing out of the walls!”

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“Yes, that’s right!” The man nodded hurriedly and explained in a rush, “My brothers are up there—Chen Mo and the others! To leave food for us, they ate those... those god-awful things growing out of the walls!”

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The man pointed at the fist-sized red fruits hanging on the dark-red flesh of the surrounding walls and briefly explained the situation at a breakneck pace.

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The man pointed at the fist-sized red fruits hanging from the dark-red flesh on the surrounding walls and briefly explained the situation at breakneck speed.

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Their bellies were all swollen high, the skin so thin that the writhing things beneath were visible.

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Their bellies were all swollen high, their skin so thin that the writhing things beneath were visible.

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A young man leaning against the railing looked up at the sudden appearance of armed personnel and, after a long moment, forced out a single sentence.

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A young man leaning against the railing looked up at the sudden appearance of the armed personnel and, after a long moment, forced out a single sentence.

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“Yes.” The young man pushed himself up off the railing and stood.

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“Yes.” The young man pushed himself off the railing and stood.

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His belly looked as if something was churning inside it, and one after another, fist-sized lumps pushed up beneath the skin.

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His belly looked as if something were churning inside it, and one after another, fist-sized lumps pushed up beneath his skin.

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More than 130 survivors were packed in batches into the cargo beds of the three trucks. Chen Mo and the other thirty-four “swollen-bellied patients” were put in a separate compartment on the second truck, guarded the whole way by one squad plus a Sentinel Robot.

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More than 130 survivors were packed in batches into the cargo beds of the three trucks. Chen Mo and the other thirty-four “swollen-bellied patients” were placed in a separate compartment on the second truck, guarded the entire way by one squad and a Sentinel Robot.

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The survivors ran toward the trucks over the corpses on the first floor. Many were so frightened their legs gave out, and they had to be pushed forward by the people behind them.

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The survivors ran toward the trucks over the corpses on the first floor. Many were so frightened that their legs gave out, and the people behind them had to push them forward.

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A figure leaped out through the shattered glass and slammed onto the road directly in front of the convoy, cracking the asphalt.

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A figure leaped through the shattered glass and slammed onto the road directly in front of the convoy, cracking the asphalt.

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The thing straightened up—about two meters tall, lean, its entire body covered in a layer of pale-gray chitinous armor hugging the skin.

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The thing straightened up. It was about two meters tall and lean, its entire body covered in a layer of pale-gray chitinous armor that hugged its skin.

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It had no mouth, no nose—only a pair of huge, pitch-black compound eyes, like two black mirrors reflecting the convoy’s lights.

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It had no mouth and no nose—only a pair of huge, pitch-black compound eyes, like two black mirrors reflecting the convoy’s lights.

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Seeing the number of enemies increasing, it backed up two steps, then turned and vanished into the depths of an alley at astonishing speed.

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Seeing the number of enemies increase, it backed up two steps, then turned and vanished into the depths of an alley at astonishing speed.

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Zhang Wu and the others naturally didn’t go after it; they just kept their heads down and drove.

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Zhang Wu and the others naturally didn’t go after it; they simply kept their heads down and drove.

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The shaking underfoot grew more violent.

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The shaking beneath them grew more violent.

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In the rearview mirror, most of Letian District’s skyline had been swallowed by the white fog. Within the fog, a silhouette too vast to comprehend moved slowly, faintly visible.

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In the rearview mirror, most of Letian District’s skyline had been swallowed by the white fog. Within it, a silhouette too vast to comprehend moved slowly, faintly visible.

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“Go go go go go!” Zhou Yi floored the gas pedal while muttering under his breath.

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“Go, go, go, go, go!” Zhou Yi floored the gas pedal while muttering under his breath.

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Reinforced concrete shattered, fractured, and collapsed under that blow.

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Reinforced concrete shattered, fractured, and collapsed under the blow.

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In the cargo beds, only the roar of engines and the survivors’ suppressed breathing remained.

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In the cargo beds, only the roar of the engines and the survivors’ suppressed breathing remained.

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“Right.” Zhou Yi’s attitude lifted Zhang Wu’s spirits too. He glanced back at the cargo bed—at least they had brought the people back. “There will always be a way eventually.”

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“Right.” Zhou Yi’s attitude lifted Zhang Wu’s spirits, too. He glanced back at the cargo bed—at least they had brought the people back. “There will always be a way eventually.”

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In a corner of the cargo bed, Chen Mo looked down at his swollen belly. Although he had received that pale blue serum, the writhing inside had slowed a great deal, but it still had not stopped.

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In a corner of the cargo bed, Chen Mo looked down at his swollen belly. Although he had received that pale blue serum, the writhing inside had slowed considerably, but it still had not stopped.

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The thing inside his belly seemed to be “afraid” of that fog too.

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The thing inside his belly seemed to be “afraid” of that fog, too.