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Chen Mo—a quiet name, and a man who was just as quiet.

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Chen Mo—a quiet name for a man who was just as quiet.

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Because he had never been good at talking with people since childhood, his social skills poor, he was used to going his own way.

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Because he had never been good at talking to people, even as a child, his social skills were poor, and he was used to going his own way.

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If he had been a little more ambitious, he might have lamented his “failure” of a life, seeing nothing but darkness ahead and no worth to his existence.

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If he had been a little more ambitious, he might have lamented his “failure” of a life, seeing nothing but darkness ahead and no worth in his existence.

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But he didn't. His ambition was just as ordinary. It only showed itself in daydreams about promotions and raises in his spare time at work, or in promises made to himself during overtime that this time, he would really treat himself to a good meal.

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But he didn't. His ambition was just as ordinary. It showed itself only in daydreams about promotions and raises during his spare time at work, or in promises he made to himself during overtime that this time, he would really treat himself to a good meal.

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Sliced beef rolls, enoki mushrooms, stuffed beef balls... and a pack of his favorite wide hot pot noodles were already sitting quietly in the fridge of his rented room.

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Sliced beef rolls, enoki mushrooms, stuffed beef balls... and a pack of his favorite wide hot pot noodles were already sitting quietly in the refrigerator of his rented room.

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All he had to do was get off work. Then he would be alone, crack open an iced cola, eat a steaming hot beef hot pot, and watch a newly released sci-fi blockbuster.

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All he had to do was get off work. Then he would be alone, crack open an iced cola, eat a steaming beef hot pot, and watch a newly released sci-fi blockbuster.

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When the colleague at the desk across from him—the girl who usually loved sharing snacks—bit through the boss's throat like a wild beast, Chen Mo inexplicably and with absolute clarity realized: his ordinary life was over.

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When the colleague at the desk across from him—the girl who usually loved sharing snacks—bit through the boss's throat like a wild beast, Chen Mo inexplicably realized, with absolute clarity, that his ordinary life was over.

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The chair leg slammed solidly into Fat Brother's face, and that familiar face instantly became a mess of blood and flesh.

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The chair leg slammed into Fat Brother's face, and that familiar face instantly became a mess of blood and flesh.

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Luckily he was on the second floor, not too high.

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Luckily, he was on the second floor, not too high up.

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He landed hard on the lawn below, feeling as if his internal organs had been knocked out of place, but he couldn't afford the pain. Scrambling to his feet, he ran without looking back toward his little electric scooter parked on the street.

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He landed hard on the lawn below, feeling as if his internal organs had been knocked out of place, but he couldn't afford to worry about the pain. Scrambling to his feet, he ran without looking back toward his little electric scooter parked on the street.

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On the street, cars were smashed into a tangled mess, horns, screams, and the screech of tearing metal all mixed together.

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Cars had been smashed into tangled heaps, while horns, screams, and the screech of tearing metal all blended together.

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At the last moment, before the little scooter could be caught by the wave, he jumped off and dove headfirst into a clothing store beside him whose rolling shutter door was half open.

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At the last moment, before the little scooter could be swallowed by the wave, he jumped off and dove headfirst into a clothing store beside him whose rolling shutter door was half open.

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But compared with the madness of hundreds or thousands outside, this place was practically paradise.

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But compared with the madness of the hundreds or thousands outside, this place was practically paradise.

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Chen Mo couldn't even remember how he did it. He only remembered finally luring all four monsters into the narrow fitting room and jamming the door shut with a steel pipe.

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Chen Mo couldn't even remember how he had done it. He only remembered finally luring all four monsters into the narrow fitting room and jamming the door shut with a steel pipe.

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When everything was quiet, he slid down the wall to sit on the floor, and only then, belatedly, realized he was shaking all over.

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When everything was quiet, he slid down the wall to sit on the floor. Only then did he belatedly realize that he was shaking all over.

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Even he thought it was unbelievable that he could do such a thing.

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Even he thought it was unbelievable that he could have done such a thing.

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The crackers were gone, and the water was all drunk.

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The crackers were gone, and all the water had been drunk.

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On the streets, only monsters still wandered. There was no army he'd hoped for, no rescue.

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Only monsters still wandered the streets. There was no army he'd hoped for, no rescue.

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If he waited until he was too weak from hunger, it really would be over.

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If he waited until hunger weakened him too much, it really would be over.

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He picked out the thickest down jackets in the store and put them on, tore the cardboard from the sofa, and wrapped tape around his wrists and shins—a trick he'd learned from movies he'd watched.

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He picked out the thickest down jackets in the store and put them on, tore cardboard from the sofa, and wrapped tape around his wrists and shins—a trick he'd learned from movies he'd watched.

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Just then, he heard a faint noise from behind the shelf.

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Just then, he heard a faint noise from behind a shelf.

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A man, his face equally terrified and holding a can of luncheon meat, poked his head out from behind the shelf.

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A man with an equally terrified expression, holding a can of luncheon meat, poked his head out from behind the shelf.

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Until they discovered that more and more monsters had begun to prowl at the convenience store's entrance, as if drawn by the scent of the living.

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That was until they discovered that more and more monsters had begun prowling around the convenience store's entrance, as if drawn by the scent of the living.

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Hiding along the way, they arrived at a villa district at the edge of the city.

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Hiding along the way, they arrived at a villa district on the edge of the city.

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The other side had more people, but they had two big backpacks full of food.

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The other side had more people, but they had two large backpacks full of food.

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They could easily climb over the perimeter wall, crawling along the walls like geckos.

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They could easily climb over the perimeter wall, crawling along it like geckos.

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Dark-red flesh, like muscle tissue, seeped out from the walls, pulsing slowly, with countless thick vein-like tendrils burrowing deep into the bricks.

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Dark-red flesh, like muscle tissue, seeped out from the walls, pulsing slowly, with countless thick, vein-like tendrils burrowing deep into the bricks.

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That thing was obviously not anything good.

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That thing was obviously nothing good.

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Along the way, they rescued more than a dozen others. There were students hiding in underground garages, and a family of three hidden in an attic.

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Along the way, they rescued more than a dozen others. There were students hiding in underground garages and a family of three hidden in an attic.

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They struggled to find new shelters in the city, set up defenses, then were broken through by stronger mutant monsters, fled, and searched again.

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They struggled to find new shelters in the city, set up defenses, were then overrun by stronger mutant monsters, fled, and searched again.

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This process repeated in a cycle.

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The process repeated in a cycle.

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Through this disaster, they always wanted to fight back against something.

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Throughout the disaster, they always wanted to fight back against something.

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But unfortunately, when facing those monsters, all they could do seemed to be to die.

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But unfortunately, when facing those monsters, all they seemed able to do was die.

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The good news was that the monster didn't follow them in. It seemed the dozens of people it had killed had sated it for now.

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The good news was that the monster didn't follow them inside. It seemed the dozens of people it had killed had sated it for now.

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But they didn't have much time to spend mourning companions, mourning family, because this building was also contaminated by that bizarre flesh.

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But they didn't have much time to spend mourning their companions and family, because this building was also contaminated by that bizarre flesh.

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Some people tried roasting the fruit over fire, to see if they could reduce the danger.

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Some people tried roasting the fruit over a fire to see if they could reduce the danger.

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So the little girl became an orphan, and from that moment he decided that at least he couldn't let this child die before him.

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So the little girl became an orphan, and from that moment on, he decided that at least he couldn't let this child die before him.

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But their stomachs grew bigger day by day, bulging high like a woman in the tenth month of pregnancy.

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But their stomachs grew bigger by the day, bulging high like a woman in the tenth month of pregnancy.

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Chen Mo leaned against the railing on the rooftop, feeling his consciousness growing hazier and hazier.

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Chen Mo leaned against the railing on the rooftop, feeling his consciousness grow hazier and hazier.

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Then, streams of green light rained down from the sky, plowing deadly paths through the zombie tide below.

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Then streams of green light rained down from the sky, plowing deadly paths through the zombie tide below.

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And on the street that had been cleared by gunfire, three trucks like steel fortresses were charging hard through the zombie tide, roaring all the way, straight toward Jiarui Department Store.

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And on the street that had been cleared by gunfire, three trucks like steel fortresses were charging hard through the zombie tide, roaring all the way straight toward Jiarui Department Store.