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The first time Ling Yu saw it among his mission rewards, he'd wondered what on earth this thing actually was.

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The first time Ling Yu saw it among his mission rewards, he’d wondered what on earth it actually was.

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And now he finally had his answer. Unlike what he'd originally expected, it wasn't a grand factory building, but rather an industrial miracle compressed to the extreme.

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Now, he finally had his answer. Contrary to what he’d initially expected, it wasn’t a grand factory building, but an industrial miracle compressed to the extreme.

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In his perception, within Zone D of the underground base, inside a huge, reshaped space, a pitch-black rectangular block about fifty meters on its long side materialized out of thin air.

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In his perception, within Zone D of the underground base, a pitch-black rectangular block about fifty meters along its longest side materialized out of thin air inside a huge, reshaped space.

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Its surface material was unknown, smooth as obsidian, with not a single seam, only streams of light occasionally flashing through its interior.

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Its surface was made of an unknown material, smooth as obsidian and completely seamless. Only occasional streams of light flashed through its interior.

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When Ling Yu's will touched it, a holographic interface unfolded before his "eyes," listing a series of production directions to choose from.

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When Ling Yu’s will touched it, a holographic interface unfolded before his “eyes,” displaying a series of production options.

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Beneath each option lay a dense sub-directory.

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Each option contained a dense subdirectory.

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For example, vehicle manufacturing could be broken down to motorcycles, off-road vehicles, or even small armored vehicles.

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Vehicle manufacturing, for example, could be broken down into motorcycles, off-road vehicles, and even small armored vehicles.

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But Ling Yu noticed that the more complex the chosen product, the worse the two indicators beneath it—"Projected Efficiency" and "Raw Material Requirement Complexity"—looked.

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But Ling Yu noticed that the more complex the selected product, the worse the two indicators beneath it—“Projected Efficiency” and “Raw Material Requirement Complexity”—looked.

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If he guessed correctly, this thing's logic was probably specialization over breadth.

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If he guessed correctly, the center’s logic was probably specialization over breadth.

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Efficiency was likely closely tied to the production target; if the target was too complex, efficiency would drop significantly.

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Efficiency was likely closely tied to the production target. If the target was too complex, efficiency would drop significantly.

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And different raw material choices would also affect efficiency.

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Different raw material choices would also affect efficiency.

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That being the case, the super factory Ling Yu had fantasized about wouldn't be so simple to achieve—he'd probably need at least several more processing centers.

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That being the case, the superfactory Ling Yu had fantasized about wouldn’t be so easy to achieve. He’d probably need at least several more processing centers.

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Ling Yu had his answer quickly. On the food front, since the apocalypse hadn't been going on for long, scavenging wasn't too difficult.

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Ling Yu had his answer almost immediately. As far as food was concerned, the apocalypse hadn’t been going on long enough for scavenging to become too difficult.

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Industrial goods were the same story—basically, a trip to the store for some "zero-cost shopping" would do.

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Industrial goods were much the same—a trip to the store for some “zero-cost shopping” would take care of them.

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As for weapons, Ling Yu's Security Units and UAVs should be sufficient for now, and the guns seized earlier from Brother Dao's convoy were quite numerous.

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As for weapons, Ling Yu’s Security Units and UAVs should be sufficient for now, and the guns seized earlier from Brother Dao’s convoy were quite numerous.

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He didn't know how they'd gotten hold of them back then, but at least they were usable, so firearms weren't scarce either.

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He didn’t know how they’d gotten hold of those guns, but at least they were usable, so firearms weren’t in short supply either.

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The thing that was genuinely troublesome was ammunition—a resource that was constantly being consumed yet very difficult to replenish.

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The truly troublesome resource was ammunition: it was constantly being consumed and extremely difficult to replenish.

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Whether it was the rifles in the Field Squad's hands or the weapon systems of the Sentinel Robots and UAVs, every shot fired drained the already meager reserves.

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Whether it was the rifles in the Field Squad’s hands or the weapon systems of the Sentinel Robots and UAVs, every shot fired drained their already meager reserves.

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With that thought, Ling Yu hesitated no longer.

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With that thought, Ling Yu no longer hesitated.

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The instant the command was issued, the massive obsidian rectangular block in Zone D of the underground base began a silent yet violent transformation.

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The instant the command was issued, the massive obsidian block in Zone D of the underground base began a silent yet violent transformation.

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Its smooth surface rippled like liquid metal, and dim blue light paths lit up and interwove within it, tracing out an incomparably complex structure.

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Its smooth surface rippled like liquid metal, while dim blue pathways of light illuminated and interwove within it, tracing an incomparably complex structure.

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Then, the rectangular block rapidly contracted and reshaped inward.

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Then the rectangular block rapidly contracted and reshaped itself inward.

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Automated robotic arms, conveyor belts, precision stamping machines, heat treatment furnaces... an entire, highly integrated assembly line grew out of thin air, from raw material intake to finished product output, compact and efficient in layout, like a meticulously crafted piece of industrial art.

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Automated robotic arms, conveyor belts, precision stamping machines, heat-treatment furnaces... An entire, highly integrated assembly line grew out of thin air, from raw-material intake to finished-product output. Its compact, efficient layout resembled a meticulously crafted piece of industrial art.

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Lines of new data unfolded in Ling Yu's consciousness.

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Lines of new data unfolded in Ling Yu’s consciousness.

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[4. "Sky Blade" Type 1 UAV micro-missile (...)]

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[4. “Sky Blade” Type 1 UAV micro-missile (...)]

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Looking at this complex production line that resembled a work of art, Ling Yu's ammunition anxiety was finally eased for now.

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Looking at the complex production line that resembled a work of art, Ling Yu’s anxiety over ammunition was finally eased—for now.

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Once the raw material problem was also solved, he could finally carpet-bomb the ground with UAV micro-missiles every day without having to scrimp and save with lasers.

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Once the raw-material problem was solved as well, he could finally carpet-bomb the ground with UAV micro-missiles every day without having to scrimp and save on lasers.

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Sure, lasers looked cool, but missiles packed real punch!

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Sure, lasers looked cool, but missiles packed a real punch!

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Having settled the processing direction and confirmed that the processing center had no issues, Ling Yu's attention shifted to another reward.

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Having settled on the processing direction and confirmed that the processing center was functioning properly, Ling Yu turned his attention to another reward.

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Ling Yu's will sank into it, and the vehicle's three-dimensional structural diagrams and functional parameters flooded into his mind in an instant.

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Ling Yu’s will sank into it, and the vehicle’s three-dimensional structural diagrams and functional parameters flooded into his mind in an instant.

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This was a six-wheeled beast, about twelve meters long and four meters wide, its entire body covered in dark gray composite armor.

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This was a six-wheeled beast about twelve meters long and four meters wide, its entire body covered in dark-gray composite armor.

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Its silhouette was full of rugged science-fiction styling, with an extremely high chassis and enormous tires, more than capable of handling all kinds of complex terrain.

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Its silhouette was rugged and distinctly science-fictional, with an extremely high chassis and enormous tires more than capable of handling all kinds of complex terrain.

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Mounted on the top of the vehicle body was a 360-degree rotating twin-barreled Gauss machine gun turret, while both sides of the body concealed pop-out point-defense melee blades.

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Mounted atop the vehicle was a 360-degree rotating, twin-barreled Gauss machine-gun turret, while pop-out point-defense melee blades were concealed on both sides of the body.

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However, its core function was not combat.

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However, its core function wasn’t combat.

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Integrated into the rear-middle section of the vehicle body was a miniaturized "Earth Vein Impact Drill" and a "High-Precision Geological Radar Array."

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Integrated into the middle-rear section of the vehicle was a miniaturized “Earth Vein Impact Drill” and a “High-Precision Geological Radar Array.”

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Surveying, mining, transport, defense... all in one.

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Surveying, mining, transport, defense... It did everything.

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Ling Yu's attention turned to a long-dormant side mission in the system mission list.

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Ling Yu’s attention turned to a long-dormant side mission in the system’s mission list.

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This mission had been hanging there ever since the Abyssal Centipede was killed.

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This mission had remained there ever since the Abyssal Centipede was killed.

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The underground base Ling Yu had "whaled" out with five thousand civilization points had only reached a quarter of its progress.

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The underground base Ling Yu had “whaled” out with five thousand civilization points had only reached a quarter of the required progress.

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One could say it was an extremely difficult mission to complete.

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It was, in other words, an extremely difficult mission to complete.

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Of course, Ling Yu also understood that this mission probably didn't actually have very high requirements for the underground base.

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Of course, Ling Yu also understood that the mission probably didn’t actually demand very much of the underground base.

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As long as there were enough people and enough area was built out, it could be completed—there was no need for a high level of technology.

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As long as there were enough people and enough of the area had been built out, it could be completed. There was no need for a high level of technology.

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If anything, Ling Yu's approach of directly dumping 5,000 civilization points to "whale" it was the true unorthodox path, but unfortunately, the shelter simply didn't have enough people right now!

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If anything, Ling Yu’s approach of directly dumping 5,000 civilization points into “whaling” it was the truly unorthodox path. Unfortunately, the shelter simply didn’t have enough people right now!

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Let alone the twenty-odd people from before—even the current hundred-plus people wouldn't be able to finish this mission.

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Let alone the twenty-odd people they’d had before—even the current hundred-plus people wouldn’t be able to complete this mission.

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Carving through rock strata and laying pipelines both required massive amounts of manpower and time; with the current manpower of a hundred-plus people, completing it was nothing short of a pipe dream.

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Carving through rock strata and laying pipelines both required massive amounts of manpower and time. With the current workforce of a hundred-plus people, completing the mission was nothing short of a pipe dream.

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But with the Earth Vein Survey vehicle, at least Ling Yu could now send people to begin excavating the underground structures.

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But with the Earth Vein Survey vehicle, Ling Yu could at least send people to begin excavating the underground structures.

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He could even have the vehicle advance along those cavities whose ends had never been detected, to find out where those caves actually led.

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He could even have the vehicle advance through cavities whose ends had never been detected, finding out where those caves actually led.

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It seemed time to form a professional "geological survey team," Ling Yu thought.

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It seemed time to form a professional “geological survey team,” Ling Yu thought.

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"What the... hell..."

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“What the... hell...”

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Lin Yue stood at the entrance of the newly opened industrial center in Zone D of the underground base, his mouth gaping wide enough to fit an egg.

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Lin Yue stood at the entrance to the newly opened industrial center in Zone D of the underground base, his mouth gaping wide enough to fit an egg.

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Behind him, Zhang Wu, Shen Yan, and the crowd of newly joined technical workers wore expressions much the same as his, their faces written with shock and bewilderment.

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Behind him, Zhang Wu, Shen Yan, and the crowd of newly joined technical workers wore much the same expression. Shock and bewilderment were written across their faces.