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A safe supply location had been found, and quite a few of the missing had come back.

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A safe supply location had been found, and quite a few of the missing had returned.

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By all rights, this should have been good news. Yet lying in the RV, Xu Dao couldn't fall asleep no matter what.

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By all rights, this should have been good news. Yet lying in the RV, Xu Dao couldn't fall asleep no matter what he did.

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For some reason, he kept feeling a nagging unease.

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For some reason, he couldn't shake a nagging unease.

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He pulled open the drawer; there was a bottle of sleeping pills inside, but in the end he closed the drawer again.

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He pulled open the drawer. There was a bottle of sleeping pills inside, but in the end, he closed the drawer again.

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Not sleeping well only meant low spirits, but if he slept too soundly, that would be the real danger for him right now.

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Not sleeping well would only leave him in low spirits, but sleeping too soundly would be the real danger for him right now.

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The taste naturally couldn't compare to the good water he used to drink at several hundred a bottle, but conditions weren't what they used to be, and he had to adapt.

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The taste naturally couldn't compare with the good water he used to drink at several hundred a bottle, but conditions weren't what they used to be, and he had to adapt.

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He shook his head, then spread open the paper atlas on the table.

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He shook his head, then spread the paper atlas open on the table.

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His gaze traveled up from Yuanjiang, all the way to the north of Hanling, where a bright red circle was drawn. That was the goal of this journey.

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His gaze traveled north from Yuanjiang, all the way to Hanling, where a bright red circle had been drawn. That was the goal of this journey.

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After happening to witness a zombie's secondary mutation in Tiannan City, he understood that if he didn't do something, he was simply waiting to die.

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After witnessing a zombie's secondary mutation in Tiannan City, he understood that if he didn't do something, he was simply waiting to die.

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The apocalypse from the stories had truly arrived, and while he hadn't awakened any special ability, these monsters really were only going to grow more terrifying.

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The apocalypse from the stories had truly arrived. And while he hadn't awakened any special ability, these monsters were only going to grow more terrifying.

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That night, he had been on the verge of despair, cursing this world and this disaster the whole time.

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That night, he had been on the verge of despair, cursing this world and this disaster the entire time.

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He was a genuine scion of a wealthy Tiannan family; he was born to enjoy the world. But this disaster had taken everything away.

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He was a genuine scion of a wealthy Tiannan family, born to enjoy the world. But this disaster had taken everything away.

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Yet after finishing his cursing, a past memory had come back to him.

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Yet after he finished cursing, a memory from the past came back to him.

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It was a class reunion a month before the disaster broke out—a rare gathering where he was not the lead, only a supporting role.

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It was a class reunion held a month before the disaster broke out—a rare gathering where he wasn't the lead, only a supporting role.

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The reason was simply that the lead of that banquet was a young master so exalted that even Xu Dao was only fit to look up to him.

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The reason was simple: the lead of that banquet was a young master so exalted that even Xu Dao could only look up to him.

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Let's put it this way: the assets Xu Dao's father had built over a lifetime were only equivalent to that man's pocket money.

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Let's put it this way: the assets Xu Dao's father had built over a lifetime were equivalent to that man's pocket money.

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He could no longer remember the details of the gathering clearly, only that this young master, who always loved to have fun, had been uncharacteristically drowning his sorrows in alcohol the whole day.

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He could no longer remember the details of the gathering clearly. He only remembered that this young master, who always loved to have fun, had spent the entire day uncharacteristically drowning his sorrows in alcohol.

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At that moment, that man's gaze was something Xu Dao would never forget, not for the rest of his life—a gaze like he was looking at pigs and dogs.

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At that moment, that man's gaze became something Xu Dao would never forget for the rest of his life—a gaze as if he were looking at pigs and dogs.

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To be precise, it was a superiority and pity born of watching creatures that were about to die and didn't even know it.

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To be precise, it was the superiority and pity born of watching creatures that were about to die without even knowing it.

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"Bullshit! The real big shots—you're not even worthy of a single meeting with them."

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"Bullshit! The real big shots—you aren't even worthy of a single meeting with them."

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"Their whole families don't need to lift a finger—however many slots they want, they get. But I can't even get my hands on one ticket."

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"Their whole families don't need to lift a finger. However many slots they want, they get. But I can't even get my hands on one ticket."

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Just then, his phone suddenly rang—at just the right moment, so perfectly timed.

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Just then, his phone suddenly rang—at exactly the right moment, perfectly timed.

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Then he looked at the dazed crowd and suddenly burst out laughing: "Haha! Scared you all, didn't I? Haha! Did I look convincing?"

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Then he looked at the dazed crowd and suddenly burst out laughing. "Haha! Scared you all, didn't I? Haha! Did I look convincing?"

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Only then did the atmosphere liven up again, and everyone laughed and said it looked very convincing.

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Only then did the atmosphere come alive again, and everyone laughed, saying that it had looked very convincing.

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But Xu Dao always felt it wasn't as simple as just a prank. Yet since the man clearly didn't want to say, he naturally couldn't ask.

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But Xu Dao always felt it hadn't been as simple as a prank. Yet since the man clearly didn't want to say, Xu Dao naturally couldn't ask.

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His mood had calmed quite a bit by then. He only said, "Goodbye. I'm going north to try my luck. If you can't make it in the future, you can go try your luck too."

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His mood had calmed considerably by then. He only said, "Goodbye. I'm going north to try my luck. If you can't make it in the future, you can go try your luck too."

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This had originally been a meaningless little episode, but looking back on it when the disaster broke out, no matter how Xu Dao thought about it, something felt wrong.

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This had originally been a meaningless little episode, but after the disaster broke out, no matter how Xu Dao thought about it, something felt wrong.

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Perhaps people always needed a spiritual pillar, and what he chose was that north.

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Perhaps people always needed a spiritual pillar, and the one he had chosen was that north.

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But it was also possible that those true big shots really had gotten word in advance, that they truly were prepared.

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But it was also possible that those true big shots really had received word in advance, that they truly were prepared.

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Ling Yu took a little while to adapt to this now low and wide field of vision.

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Ling Yu took a little while to adapt to this new, low and wide field of vision.

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At this moment, his view was facing the crowd reveling around the bonfire.

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At this moment, his view faced the crowd reveling around the bonfire.

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Closest to the fire, surrounding Brother Dao and that modified off-road vehicle, were about thirty or more sturdy men.

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Closest to the fire, surrounding Brother Dao and the modified off-road vehicle, were more than thirty sturdy men.

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Food held almost no concept of value in their hands. Big chunks of meat were torn apart, and leftover cans were casually tossed aside.

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Food held almost no value in their hands. They tore apart big chunks of meat and casually tossed leftover cans aside.

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Besides those sitting in a circle, there were also some holding guns outside watching the vehicles. Every so often, someone would go relieve the guard.

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Besides those sitting in a circle, there were also some men holding guns outside and watching the vehicles. Every so often, someone would go relieve the guard.

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One ring further out were a dozen or so thugs likewise armed with steel pipes and the like.

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One ring farther out were a dozen or so thugs, likewise armed with steel pipes and the like.

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They were the "vehicle captains" Brother Dao had chosen to manage and keep watch over everyone, responsible for daily commands and management.

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They were the "vehicle captains" Brother Dao had chosen to manage everyone and keep watch, responsible for issuing daily commands and handling day-to-day management.

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The supplies allotted to them were still enough, but their eyes constantly strayed toward the inner circle, filled with longing and fear.

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The supplies allotted to them were still sufficient, but their eyes constantly strayed toward the inner circle, filled with longing and fear.

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And over on the other side, at scattered campfires, nearly a hundred people were spread around.

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On the other side, scattered around campfires, nearly a hundred people were spread out.

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Their ages ranged from old folks in their fifties to kids in their teens, mostly male, but all were weak.

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Their ages ranged from old folks in their fifties to kids in their teens. Most were male, but all of them were weak.

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Clearly, what they ate daily was nothing much.

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Clearly, what they ate each day was nothing much.

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Even with the new supplies in, the only things handed to them were a few compressed biscuits and a bottle of water.

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Even with the new supplies brought in, the only things handed to them were a few compressed biscuits and a bottle of water.

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The one in charge of handing things out was Skinny Monkey, and he had a gun.

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Skinny Monkey was in charge of handing things out, and he had a gun.

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Those who received food naturally didn't dare say a word, only nodding again and again: "Yes, yes, yes! What Second Brother says is right!"

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Those who received food naturally didn't dare say a word. They only nodded again and again. "Yes, yes, yes! What Second Brother says is right!"

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Skinny Monkey said nothing, simply swinging a kick that sent the boy sprawling to the ground.

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Skinny Monkey said nothing. He simply swung a kick that sent the boy sprawling to the ground.

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"Pah!" After spitting in the boy's face, the man called Skinny Monkey stood up and gave the boy another kick.

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"Pah!" After spitting in the boy's face, the man called Skinny Monkey stood up and kicked the boy again.

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"No objections?" Skinny Monkey turned around, no longer continuing to hand out food. "Very well. Looks like none of you care about the convoy's future."

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"No objections?" Skinny Monkey turned around and stopped handing out food. "Very well. Looks like none of you care about the convoy's future."

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Not everyone had the courage to face a gun muzzle, and especially in a life of starving one day and barely eating the next, people were all too quick to sink into numbness.

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Not everyone had the courage to face a gun muzzle, especially when a life of starving one day and barely eating the next made people all too quick to sink into numbness.

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Just then, Wang Hai, a few cans tucked against his chest, slipped over silently from the big bonfire.

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Just then, Wang Hai, a few cans tucked against his chest, slipped silently over from the large bonfire.

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"Brothers, have some meat, calm your nerves." He handed over the cans and lowered his voice. "Do you really think following these dogs will give you a way to live?"

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"Brothers, have some meat and calm your nerves." He handed over the cans and lowered his voice. "Do you really think following these dogs will give you a way to live?"

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Those people took the food, originally overcome with gratitude and wolfing it down.

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Those people took the food, initially overcome with gratitude as they wolfed it down.

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"What exactly do they take us for—don't you know in your own hearts?"

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"What exactly do they take us for? Don't you know in your own hearts?"

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He pressed closer, his voice dropping even lower, like a devil's whisper: "Want to know where I really got this batch of supplies?"

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He pressed closer, his voice dropping even lower, like a devil's whisper. "Want to know where I really got this batch of supplies?"

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No one spoke, but their hurried breaths had already given the answer.

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No one spoke, but their hurried breaths had already given him the answer.

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And here in the shadows, many survivors who had come back today, just like Wang Hai, were quietly moving among the crowd, connecting people.

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And here in the shadows, many survivors who had come back that day, just like Wang Hai, were quietly moving among the crowd, connecting people.

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The light of longing rekindled at the bottom of people's eyes.

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The light of longing rekindled in the depths of people's eyes.

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The people in the shadows rose, one after another, in silence, and crept without a sound toward the armed leaders guarding the vehicles.

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The people in the shadows rose one after another in silence and crept without a sound toward the armed leaders guarding the vehicles.

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A Sky Blade Type 2 UAV hovered in the night sky like a ghost, the optical lens beneath its belly taking in the whole logistics park at a glance.

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A Sky Blade Type 2 UAV hovered in the night sky like a ghost, the optical lens beneath its belly taking in the entire logistics park at a glance.

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And the nearly one hundred turned survivors, organized by Wang Hai and the others, had already closed in silently on the dozen or more trucks and buses at the rear of the convoy.

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And the nearly one hundred turned survivors organized by Wang Hai and the others had already closed in silently on the dozen or more trucks and buses at the rear of the convoy.

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At almost the same moment, the sentry nearest to it, who was mid-yawn, had his head struck as if by an invisible giant hammer. The whole back of his head, skull and all, blew apart in an instant, splattering red and white matter.

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At almost the same moment, the sentry nearest to it, who was mid-yawn, had his head struck as if by an invisible giant hammer. The entire back of his head, skull and all, blew apart in an instant, splattering red and white matter.

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They snatched up the fallen sentries' guns in the first instant, swiftly forming a crude defensive line, dark muzzles aimed at the thugs who were still frozen in place.

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They snatched up the fallen sentries' guns at once, swiftly forming a crude defensive line, dark muzzles aimed at the thugs who were still frozen in place.

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Clutching an AK, he charged out roaring, just in time to see his trusted men falling, one by one, into pools of blood.

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Clutching an AK, he charged out roaring, just in time to see his trusted men falling one by one into pools of blood.

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The fury on Brother Dao's face froze in an instant, turning into utmost shock and bewilderment.

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The fury on Brother Dao's face froze in an instant, turning into utter shock and bewilderment.

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Doors opened, and over a hundred survivors got out one after another. Looking at this colossal nuclear power station before them, their eyes were full of awe, unease, and expectations for a new life.

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Doors opened, and more than a hundred survivors got out one after another. Looking at the colossal nuclear power station before them, their eyes were full of awe, unease, and anticipation for a new life.