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The family compound was north of the hospital, two streets away. It was an old residential area built in the 1990s, three buildings in total, mostly housing retired workers.

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The family compound was north of the hospital—two streets away.

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Building 2, Unit 3, Room 201, was home to Zhang Shouyi and his wife.

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It was an old residential area built in the 1990s: three buildings in total, mostly housing retired workers.

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Zhang Shouyi was sixty-two, a retired fitter from a military factory. He had worked on firearm repair all his life; his hearing was a bit poor, but his eyesight was excellent.

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Building 2, Unit 3, Room 201, belonged to Zhang Shouyi and his wife.

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His wife, Liu Guilan, was sixty, a doctor at the community health service station before retirement.

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Zhang Shouyi was sixty-two, a retired fitter from a military factory. He’d spent his whole life working on firearm repairs. His hearing was a bit poor, but his eyesight was excellent.

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The family across the hall was a family of three: the husband surnamed Wang, his wife, and their seven-year-old son. After the virus outbreak, zombies got into their home, and they broke down the door and fled into Zhang Shouyi's house.

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His wife, Liu Guilan, was sixty. Before retirement, she’d worked as a doctor at the community health service station.

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Five people were crowded into the two-bedroom, one-living-room apartment. The family had stored enough rice, flour, and cooking oil to last a while, and by rationing they had held out until now.

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Across the hall lived a family of three: a husband surnamed Wang, his wife, and their seven-year-old son. After the virus outbreak, zombies broke into their home, smashed through the door, and they fled into Zhang Shouyi’s house.

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Zhang Shouyi had an old-style radio; it had no chips inside, so the particle storm couldn't affect it.

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Five people crowded into the two-bedroom, one-living-room apartment. They’d stored enough rice, flour, and cooking oil to last for a while, and by rationing they’d managed to hold out until now.

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Yesterday afternoon, he had found the emergency broadcast frequency and listened to Shen Weizhen's entire speech.

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Zhang Shouyi had an old-style radio. It had no chips inside, so the particle storm couldn’t affect it.

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The old couple cried right then, knowing the country wasn't in chaos and there were still people in charge.

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Yesterday afternoon, he’d found the emergency broadcast frequency and listened to Shen Weizhen’s entire speech.

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They immediately informed the other surviving households in the building, telling everyone not to run around—the troops were to the south and would come sooner or later.

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The old couple cried right then. They knew the country wasn’t in chaos—there were still people in charge.

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When the gunfire sounded, Zhang Shouyi was hunched over the dining table, using a pencil to mark positions on a map of the old city.

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They immediately told the other surviving households in the building, warning everyone not to run around. The troops were to the south, and they’d come sooner or later.

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The gunfire rolled in from the south. He suddenly looked up, listened intently for a few seconds, then grabbed the radio and turned up the volume.

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When the gunfire sounded, Zhang Shouyi was hunched over the dining table, using a pencil to mark positions on a map of the old city.

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The broadcast was still playing on a loop, echoing the gunfire from a distance.

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The gunfire rolled in from the south. He looked up at once, listened intently for a few seconds, then grabbed the radio and turned the volume up.

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“They’re coming from the south.”

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The broadcast was still looping, echoing the gunfire from a distance.

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Zhang Shouyi picked up a magnifying glass and measured the scale on the map.

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“They’re coming from the south.”

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“Judging by the distance, they should be at the northern suburb intersection. It’s less than two kilometers from here as the crow flies.”

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Zhang Shouyi picked up a magnifying glass and measured the scale on the map.

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“That fast?” Liu Guilan came over with a water cup, unable to hide her joy.

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“Judging by the distance, they should be at the northern suburb intersection. It’s less than two kilometers from here as the crow flies.”

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“Does that mean… they can reach the hospital before dark?”

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“That fast?” Liu Guilan came over with a cup of water, unable to hide her joy.

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“Hard to say.” Zhang Shouyi shook his head, pointing at the hospital on the map.

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“Does that mean… they can reach the hospital before dark?”

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“The hospital is a heavily affected area, with a high density of corpses. It will take them a while to fight through. But as long as the troops are advancing, there’s hope.”

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“Hard to say.” Zhang Shouyi shook his head, pointing at the hospital on the map.

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He put down the magnifying glass and went to the balcony to get a bamboo pole.

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“The hospital is a heavily affected area, with a high density of corpses. It’ll take them a while to fight through. But as long as the troops are advancing… there’s hope.”

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“Find the red flag we made earlier and hang it outside the balcony. Also find a white bedsheet, write ‘Five people here’ in red paint, and hang it on the drainpipe outside the building.”

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He set down the magnifying glass, then went to the balcony to get a bamboo pole.

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Liu Guilan acknowledged and went to find the fabric, muttering as she searched.

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“Find the red flag we made earlier and hang it outside the balcony. Also find a white bedsheet—write ‘Five people here’ in red paint, and hang it on the drainpipe outside the building.”

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“We need to tell Xiao Wang and his family across the hall, have them hang one too. And Old Li in Building 3—yesterday he was still shouting about rushing out. Now it’s settled; there’s definite news.”

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Liu Guilan nodded and went to look for the fabric, muttering under her breath as she searched.

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“I’ll go knock on doors,” Zhang Shouyi said.

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“We need to tell Xiao Wang and his family across the hall. Have them hang one too. And Old Li in Building 3—yesterday he was still shouting about rushing out. Now it’s settled. There’s definite news.”

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“Everyone stay calm, don’t yell or shout, and don’t attract the zombies up here.”

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“I’ll go knock on doors,” Zhang Shouyi said.

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While the two were busy, the seven-year-old boy leaned over the balcony railing and suddenly shouted.

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“Everyone stay calm. Don’t yell or shout, and don’t attract the zombies up here.”

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“Grandpa Zhang, look down! Why are those monsters going back?”

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While the two of them were busy, the seven-year-old boy leaned over the balcony railing and suddenly shouted.

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Zhang Shouyi’s heart stirred. He quickly walked to the balcony and leaned over to look down.

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“Grandpa Zhang! Look down! Why are those monsters going back?”

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On the road outside the residential area, the zombies that had been wandering scattered were now moving in groups toward the hospital to the south.

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Zhang Shouyi’s heart tightened. He hurried to the balcony and leaned over to look.

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It wasn’t the chaotic crowding of being attracted by gunfire; they were moving in an orderly fashion toward the same direction.

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On the road outside the residential area, the zombies that had been wandering around were now moving in groups toward the hospital to the south.

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Zhang Shouyi’s brow furrowed tightly.

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It wasn’t the chaotic crowding you’d get from being drawn in by gunfire. They were moving in an orderly fashion—toward the same direction.

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Something was wrong. Ordinary zombies had no swarm consciousness; they were only attracted by sound and smell, and they clustered chaotically.

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Zhang Shouyi’s brow furrowed.

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But these below seemed as if they had received some kind of order, contracting uniformly toward the hospital.

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Something was wrong. Ordinary zombies didn’t have swarm consciousness. They were only attracted by sound and smell, and they clustered chaotically.

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“Old man… what’s wrong?” Liu Guilan saw his expression and asked quietly.

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But the ones below looked as if they’d received some kind of order—contracting uniformly toward the hospital.

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“Old man… what’s wrong?” Liu Guilan saw his expression and asked quietly.