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The archive room's location, two green dots.

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The archive room’s location—two green dots.

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Earlier, too many red dots had obscured them; now that the plaza was cleared, they were revealed.

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Earlier, too many red dots had blurred everything together. Now that the plaza was cleared, the pattern finally showed.

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"First, call out to confirm identity."

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“First, call out to confirm identity.”

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Xu Qiang signaled the soldiers to spread out in alert positions, then walked to the archive room door and knocked:

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Xu Qiang signaled the soldiers to spread out into alert positions. Then he walked to the archive room door, knocked, and called out:

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"Listen up in there. We're from the Huining City Emergency Command Center, on orders to clear the zombies. State your identity, and we'll guarantee your safety."

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“Listen up in there. We’re from the Huining City Emergency Command Center, on orders to clear the zombies. State your identity, and we’ll guarantee your safety.”

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Silence from behind the door.

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Silence answered from behind the door.

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A few seconds later, a male voice came from the crack in the door, hoarse like sandpaper scraping against tin:

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A few seconds later, a male voice came from the crack in the door—hoarse, like sandpaper scraping against tin.

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"Who's your Commander? What credentials do you have?"

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“Who’s your commander? What credentials do you have?”

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Shen Weizhen heard the question over the intercom, walked slowly up to the third floor, and stopped at the door:

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Shen Weizhen heard the question through the intercom. He walked slowly up to the third floor and stopped at the door.

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"I am Shen Weizhen, Commander-in-Chief of the Huining City Interim Emergency Command Center and Deputy Director of the Emergency Management Bureau. After the city party committee and municipal government went dark, I lawfully assumed command of the entire district. If you are personnel from the Armed Forces Department, please state your name and position."

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“I am Shen Weizhen, Commander-in-Chief of the Huining City Interim Emergency Command Center and Deputy Director of the Emergency Management Bureau. After the city party committee and municipal government went dark, I lawfully assumed command of the entire district. If you’re personnel from the Armed Forces Department, state your name and position.”

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A moment of silence behind the door, then the sound of heavy objects being moved.

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For a moment, nothing.

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A filing cabinet was shifted aside, and the door lock clicked open.

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Then came the sound of heavy objects being moved.

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The door cracked open a few inches, and a face covered in dust, with stubble on the chin, poked out.

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A filing cabinet slid aside. The lock clicked.

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Armed Police combat uniform, police emblem intact on the left sleeve, holding a Type 88 sniper rifle with the muzzle pointed down.

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The door opened a few inches. A face covered in dust, stubble on the chin, poked out.

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He glanced at the uniform camouflage and standard-issue rifles in the corridor, and his tense shoulders relaxed a bit.

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Armed Police combat uniform—police emblem intact on the left sleeve. He held a Type 88 sniper rifle, muzzle pointed down.

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"Armed Police Huidong District Squadron, Lu Yuan." His voice was gravelly.

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He glanced at the uniform camouflage and the standard-issue rifles in the corridor. His tense shoulders eased a little.

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Behind him followed another young soldier, barely over twenty, with several tears in his combat uniform.

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“Armed Police Huidong District Squadron, Lu Yuan.” His voice was gravelly.

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Li Bing handed over two bottles of water and a few packs of compressed biscuits:

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Behind him came another young soldier, barely over twenty, with several tears in his combat uniform.

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"Replenish your strength first. Don't drink too fast."

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Li Bing handed over two bottles of water and a few packs of compressed biscuits.

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The two took them, thanked him, and wolfed down a couple of bites.

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“Replenish your strength first. Don’t drink too fast.”

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Lu Yuan slowed his pace after a few bites, caught his breath, and continued.

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The two took them, thanked him, and wolfed down a couple of bites.

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On the day the virus broke out, there were over a hundred people on the training ground. They all turned on the spot.

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After a few bites, Lu Yuan slowed down, caught his breath, and continued.

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He and Zhou Hao fought their way back into this archive room and survived until now on a few packs of compressed biscuits.

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“On the day the virus broke out, there were over a hundred people on the training ground. Everyone turned on the spot.”

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He swallowed what was in his mouth, wiped his face, and glanced again at the soldiers standing straight in the corridor.

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He and Zhou Hao fought their way back into this archive room and survived until now on a few packs of compressed biscuits.

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"Commander Shen," he put down his water bottle and stood at attention,

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Lu Yuan swallowed what was in his mouth, wiped his face, and looked again at the soldiers standing straight in the corridor.

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"Lu Yuan, Squad Leader of the Huidong District Armed Police Squadron, and beside me is soldier Zhou Hao. I know the layout of this building, the location of the armory, and the door lock passwords."

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“Commander Shen.” He set his water bottle down and snapped to attention.

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Shen Weizhen nodded.

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“Lu Yuan, Squad Leader of the Huidong District Armed Police Squadron. Beside me is soldier Zhou Hao. I know the layout of this building, the location of the armory, and the door lock passwords.”

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That name existed in the original host's memory. The Emergency Management Bureau and the Armed Police Squadron had conducted several joint drills, and Lu Yuan was the liaison officer for the squadron at the time.

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Shen Weizhen nodded.

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"The original administrative system in Huidong District has completely collapsed. The Emergency Management Bureau lawfully assumes command authority over the entire district.

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That name existed in the original host’s memory. The Emergency Management Bureau and the Armed Police Squadron had run several joint drills, and Lu Yuan had been the liaison officer for the squadron at the time.

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You two are temporarily assigned to the unit. After you rest, you'll move with us."

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“The original administrative system in Huidong District has completely collapsed. The Emergency Management Bureau lawfully assumes command authority over the entire district.

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"Willing to follow orders." Lu Yuan didn't hesitate.

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You two are temporarily assigned to our unit. After you rest, you’ll move with us.”

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After arranging for the two to rest, Shen Weizhen re-divided the combat tasks:

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“Willing to follow orders.” Lu Yuan didn’t hesitate.

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"Li Bing, take First Squad to clear the east-side rooms on the first and second floors. Yang Hong, take Third Squad to clear the west side. Both teams maintain visible distance and advance alternately. If you encounter a group of zombies, do not assault head-on; use noise to lure them and eliminate them one by one."

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After arranging for the two to rest, Shen Weizhen re-divided the combat tasks.

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Both teams moved out immediately.

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“Li Bing, take First Squad to clear the east-side rooms on the first and second floors. Yang Hong, take Third Squad to clear the west side. Both teams maintain visible distance and advance alternately. If you encounter a group of zombies, don’t assault head-on—use noise to lure them and eliminate them one by one.”

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The corridor was dimly lit, the walls covered in scratch marks from zombies.

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Both teams moved out immediately.

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On the east side of the second floor, the sound of an empty plastic bottle rolling across the floor drew three zombies, but before they could charge out the door, two short gunshots took them down.

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The corridor was dimly lit, the walls covered in scratch marks from zombies.

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The cleanup advanced steadily, gunfire coming in staggered bursts. The soldiers always used the corridor walls as cover, never rashly entering enclosed rooms.

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On the east side of the second floor, the sound of an empty plastic bottle rolling across the floor drew three zombies. But before they could charge out the door, two short gunshots dropped them.

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After more than half an hour, the first through third floors of the office building were completely cleared.

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The cleanup advanced steadily. Gunfire came in staggered bursts. The soldiers always used the corridor walls as cover, never rushing into enclosed rooms.

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"Rest for ten minutes, then clear the dormitory building."

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After more than half an hour, the first through third floors of the office building were completely cleared.

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The soldiers rested against the walls. Zhou Hao sidled up to Lu Yuan and whispered:

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“Rest for ten minutes, then clear the dormitory building.”

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"Squad leader... who are these people? Their gear isn't ours."

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The soldiers rested against the walls.

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Lu Yuan shook his head. "No idea. But they're military."

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Zhou Hao sidled up to Lu Yuan and whispered, “Squad leader… who are these people? Their gear isn’t ours.”

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Ten minutes later, the team formed up and moved to the dormitory building on the west side. The process took less than twenty minutes, and the dormitory was also cleared.

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Lu Yuan shook his head. “No idea. But they’re military.”

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[System Notification: Platoon-level establishment unlock conditions met.]

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Ten minutes later, the team formed up and moved to the dormitory building on the west side. The process took less than twenty minutes, and the dormitory was cleared as well.

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[Unlocked Content: Full-strength platoon headquarters direct personnel (8 people: 1 platoon leader, 3 radio operators, 2 ordnance maintenance personnel, 2 platoon-level medics); supporting 3 Mengshi basic assault vehicles, 1 armored command vehicle.]

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[System Notification: Platoon-level establishment unlock conditions met.]

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Shen Weizhen glanced at the system panel. Unlocked.

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[Unlocked Content: Full-strength platoon headquarters direct personnel (8 people: 1 platoon leader, 3 radio operators, 2 ordnance maintenance personnel, 2 platoon-level medics); supporting 3 Mengshi basic assault vehicles, 1 armored command vehicle.]

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He closed the light screen and turned toward the deepest part of the compound.

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Shen Weizhen glanced at the system panel.

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Lu Yuan stepped forward proactively:

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Unlocked.

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"The armory has dual mechanical door locks, no electronic equipment. I remember the password for the outer iron door."

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He closed the light screen and turned toward the deepest part of the compound.

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The group followed Lu Yuan to a standalone single-story building.

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Lu Yuan stepped forward proactively.

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The heavy steel blast door was tightly shut, the door panel studded with reinforcing rivets.

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“The armory has dual mechanical door locks—no electronic equipment. I remember the password for the outer iron door.”

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Lu Yuan turned the mechanical combination dial. The lock cylinder clicked open. Then he pulled out a brass key and inserted it into the inner lock.

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The group followed Lu Yuan to a standalone single-story building.

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The two doors swung inward, revealing the spacious interior.

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The heavy steel blast door was tightly shut, the door panel studded with reinforcing rivets.

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Shelves were arranged neatly, with various types of locally-made military equipment stored in categories.

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Lu Yuan turned the mechanical combination dial. The lock cylinder clicked open. Then he pulled out a brass key and inserted it into the inner lock.

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Electronic scopes with chips and wireless communication equipment were all dead, but purely mechanical firearms and ammunition were intact.

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The two doors swung inward, revealing a spacious interior.

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Lu Yuan reported as he walked:

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Shelves were arranged neatly, with various types of locally made military equipment stored in categories.

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"Sixty-five Type 81 automatic rifles, 43,000 rounds of 7.62mm ammunition; eighteen Type 54 pistols, 7,200 rounds of pistol ammunition; forty-two bulletproof vests, fifty-six anti-stab helmets; various tools. At the back, there are also two ten-ton military trucks with sufficient diesel reserves."

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Electronic scopes with chips and wireless communication equipment were all dead, but purely mechanical firearms and ammunition were intact.

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The ammunition shortfall was temporarily filled.

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Lu Yuan reported as he walked.

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Shen Weizhen gave orders:

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“Sixty-five Type 81 automatic rifles, 43,000 rounds of 7.62mm ammunition. Eighteen Type 54 pistols, 7,200 rounds of pistol ammunition. Forty-two bulletproof vests, fifty-six anti-stab helmets. Various tools. At the back, there are also two ten-ton military trucks with sufficient diesel reserves.”

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"Detach two cargo trucks to transport supplies back to the Emergency Management Bureau. The Mengshi assault vehicles will handle perimeter security."

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The ammunition shortfall was temporarily covered.

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Each squad received its orders and the compound became busy.

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Shen Weizhen gave orders.

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Taking advantage of the transport interval, Shen Weizhen walked to the wall and pulled up the all-domain heat source map.

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“Detach two cargo trucks to transport supplies back to the Emergency Management Bureau. The Mengshi assault vehicles will handle perimeter security.”

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He pulled the map down a bit. On the road direction at the edge of town, there was a dense cluster of red dots. The movement speed wasn't fast, but the number was at least three hundred.

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Each squad received its orders, and the compound quickly became busy.

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He noted the location. Just as he put the map away, Lin Xiao's communication cut in:

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Taking advantage of the transport interval, Shen Weizhen walked to the wall and pulled up the all-domain heat source map.

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"Director Shen, the hospital sent another signal. They say supplies are completely exhausted. They can't hold out."

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He lowered the map slightly. On the road direction at the edge of town, there was a dense cluster of red dots. The movement speed wasn’t fast, but the number was at least three hundred.

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He noted the location.

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Just as he put the map away, Lin Xiao’s communication cut in.

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“Director Shen, the hospital sent another signal. They say the supplies are completely exhausted. They can’t hold out.”