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Li Bing swung his arm down sharply. Eighteen soldiers advanced at a low crouch in two assault columns, their combat boots barely making a sound on the concrete pavement.

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Li Bing swung his arm down sharply.

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The two soldiers in the front held ballistic shields with their left hands, bodies leaning forward, the shield faces angled slightly forward. The assaulters behind them huddled entirely within the shields' shadow.

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Eighteen soldiers advanced in two assault columns at a low crouch, their combat boots barely making a sound on the concrete pavement.

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Thirty meters covered in an instant.

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The two soldiers in front held ballistic shields in their left hands, bodies leaning forward. The shield faces were angled slightly ahead, and the assaulters behind them were completely hidden in the shields’ shadow.

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Two combat engineers slipped out from the rear of the formation, dropped to one knee, and aimed hydraulic cutters at the chain on the gate.

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Thirty meters—gone in an instant.

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With a crisp *click*, the galvanized chain, as thick as a thumb, snapped cleanly.

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Two combat engineers slipped out from the rear of the formation, dropped to one knee, and aimed hydraulic cutters at the chain on the gate.

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Xu Qiang kicked the hinge side of the door. The heavy iron gate swung inward with a bang and slammed against the wall with a dull thunder.

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With a crisp *click*, the galvanized chain—thumb-thick—snapped cleanly.

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The sound exploded through the empty compound.

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Xu Qiang kicked the hinge side of the door. The heavy iron gate swung inward with a bang and slammed against the wall with a dull thunder.

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Over a dozen zombies on the plaza turned as one, their gray-green faces oriented toward the gate. Guttural roars tore from their throats as they charged, arms flailing.

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The sound detonated across the empty compound.

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"Shield wall!" Li Bing ordered in a low voice.

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More than a dozen zombies on the plaza turned as one. Their gray-green faces oriented toward the gate, and guttural roars ripped from their throats as they charged—arms flailing.

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The four soldiers in the front rank stepped forward simultaneously, slamming their ballistic shields onto the ground to form a waist-high metal defensive line.

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“Shield wall!” Li Bing ordered in a low voice.

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"Fire!"

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The four soldiers in the front rank stepped forward together, slamming their ballistic shields onto the ground to form a waist-high metal defensive line.

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Four rifles opened fire simultaneously, the shots staggered and precise.

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“Fire!”

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The six leading zombies took hits to the chest and head. Black blood splattered across the concrete, and their bodies stumbled and fell.

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Four rifles opened fire at once. The shots were staggered and precise.

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More zombies kept pouring from the office building and dormitory blocks, their numbers growing.

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The six leading zombies took hits to the chest and head. Black blood splattered across the concrete. Their bodies stumbled and fell.

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Li Bing's gaze stayed steady. He adjusted tactics swiftly:

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More zombies kept pouring out from the office building and the dormitory blocks, their numbers swelling by the second.

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"First Squad, left flank—suppress the dormitory direction. Second Squad, right flank—block the office building exit. Remainder, advance step by step, push the line inward!"

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Li Bing’s gaze stayed steady. He adjusted tactics without hesitation.

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The soldiers moved forward in steady cadence, shields always facing front, assaulters alternating fire from behind the shields.

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“First Squad—left flank. Suppress the dormitory direction. Second Squad—right flank. Block the office building exit. The rest of you—advance step by step. Push the line inward!”

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Each volley dropped four or five zombies. Black blood spread large dark-brown stains across the plaza.

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The soldiers moved forward in a steady cadence. Shields stayed facing front, while the assaulters behind them alternated fire.

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Shen Weizhen crouched behind the wreckage of a car across the street. A blue holographic interface floated before his eyes.

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Each volley dropped four or five zombies. Black blood spread across the plaza in large, dark-brown stains.

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On the map, the red dots inside the Armed Forces Department compound were decreasing; green dots steadily advanced.

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Across the street, Shen Weizhen crouched behind the wreckage of a car. A blue holographic interface floated before his eyes.

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"Yang Hong, Third Squad, maintain watch on the west and north alleyways. The gunfire might attract surrounding zombie groups."

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On the map, the red dots inside the Armed Forces Department compound were shrinking, while green dots steadily advanced.

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"Third Squad received. Observation posts set up on both directions. No unusual movement yet."

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“Yang Hong, Third Squad—keep watch on the west and north alleyways. The gunfire might draw in surrounding zombie groups.”

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Inside the compound, the assault line pushed to the center of the plaza.

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“Third Squad received. Observation posts are set on both directions. No unusual movement yet.”

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The largest number of zombies—at least sixty or seventy—poured out of the dormitory building, crowding the entrance in a black mass.

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Inside the compound, the assault line pressed toward the center of the plaza.

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Xu Qiang led Second Squad to occupy the flowerbed cover on the east side of the plaza, using the terrain for targeted elimination.

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The largest wave—at least sixty or seventy zombies—poured out of the dormitory building, crowding the entrance in a black mass.

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His marksmanship was clearly superior to the ordinary soldiers; his aimed shots mostly landed between the head and neck, rarely requiring a follow-up.

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Xu Qiang led Second Squad to take cover in the flowerbed on the east side of the plaza, using the terrain to eliminate targets with surgical precision.

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On the other side, First Squad, under Li Bing's lead, headed straight for the armory.

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His marksmanship was clearly beyond the ordinary soldiers’. Most of his aimed shots landed between the head and neck, rarely needing a follow-up.

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The armory was located at the deepest part of the compound—a single-story brick-and-concrete building with a heavy blast door firmly shut. A dozen or so zombies wandered at the entrance.

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On the other side, First Squad—under Li Bing’s lead—headed straight for the armory.

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Li Bing made a hand signal. Two scouts looped around from the flank and tossed two empty soda cans.

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The armory sat at the deepest part of the compound: a single-story brick-and-concrete building with a heavy blast door sealed shut. At the entrance, a dozen or so zombies wandered aimlessly.

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The *clatter* sounded on the far side of the armory. The dozen zombies immediately took the bait, snarling as they surged toward the noise.

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Li Bing signaled with his hand.

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"Open fire."

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Two scouts looped around from the flank and tossed two empty soda cans.

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The four assaulters of First Squad rose simultaneously and fired precise semi-automatic shots.

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*Clatter.*

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The dozen zombies never even had time to turn before they were all shot in the head and dropped to the ground.

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The sound carried from the far side of the armory. The dozen zombies immediately took the bait, snarling as they surged toward the noise.

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Li Bing walked up to the blast door.

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“Open fire.”

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A combat engineer crouched to inspect it for a few seconds, then stood and turned:

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The four assaulters of First Squad rose in unison and fired precise semi-automatic shots.

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"Squad Leader, it's a Level 6 blast rating. Pure mechanical lock. No key, no code. Conventional tools won't touch it."

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The zombies didn’t even get time to turn. All twelve were shot in the head and dropped to the ground.

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"Leave two men on guard. Main force returns to the plaza. Clear all zombies first."

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Li Bing walked up to the blast door.

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By then, the fight in the plaza was nearly over.

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A combat engineer crouched to inspect it for a few seconds, then stood and turned.

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The thirty-plus zombies that had rushed out of the office building were split and eliminated by Second Squad. Only the last dozen remained from the dormitory.

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“Squad Leader, it’s a Level 6 blast rating. Pure mechanical lock. No key, no code. Conventional tools won’t touch it.”

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Seeing First Squad returning, Xu Qiang immediately ordered a general assault. Both squads advanced in a pincer formation, their overlapping fire covering the final zone of the plaza.

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“Leave two men on guard. Main force returns to the plaza. Clear all zombies first.”

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A dozen minutes later, the last zombie fell at the dormitory steps. The compound plaza was completely cleared.

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By then, the fight in the plaza was nearly over.

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Shen Weizhen stepped into the compound, walking across the black-blood-stained plaza.

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The thirty-plus zombies that had rushed out of the office building were split apart and eliminated by Second Squad. Only the last dozen remained from the dormitory.

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"Report."

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When First Squad returned, Xu Qiang immediately ordered a general assault. Both squads advanced in a pincer formation, their overlapping fire covering the final zone of the plaza.

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"The perimeters of all three buildings—office, dormitory, and armory—are clear," Li Bing said, standing at attention.

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A dozen minutes later, the last zombie fell at the dormitory steps. The compound plaza was completely cleared.

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"The armory blast door is intact. Cannot force-break from outside."

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Shen Weizhen stepped into the compound, crossing the plaza stained with black blood.

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"Xu Qiang, Second Squad clears the office building, floor by floor from the top down. Watch the corners of rooms. Li Bing, First Squad clears the dormitory, room by room. Two combat engineers stay to study the armory blast door. Prefer technical opening; if not, prepare for directional breaching."

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“Report.”

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The two squads split up. The office building's corridors were long and narrow, most office doors on both sides wide open, obstructing visibility—ideal terrain for ambush.

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“The perimeters of all three buildings—office, dormitory, and armory—are clear,” Li Bing said, standing at attention.

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Xu Qiang walked at the very front of the column, making hand signals. Soldiers moved in pairs, hugging the walls. At each office door they paused for two seconds to listen and locate sounds, then quickly slipped in to clear.

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“The armory blast door is intact. We can’t force-break it from outside.”

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At the end of the third-floor corridor, inside the meeting room, five zombies were alarmed by the footsteps and slammed against the door frantically.

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“Xu Qiang, Second Squad clears the office building, floor by floor from the top down. Watch the corners of rooms. Li Bing, First Squad clears the dormitory, room by room. Two combat engineers stay behind to study the armory blast door. Prefer technical opening—if not, prepare for directional breaching.”

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Xu Qiang raised a hand to halt the soldiers. One soldier took out an entrenching tool and lightly tapped the wall with its handle.

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The two squads split up.

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The banging from the meeting room grew more violent, and soon cracks appeared in the door panel.

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The office building’s corridors were long and narrow, and most office doors on both sides were left wide open, obstructing visibility—perfect terrain for ambush.

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Xu Qiang stepped back two paces, gun muzzle aimed at the doorway.

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Xu Qiang walked at the very front of the column, making hand signals. The soldiers moved in pairs, hugging the walls. At each office door, they paused for two seconds to listen and locate sounds, then slipped in quickly to clear the room.

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*Bam!* The door panel shattered. Five zombies burst out, roaring.

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At the end of the third-floor corridor, inside the meeting room, five zombies were alerted by the footsteps. They slammed against the door frantically.

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*Bang bang bang—*

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Xu Qiang raised a hand to halt the soldiers. One soldier took out an entrenching tool and lightly tapped the wall with its handle.

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The three in front were shot in the head on the spot and fell.

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The banging from the meeting room grew more violent, and soon cracks appeared in the door panel.

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The two behind kept coming, still lunging forward.

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Xu Qiang stepped back two paces, gun muzzle aimed at the doorway.

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Xu Qiang sidestepped the first zombie's grab, swung the rifle stock sideways, and smashed it into the side of the zombie's head near the ear. The zombie lost its balance, toppled sideways, and Xu Qiang followed up by planting a foot on its head and finishing it with one shot.

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*Bam!* The door panel shattered. Five zombies burst out, roaring.

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The last one was dropped by the soldiers behind.

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*Bang bang bang—*

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Xu Qiang straightened up, holstering his weapon. As he was about to continue the advance, his peripheral vision caught the door of the archive room at the end of the corridor.

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The three in front were shot in the head on the spot and fell.

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He walked over and pushed. The door didn't budge.

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The two behind kept coming, still lunging forward.

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He crouched to peer through the gap beneath the door. It was pitch-black inside; he couldn't see anything, but there was clearly something heavy pressing against the door from the other side.

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Xu Qiang sidestepped the first zombie’s grab, swung the rifle stock sideways, and smashed it into the side of the zombie’s head near the ear. The zombie lost its balance, toppled sideways, and Xu Qiang followed up by planting a foot on its head and finishing it with one shot.

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Xu Qiang's voice came through the intercom, a note lower than before:

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The last one was dropped by the soldiers behind.

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"Commander, something's off with the archive room on the third floor. The door is locked from the inside. No light comes through the bottom gap, but something is blocking the door from behind. It won't move."

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Xu Qiang straightened up and holstered his weapon. Just as he was about to continue the advance, his peripheral vision caught the archive room door at the end of the corridor.

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Shen Weizhen stopped in his tracks on the plaza.

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He walked over and pushed.

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The door didn’t budge.

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He crouched to peer through the gap beneath the door. It was pitch-black inside. He couldn’t see anything, but something heavy was clearly pressing against the door from the other side.

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Xu Qiang’s voice came through the intercom, lower than before.

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“Commander, something’s off with the archive room on the third floor. The door is locked from the inside. No light comes through the bottom gap, but something is blocking the door from behind. It won’t move.”

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Shen Weizhen stopped in his tracks on the plaza.